Open Poetry #11 |
the candles. . . |
Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
*Gallery Reading Room* Thanks to Rainbow Girl for the inspiration the candles are still burning today they said that they would be all burnt out by now we were sure of it for they had been through a lot the wax all melted and pooled at the bottom, wicks not trimmed properly, down to the last but every night when we left, sure that they would be gone the next day they would be there still when we returned, wax renewed, wicks trimmed and proper the flames of each burning proud and strong almost in defiance, as if to say "we will not die, we will continue" and every day, we put them through their paces we used them to light our way to shine in the darkness to give us hope and strength to warm us when we were cold to speak to us when we were lonely to sing to us when we were sad we would group them together to shine brighter and they would, as if being together made them stronger but still, at the end of the day, they would be almost gone and just before the last of the wick disappeared, we would be done with them for the day, and we would blow out the flame why we didn't throw them away, we had no idea, they were always there, we knew that they would return so, we just kept them, knowing that we would be able to use them again and again. . . then came the day that we really needed the candles we had become lost and cold, lonely and sad more than usual we hoarded the candles, we used them without care bonded them together and forced them to do things for us mattered not that they were not meant to be used in this way we didn't care, all we knew was that as long as we blew out the flames before the wicks disappeared, we would have them still to use the next day. . . that's when a cry came from the back of the room, one of us had used his candle too long the wick had gone and all that was left was a burnt and cold lump of wax it wouldn't even hold a flame it had died. . . . . . we had killed it. . . and the other candles, as if sensing this, lowered their flames in respect. . . and in sorrow and mourning. . . for their lost light. . . and one by one, they themselves burnt out too. . . and we cried, and screamed. . . . . . for without the candles we were nothing we were lost we were cold we were lonely we were scared but we could do nothing but look on in horror as our candles died. . . . . . for we did not know that as they died, so too would we die. . . . . . for the flame that was their life was our life as well and as they shined, so too did we shine. . . as they warmed, so too did we warm others as they sang, so too did we sing to those alone as they comforted, so too did we comfort them this is why they would always be there when we returned because just as we needed them, they needed us they needed us to shine their light to a dark and lonely world they needed us to warm a cold and icy world they needed us to sing to a lonely and sad world they needed us to comfort a frightened and angry world. . . they needed us and we used them and we used the and we used th and we used t and we used and we use and we us and we u and we and w and an a and now? one flame still flickers. . . ----------------------------------------------------------------- < !signature--> That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl [This message has been edited by Sven (edited 12-27-2000).] |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
And now... I wish I knew. Superb story. Sandra |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
RG is always casting rainbows on inspiration...well done Sven... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and every day, we put them through their paces we used them to light our way to shine in the darkness to give us hope and strength to warm us when we were cold to speak to us when we were lonely to sing to us when we were sad we would group them together to shine brighter and they would, as if being together made them stronger ====================== very cool poem Sven... well written and cool presentation ... and the gift of inspiration from another poet makes it even cooler well done gallery poet jm Some people find subtlety in strangers if you find anything~let me in Your eyes~you see everything my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
and now.... I would make a wish that they would burn till eternity but the thruth the flame died suddenly and today we had to say Goodbye. ~~~~~~~~~~~~ `thank you for sharing this poem, today I had to say "Goodbye" to my uncle.. he was like a father for me. reading your words, made me think on his candle. and his candle showed us faith, strength and hope.... Charisma |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
"and as they shined, so too did we shine. . . as they warmed, so too did we warm others as they sang, so too did we sing to those alone as they comforted, so too did we comfort them" Wow... this is a magnificant poem. I am literally speechless with this one. I can't tell you how it touched me. Thank you for writing it. "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Passions Voice Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 291Michigan |
This is absolutely amazing. You do have a gift for these types of things you know. Thank you. passion is life. . . ~Diana |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sven this poem touched me rare and true it was a gift from both of you a gifted promise out of the blue a chance to walk in another's shoe I heard the song, for me to hear means I let go of something drear and learned to rise without a fear Now I ask you, where to from here? the candle flame is nearly gone to live your life and sing your song that which gives light, cannot go on without reciprocal faith to make it strong the message in the candle's burn is everyday we live and learn we breathe, renew, with each world's turn but one day there will be no return Sorry couldn't help it. This poem moved me to tears of joy or otherwise and I had to respond in kind. Keth Religion is for people frightened about going to hell - Spirituality is for people who have been there. Anon. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Sandra, so do I. . . thank you my friend. . . Sunshine, thank you. . . she really cast a big one on me!! Jan, glad that you liked. . . Charisma, I am glad that I could help. . . the flame still flickers. . . LoveBug, thank you for reading it. . . and I'm honored. . . Diana, thank you my friend. . . and I know. . . Kethry, thank you so much. . . your words are perfect. . . --------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Sven, your story telling style is amazing. Loved it, well done dear man. *s* On the wings of words our spirits fly, and our souls are free. Donna Smith |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
And I light a candle in honour of all those with a similar tale to tell.. Simply beautiful Sven.. Isis *The heart of education is the education of the heart...* ~Isis~~Sovereign of the Spirit. |
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athena4 Senior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 622 |
Sven, I'm still breathless from such intense beauty. You are truly an artist, and your words embrace us all. I wish for you your flame to always be glowing, and the candle in your heart to shed light always. Much love, Elise |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
Sven, you have lit a candle that burns on in the words that you write. As long as your poetry can be read I know that flame will always burn bright. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sven~ Such lovely thoughts to burn from inspiration. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Another masterpiece to hang on the gallery walls....wise words here. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Sven~ What a most beautifuly inspired piece...well penned my friend ~HUGS~ Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
I like it a lot,my friend |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Sven love, how did I miss this beauty, don't tell me I've been misusing my candle. You do and I'll clump you, well, I would if I got the chance. I promise, I'll be good, I always am, aren't I? (Watch the answer kid, I'm getting some lift in my tail ) You know I love this, of course you do, and I really and truly do. This really is a beauty love. Absolutely divine Take care love Mushy Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
There you see what you made me forget love, you shouldn't distract me, The library for this too. I could lie and say I'm busy, well I am, but not excessivly so, I just forgot. I shall have to get a new memory from supplies love. Take care Mushy Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
GS, thank you so much my friend. . . Isis, as do I my friend. . . for they need to be remembered. . . thank you. . . Elise, I wish the same for you my friend. . . thank you for reading. . . inot2B, thank you. . . I hope that I can warm someone just for a moment. . . Marge, inspiration is the kindling that we use to make the flame brighter. . . thank you. . . Elizabeth, thank you my friend. . . tracie. . . thank you so much. . . vandana, I'm glad you liked my friend. . . Marsha, Marsha, Marsha. . . thank you love. . . yes, you are always good. . .and yes, I know that you love this one. . . and thank you for everything love. . . and those new memories are on their way. . . ----------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Sven... one of your strongest and most memorable pieces to date. i shall forever cherish this for many reasons one in particular because it really hit home. thank you for the reminder of what's really important in life. as always you write with true grace and honor. me loves ya for that! take care. amy ~A true friend is one soul in two bodies~ |
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