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| Open Poetry #11 |
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Not Looking |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Not Looking we think we know we do indeed when first we see the love of need but we are looking we think it taunts this love of want when wink of eye causes a sigh but we are looking but it is when we do not look that by hook and by crook love finds us when we are not looking drops in, comes by ‘round the corner a sound on the hie like a little trick on you and sprinkles ‘round little clues love finds us when we are not looking sets up a treasure seek little bit of hide and peek bit of dancing cheek to cheek and like ripples in a creek leads me on and on and on leading to that new day’s dawn then akin to lovely lace you see the face you note the grace and all the past has been erased love finds us when we are not looking so I shall never ever look ‘cause it seems I’m already took [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 12-27-2000).] |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari love, as always this is a pure wonder, and I really do love it. I thank you for the gift of delight your poetry has given me over this holiday. You have truly soared. I love it Take care Majestic Marsha  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
So - here I am reading away - happy as a clam - strolling down your poetic pathway - and then comes: "so I shall never ever look ‘cause it seems I’m already took" and I felt myself falling as if you'd sprung a trapdoor - really cute ending |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Sunshine, followed this one through times two, and plan on coming back. Wonderful! Tickled. *Peace. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
So very true your words and wisdom in this one my friend. Very wonderfully put and I absolutely fell into the cadence of this one. A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses. author unknown |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very cute, Karilea! Denise |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Sure is funny, sunshine, how things can come when one is not even looking, as you describe so well. I know I wasn't even LOOKING for a pain in the butt when Toerag showed up!  |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
love the ending my friend. . . all too true. . . -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Marsha, so glad you enjoyed the lilt...thank you... Mr. Yeats, don't you love a twist? This one was poetic fun...through and through... SpitFire, you are more than welcome any time...glad you enjoyed!... Mark, glad you skipped along this one with me...it just tripped out.... Thanks denise!... 'Deer....now if I ever was NOT expecting a response like that, this is the one!...ROTFLMAO Sven, thank you!... |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
"like a little trick on you" LOVE this line, Karilea.... great write, this one... you get better and better, miss poet~! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I've some masters to learn from Ms. Doreen...you included!...Thank you! |
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Lana Member
since 2000-12-26
Posts 68 |
liked this one! |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Sunshine, this is such a treasure you have written here... Always a pleasure to read your poetry dear lady... Coco ItsAkeeper4me |
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Lady Lightning Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 422Kentucky |
How I smiled when I read this..  Seems like it always sneaks up on us when we are least expecting it...And the ending was so unexpected...Very good...liked it much.. ~LL~The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost. author unknown |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ Delightful ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I'm NOT looking... I'm NOT NOT NOT... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Lana, thank you...it likes me too... Coco, you keep digging up those treasures, y'hear?...thank you... Lady, that you shared your smile with me makes the writing worthwhile, thank you... Marge...so are you!... Nan, you sure about that? Hummm? |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I don't think I've ever been looking...oh well. good poem anyhow. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Passing Shadows, I thank you for the oh well...and I shall wish you the best for the new Century... |
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roselee Junior Member
since 2000-09-22
Posts 26 |
Nicely written, and true. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea--what a wonderfully delightful poem...and the end is just a piece of sunshine with a smile...thanks! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you Roselee... Martie, so glad you liked the smile! Hugs to you... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) Great poem, Sunshine! Yes, the longing of love could hurt sometimes, and many times we just find it when we least expect it. Love will blossom in everybody! Thank you for sharing, my friend! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Quote: "and like ripples in the creek that leads me on and on leading to that new day's dawn". Brilliant imagery and use of metaphor....loved the concept and title of poem...terrific work! Nathan |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hi Sunshine, How true you write. When one is looking forget it, but when one is not looking, gadzooks! What deviltry one can get into. BC |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Noah, you are quite welcome...you will come to learn...I share good things with everyone... Nate, I've always liked your work, thank you for looking in!... Bill...exactly! Thank you! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Yes, we aren't looking and wham! Love this. "Every man dies. Not every man truly lives." Braveheart Kathleen |
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