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One Day
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One Day |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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One day when I'm beautiful When my scars are gone Will you then reach out to me Touch me with your song One day when I'm gorgeous When the skin is healed Will you then return to me By your love annealed One day when I'm pretty Maybe then I'll hide The scars in personality Buried deep inside Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed? Rex E. Alford |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
One Day? That is today...you are lovely NOW..hun...and anybody who doesn't think so? Tell them to talk to me...(flexing muscle and sweating...) you are fantastic today---as you are!!! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
One day when we have our picnic and you bring the food and I bring the wine then all that will happpen and you'll be happy again.... what kind of wine??? very nice poem Kethry! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Our superficial values are insidious ones indeed... Nicely done, Keth..  |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kethry, your beauty is incandescent, it shines with the beauty of a pure soul. Your worth is beyond measure, for the gifts you so freely give. Your spirit is sacred flying high and free. One day is now and look what I can see. This is an amazing poem, you are an amazing woman and I thank you for this beauty. Wonderful work love utterly wonderful  Take care Slushy Mushy  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
Brought tears to my eyes......I think we all feel like this at different times in our lives......Your first stanza, especially, is outstanding. Spoken with a gentleness quite touching. To capture and live a moment is truly living |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Keth... this one touches deep. I relate all to well to this ones emotions ... and I think we all feel this way sometimes, but when old ghosts and scars stay with us it does take its toll on ones self esteem but that is one of the true gifts of poetry we are all beautiful by our words allowing our souls and heart to let the real "us" be seen. very well written and expressed piece from your pen. take care jm There are moments ... when I Love you beyond the limits of my human heart ... ...you will always be mine. Collin Raye |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Kethry, all of your beauty comes from your heart, naturally...today... hugs, Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
One day when I'm beautiful When my scars are gone Will you then reach out to me Touch me with your song" you deserve the song before the healing, the song heals. One day when I'm gorgeous When the skin is healed Will you then return to me By your love annealed Real love waits for no day, in this poem, which broke my heart by the way, love seizes the day for no day is promised to us! "One day when I'm pretty Maybe then I'll hide The scars in personality Buried deep inside" True beauty shines through verse, for it is there that scars mean nothing and the further down you dig for the words, the more meaningful and beautiful they are and the most lasting, unlike scars which only remind us that we are usually alive because of them. This moved me greatly. "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Tony Abbot Member
since 2000-11-18
Posts 209North Wales,UK |
Truly beautiful in its pathos.Brings a tear to the eye. 'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
s'en, that you would flex your muscles for me is a joy, thanks. ethome, I like the wine(whine) of ...love. Nan thank you so much. NOW! can I be registered for the workshop.  Marsha, thanks for the incandescent, it lit up my day. dreamkeeper, thanks for stopping by and commenting. JM, *HuGS* later-perceptive-gator Kathleen, *soft sighs* thanks Tony, thanks,I've been told I'm pathetic.  Be well Kethry Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed? Rex E. Alford |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Kethry.....you ARE beautiful....I say so |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
'Deer, well! if you say it it must be fair dinkum. Be well Kethry Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed? Rex E. Alford |
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DreamSeeker Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 72 |
If I Wait For The Moment Perfect Would I Reconize Its Dawn If I Linger In Pasts Gone Astray Could I Hear Tomorrows Song If I The Mirror Believe Only What I See Should I Ever Become My Dreams Knowing Only I Decide What Is Meant By Me |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
K, I must second all those opinions, as I know you are beautiful right now, and anyone who doesn't see it is a damn fool! Sandra |
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Rainydays Member
since 2000-10-21
Posts 324 |
Kethry, a wonderful poem. There are many kinds of scars and imperfections, whether visible or not, and with them many doubts. It is up to us to allow the truth of who we are to emerge and lead us to tomorrow, by way of today. Excellent writing, my dear! Rainydays |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
DreamSeeker, thank you so much for the stunning poem. I needed to hear that. Cat, I guess beauty must be in the eye of the belholder and I beholden to you for seeing it. Rainydays, Thank you. You make rainbows in my day Be well Kethry Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed? Rex E. Alford |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Hey Kethry, What One day? You are already all that and much more... Take care and many regards, sudhir |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sudhir, Sudhir beloved one Thank you so much. Be well Kethry Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed? Rex E. Alford |
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Eilidh Junior Member
since 2000-08-27
Posts 30 |
Oh wow! (and I hope this works)  to you |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Eilidh, thanks for showing your beautiful heart. Be well Kethry Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed? Rex E. Alford |
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