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Words of Ice
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Words of Ice |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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 Words of Ice zero is the winter morn landscaped white, not forlorn brilliant gleam, casting bright snow fell throughout the night and created this awesome sight  in bundled layers I now seek the quiet time in which to peek inside this my loving heart to carry words that would impart the love I have for you  but caught up in the chill of day caught back in my throat to say how I love you in my way the words are still and quietly lay and solemn is my love for you  oh the beauty of your awesome word that last when it was I heard the way you spoke so tenderly the love that you spoke to me and which I keep here close to see  and now in my warmed memory I whisper your name so quietly the cold air catches my words of nice transforming them into words of ice and they softly float away Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
I do so wish I could see the beauty in the snow. I do see the beauty in the snowflake, but my neighbors, absolutely wonderful people, are traveling today. We had a small amount of snow yesterday, then freezing rain to dress it down. It's supposed to go away by noon, but weather people are so right on I'm still concerned. My daughter is hoping to come for Christmas, too. I think your line near the end, about changing to words of ice is more like how I feel about the snow right now. I hope it floats away. Do you mean, in this piece, then, that the warmth has gone out of your words? I want to know if I understand your main statement. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Virginia, I wish all of your family and friends safe travel over this holiday season... this morning at 5 odd thirty I was letting my Abby out and as I looked around, the light from my deck caught my breath as it floated away in the cold morn air...with the icy crystals around me, the beauty of the scene...the love in my heart for all...these words just came together... Yes, Virginia, there is a Santa Claus, and hopefully there will always be warm in my words...and I thank you for reading... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
"...caught up in the chill of day caught back in my throat to say how I love you in my way the words are still and quietly lay and solemn is my love for you." 'Solemn' love - these words - this love - strikes right to the heart - Unquestionably one of the most beautiful poems you've written - and at least for me - this verse - and 'solemn' really touched me |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice words of ice Sunshine....James |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
these are the warmest "words of ice" I have ever read. . . beautiful my friend. . .  --------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
i found much warmth in your words.. along with so much beauty.. this is wonderful a must read over and over. along with the pictures.. I have to say, *smiling* I adore them snow "...I am a river in winter, quiet in the eyes of most but deep, swift and full of life to one, lucky enough to fall through the ice. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari love, this is one of the most beautiful pieces you have ever written. It is soooooooo calm and serene. And full to the brim of love and warmth I love this I really do. (Okay as always love, but that's your fault you shouldn't always write such wonder  ) Now you why my sisters say I can reverse any situation take care Majestic Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ How pretty. Each thought as unique as each snowflake. Nicely done ! Make mine Hot Chocolate with lots of marshmallows ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
but caught up in the chill of day caught back in my throat to say how I love you in my way the words are still and quietly lay and solemn is my love for you oh the beauty of your awesome word that last when it was I heard the way you spoke so tenderly the love that you spoke to me and which I keep here close to see and now in my warmed memory I whisper your name so quietly the cold air catches my words of nice transforming them into words of ice and they softly float away =========== Sun this poem floats and carries the reader away... written like a whispered promise... the cadence is a perfect melody wonderful writing and the pics were an added treat of the lovley imagery you penned. beautiful poetry. jm Some people find subtlety in strangers if you find anything~let me in Your eyes~you see everything my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
The beauty of this poem could thaw the coldest day... Sunshine, your poetry has moved to a higher level..the combination of words and emotion that you inject blend together so perfectly the poem is not read...it is absorbed. Enough of this hero worship!! The poem is good - I like it - period! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Mr. Yeats, I shall always be grateful for whatever "beautiful" I might be in your life...thank you... Thank you James... Sven, so glad you saw the warm, thank you... Snow, read it as often as you wish, with my blessings, thank you... Marsha, I am indeed full, thank you my friend... Marge, marshmallows as big as pigs...and hot chocolate to swim in... JM, my friend, exactly...thank you... 'Deer, someday, I hope to achieve the level of you, Nan, and so many others...thank you... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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