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In Nine, will Love come?................
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In Nine, will Love come?................ |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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 In Nine, will Love come? In nines, they say, they the crones of girlish yesterday say that I, me, this winsome lass shall know nine decades come to pass now, what shall I then do with nine? most cumbersome be, then most probably shall presumably lose my mind! all I shall ask, nay, all that I ask is to see love but once, nay not twice, nor thrice, but once, blessed he be then with sight of me ...womanly... old crones say nine, nine lives doth a woman have infant, babe, girl, youth, lass, female, woman, matron, sage…all enclosing one great age and love might come to one, or all, …or none but one love, Lord, one love to transcend the night into day's light of delicate delight is all I request of thee… of nine lives that I might have send just one, one true lad one love, one kiss then Lord, see! this essential bliss and conclude in his giving the eternal mystery to live, to love, this love to live if I had but one then the nine might flee away for he shall stay he, this One he shall see me in copper light in moon of night in his soul and not feel the toll of life nor strife but relief for right in his path shall I stand take his hand at God's command he will know 'tis to be so and when he shall come to me this love I have to give to him lonesome whim it is not, my body swells in unrelenting force no remorse for being born a woman not even if I see him in nine. Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 12-21-2000).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Karilea, you have quickly become one of my favorite reads on this site!!! one love, one kiss then Lord, see! this essential bliss and conclude in his giving the eternal mystery to live, to love, this love to live I adore this...methinks you write with ink made of talcum...and your themes are so diverse these days...very intriguing and a treat to read!!! |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief |
Very well done. I enjoyed. |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Sunshine, Fantastic write, very beautiful Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
I give this a 7 perfect 7 |
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John R Member
since 2000-12-14
Posts 141Toledo OH |
Original, well presented and well read. One love is all we can ever really ask for, if there are more then it really couldn't be true love. The joining of two souls is forever. If a dream touches us, it exists to us as anything else that touches us. John |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
please allow me to echo sens eloquent reply ... (twins do that, ya know)  she right ...you are turning out some very creative and unique poetry ... which to me defines the difference between being a poet and being a writer. excellent writing K. jm Some people find subtlety in strangers if you find anything~let me in Your eyes~you see everything my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
This is no seven (7), it is a ten (10). (Bo Derek eat your heart out.) Forgive me if I steal some thoughts from it for a future effort |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Karilea my Sunshine, You have written an epopee. *L* |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
*bowing* Gracious lady, ageless and timeless May I present to thee my words of praise? Sitting there wrapped in such fineness I would wish thee happiness all thy days For thou hast but to ask one time And thy wish shall indeed come true And it will nay be in nine Indeed, now will it come to you For thou art the Sun warm and bright The force that makes our lives whole And in thee and thy bright light Does indeed shine forever, thy soul. . . Karilea, this is absolutey wonderful. . . superb, outstanding, amazing. . . have I run out of words yet??. . . and I must echo Jan and serenity when I say that your writing has indeed become even more wonderful to read. . . whoever your muse is. . . keep them!!!  ----------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari love, I'll give you nine, nine reasons why you are unique and perfect. 1 Talented beyond measure 2 Wise beyond your years 3 Brighter than a treasue 4 Sunlight banishes the fears 5 Poetic poise of superior grace 6 Poet pure and so full of light 7 Fair of form and fair of face 8 Bathe within pure Sunlight 9 Kari the winner of lifes race Truly wonderful love, you know I love this one. Take care Happy Christmas Majestic Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
sunshine...your wisdom shines brightly here. Yes, one - the right one - would make all the difference. You would think that, in nine decades, one would be simple to find.. funny how difficult that can be. This poem is beautifully done... |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is such a beautiful piece. I love the style you used in this one. We all want to find that special someone, don't we? Maybe we should form a support group or something! "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Kari, this is stunningly wonderful. You amaze me. Sandra |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Serenity, who was quicker?...thank you dear... Thank you Effigy and Daniel... WOW...7 has always been a fine number, thank you...and my name has seven letters...yes, it suits me... John R, with the number of fine poets around here, that this should strike you as original pleases me...thank you... JM, I've recently been introduced to some unique ideas, like follows like...thank you... Mr. Yeats, if you bestow a 10, I shall humbly accept. Steal away... Sy, from my Iliad to your Odyssey...it is a beginning, and a road I believe I shall find myself on, to continue the epic...thank you!... Sir Sven, this offer delights mine eyes, I shall keep this, thy gift...and as for these named Muse...I do so share, for they know not one quill, but many...thank you... Marsha, your nine reasons have produced 9000 smiles, thank you... 'Deer...do you know, indeed, how difficult it is to not blink, for fear of missing?...thank you for your kind words... Somewhere, LoveBug, I think a support group has been started in one of the other forums for unrequited love...LOL...let's join... Cat, you have no idea how the word "amaze" delights me...a dream come true...thank you... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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