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nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

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Between the Lines

0 posted 2000-12-20 02:27 PM

to lie beneath the moonlit skies
creating dreams, reflections of
the once upons, as dreamers do
in fullness, flushed from warmth above

twinkling stars, in diamond glow
blanket the night, release their spark
in stillness of the silence heard
transparent thoughts, shall bathe my dark

tracing those that seem to rise
not knowing what to do this day
choices, hard, of loving you
yet meanings loss, sometimes in sway

love me, you, and chase those fears
make chances last the efforts out
hold me, arms, and "still" my heart
I need to know, to quell this doubt

until our rhythms are in sync
each breath I share, from lips that kiss
withholds a part of me inside
that wants escape, this "feel of risk"

true to change, allowing growth
to everlast, in loving one
with all that is, and all I am
the want of you, compares to none

the pleasures there, awaits the key
the brassiness may tarnish, yet
behind the locked, the treasure waits
if only deeds, one can forget...

a melted heart, is in your hands
to mold, become, to lift the storm
of loneliness that etches frost
in memories, that one has worn

in moments lost, too few, yet harsh
the hurt that spins these silken threads
that weave their twist and tangled web
will leave me gone, alone my stead....

~Wynter's Despair

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"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

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Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

1 posted 2000-12-20 03:09 PM

nicely written..maybe Web of Despair..just a thought..enjoyed reading with or without a title hon..ha..HUGS

~Victoria~

A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

2 posted 2000-12-20 05:21 PM

Enjoyed and my suggestion for a title is "Loving You". James

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

3 posted 2000-12-20 05:44 PM

Thanks Victoria...I was kind of in despair when writing this.. I like that

and James I like "Loving You", also

thankyou both...
~Wynter< !signature-->

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

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Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

4 posted 2000-12-20 06:17 PM

Hello, dear one. How about "Help me love you again" ??????
Be happy, please ...
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Live for love. Without love, you don't live.

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Poeminister
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since 2000-02-26

Posts 1862
Regina SK; Canada

5 posted 2000-12-20 06:38 PM

"love me, you, and chase those fears
make chances last the efforts out
hold me, arms, and "still" my heart
I need to know, to quell this doubt"

Nakdthoughts--Lovely write. How about "Hold Me"...??

Poeminister

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

6 posted 2000-12-20 06:47 PM

"In the misty moonlight"

"If you live to be a hundred, I want to live to be a hundred minus one day,
so I never have to live without you."

Winnie the Pooh

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

7 posted 2000-12-21 12:38 PM

Interloper-
I am trying hard, really I am. Nothing seems to be helping now except when I write, I can see my hidden feelings. Thank you

I always am fond of your words and responses.

~Wynter

Poeminister- "Hold Me" if you only knew how much that would help, but one cannot have everything they wish for

..thank you...

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

8 posted 2000-12-21 12:41 PM

Irish Rose- I do love the moonlight...maybe In Moonlit Hold...see all of you have me thinking and combining now...thank you

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

Nate Dogg
Senior Member

since 1999-11-15

Posts 1658
Georgia, Fulton

9 posted 2000-12-21 01:03 AM

Let me see, Despair of love, Please love me,
Web of love...I wouldn't be able to give a poem like this a good title cause it has scattered thoughts and no solid ground.....anyways I enjoyed the poem and I think it's a brilliant piece of work!

Nathan

John R
Member

since 2000-12-14

Posts 141
Toledo OH

10 posted 2000-12-21 01:53 AM

Well written verse Wynter. How about "In A Dream's Soothsay"

If a dream touches us, it exists to us as anything else that touches us.
John

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

11 posted 2000-12-21 06:36 AM

Nathan- "Scattered Thoughts" huh...and just what might you be reading...

thank you...maybe that is the problem..I don't feel I am on "solid ground"

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

12 posted 2000-12-21 06:39 AM

I like your title John...thank you, I sure wish I could make it less of a dreamer's though...but you know how life is...

thank you again, huggzz

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

13 posted 2000-12-21 07:14 AM

very well written....how about 'The Key To Loving Me' just a thought...man you sure look like Maureen......thanks for sharing....ethome

RobertB
Senior Member

since 1999-09-26

Posts 1104
Champaign, IL

14 posted 2000-12-21 08:00 AM

well..I am stumped as to a title.

I thought at first with the references to stars and moonlight that maybe a title with the thought of something universal....solar or maybe galactic....but then you would have to weave more outer space references throughout the whole poem and that maybe would be more than you were needing to say.

I have many poems that never will have a title. It is best for them I think. Forget what I want!

Robert

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

15 posted 2000-12-21 08:14 AM

hey E..I am Maureen..you are silly... thank you..gave me my first smile of the day and believe me I needed it ...huggzzzzzzz and I didn't think anyone would notice.

~Wynter... Moonchild

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

16 posted 2000-12-21 08:18 AM

well Robert..I guess that is why I haven't been able to title it, although I really am not jumping around...just a bit confused in my life at the moment...body tells you one thing and mind another..and the doubts rise and there you have it..maybe I Am Not On Solid Ground as Nate has expressed above...and sometimes it's just an underlying message for someone. Oh how tired I feel today..but thank you for stopping to read and comment.

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

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