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You're Ordinary.........???
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You're Ordinary.........??? |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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You say you're only ordinary? Sweetheart, don't you see The love that pours from out my heart And what you mean to me? The pyramids are ordinary! Pointed piles of stone! You, my dear, with your sweet face Could make a pharoah moan! The Mona Lisa? Ordinary!!!! Just a bunch of paint! Some people think it;s beautiful But, next to you, it ain't!!! A sunrise is considered pretty Ordinarily But can't compare to your glow when You're lying next to me. Niagra Falls is just some water Falling out of view But isn't close to imitating How I fell for you! The Seven Wonders of the World I do consider great. If I'm allowed to cast my vote You will be number eight! You're beautiful, my sweetheart, and You brighten all my days. Your beauty always shines in Extra-ordinary ways!!!  |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Balladeer~  So very sweet! -SEA |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
well this poem ain't ordinary, no way, not from a poet with exra ordinary talent. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
or-di-nary, n., [OFr & ML: OFr ordinairie]L, 1(a) an official having jurisdiction within a specificed area by right of the office he or she holds; esp. a bishop having such jurisdiction within his own dioceses; adj., 1 customary; usual; regular; normal... Well in one light, I would say that you were ordinary...but only as a noun.... LOL...OK Deer...let her go...she needs to breathe! |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
~*Sigh*~ She is very lucky, and there is nothing ordinary about that! Much enjoyed this 'deer! ~Sheri "The things that come to those that wait may be the things left by those who got there first" |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Bal~ this was just so darn precious and sweet. i love it when you write like this my friend! beautiful display of your heart. lucky gal she is  take care.]~amy~ ~A true friend is one soul in two bodies~ |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
'Deer, Very extra-ordinary, I love this one it is truly excellant, and wonderful. really superb poem. (I won't slip into french love, it's just a little to late for my tongue to be doing accents )Fabulous work, and she's a very lucky fille. Take care Mushy (Sorry I couldn't help it )Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Evening Balladeer, You have tapped your very heart for your sweetheart, and it shows in this writing. Well done. BC [This message has been edited by Bill Charles (edited 12-19-2000).] |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Mr. 'Deer.... This was so wonderful to read. It's always nice to hear a man express his feelings, and you really are a master of that!! No wonder you are a 'balladeer'!!  Write on! -<--<--{(@ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
extraordinary....with smiles, hugs, and winks!!! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The pyramids are ordinary! Pointed piles of stone! You, my dear, with your sweet face Could make a pharoah moan! The Mona Lisa? Ordinary!!!! Just a bunch of paint! Some people think it;s beautiful But, next to you, it ain't!!! ================= your so clever and cute... what a way to smoooooze her and make her swoon. this ones so sweet its drawing honey bees BUT ya know what I noticed????? you failed to compare her to Spam!!!!  LOLOH WELL ... its still swell later-comparison shopper-gator jm |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
'Deer aww that's so sweet, You know you can get pills to help manage this adolescent crisis you're going through  Kethry Religion is for people frightened about going to hell - Spirituality is for people who have been there. Anon. |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I'm just smiling here at how you got a 5 syllable word like "ordinarily" to stand on it's own in a line and flow so perfectly with the rhythm ... but you did! What a wonderfully spirited poem. Loved this Michael! Best wishes, /Kit |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Shucks Bal, I'm all embarrassed now....*g* Seriously, it's loving, kind and humorous, just what I expect from a clown... HUSG |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
such variety in your writing Balladeer ..another one to enjoy ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
 lovely deery...enjoyed ~Victoria~ |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
My husband has been dishing out that kind of bull to me for over 30 years and I love it. I know your special friend loves it to. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Sounds like a perfect romance to me.. Work those love poems... Sandra |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
You have a way of making us all feel special...with every word you write... |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
and I thouhgt it would be just another ordinary poem from you bal... but you had to go and make it extra. next you'll be writing simple poems... that ain't, and ugly poems that are great. and stupid poems that are smart and stinky poems that are sweet oh, well a lousy poet you arn't. Parker |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Okay so now you are going to set the standards of flatery so high for the ladies that us "ORDINARY" men can't meet them and then you shall have them all to yourself. Is that the plan my friend? Wonderfully exquisite piece my friend. So tell us, how did this wonder of the world happen into your life? She is doing wonders for your pen lately and just from that alone I can see that she truely must be the eigth wonder of the world. A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses. author unknown |
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Cassandra Junior Member
since 2000-12-16
Posts 48Charlotte, North Carolina, USA |
How beautiful. You definitely know how to make a heart melt! That was incredibly sweet. Fantastic read! --Cassandra |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
What a lovely poem!!!!!!! "If you live to be a hundred, I want to live to be a hundred minus one day, so I never have to live without you." Winnie the Pooh |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
You are a rascal and a scalawag. Now give us men some room! lol - Neat theme. I really enjoyed the tightness of the stanzas. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
Whew!my ordinary response would be "thanks for the poem" but this one can't be for me because there's nothin' ordinary on this side of the screen... LOL.... soooo i'm really VERY relieved.. i thought you mighta fallen in love with me or something... geesh... not that you're not a great guy and everything... y'know?... but this dor's been locked for so long, letting someone as special as you in could possibly cause a major shift in the foundation of the whole durn house and i'm not sure it would be a good idea, babe anyway, cute poem, sweet Michael and even though it's not for me, i still love you! *wink* (just ring the bell, ok?) |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
lucky the woman to whom you dedicate this to.... and lucky me for reading this |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
SEA...thank you for the sweet, my sweet brian...I thank you. Great to see you! sunshine...take me as a noun...unless you're open to a preposition Irie...thank you for the sigh!!! I LOVE sighs! Amy...you are so kind!!! Thank you! Marsha...you slip into French love any time you want! You are always so nice...thank you! Bill...I thank you for the read and your thoughtfulness... sunny1..thank you! Isn't it funny how it's so much easier on paper than in spoken form? Your comments are VERY appreciated... serenity...smiles, hugs and winks....all from you? My cup runneth over!!! janet Marie...compare her to spam? Now you backed me against the wall...NOTHING compares to spam!! (unless it's a woman with spammy kisses )Kethry...ROFL!!! Are my zits showing? Kit..only YOU would point that out and recognize it! THANK YOU!!!! Rainbow...you KNOW how I feel about being your clown....I LOVE IT!!! Wynter...well, it IS the spice of life! Thank you for enjoying... Victoria...thank you for the flowers! They are beautiful..and so are your thoughts inot2B...BULL! you call my heartfelt words BULL?! You ARE always observant! Yes, allow him the pleasure of continuing.I'm sure you deserve every word of them catalinamoon..I wish...but nothing is ever perfect. We just try and hope for the best. Thank you... Paula...I thank you....and you ARE! Parker...as long as I don't get those orders reversed! Thank you for the clever and appreciated response...all I REALLY wanna do is write cowboy poetry...but that's your dep't Mark...no standards could be set so high that YOU couldn't meet them! You kidding? Wonders of the world don't happen,,,they just are. If we get lucky enough, we can stand in the presence of one at times... Cassandra...thank you for melting Rose...simple words with much feeling..thank you! LGA...thank you! I heard you like tight things! Doreen...you got that right! Ain't nothing ordinary there and far be it from me to shake foundations! I'll be glad to ring your bell...you have done that for me many times kaile...and lucky for me to have someone like you to appreciate it! Thank you VERY much |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Well, there's nothing ordinary about you either! Great poem! Denise |
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shinamoon Junior Member
since 2000-12-07
Posts 15Daytona Beach, usa |
I really like this, i only wish someone would truly feel that way about me can I borrow someone's tissues please great poem |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
This is wonderful, Deer. You write an awesome love letter! Corinne |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Balladeer~         Did you really mean it ? WOW ! That's SOME tribute ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Geesh...no wonder these pieces take so long to load...especially when you've been SPAMMED! Marge, I'm ROTFLMAO! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
Marge-- ROFL!!! so good it's gone!!! i can't stop laughing..... ARGHHHHHHHHHH BRILLIANT, 'Deer friend |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Marge, you are a WILD WOMAN!!! Ya see how that Spam fits right in with those other wonders and even dwarfs them???? THANK YOU, Marge, for giving it the recognition it deserves. That's why it's best served on Wonder bread!! |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
No-one could ever feel ordinary again, after having such a poem written for them. Beautiful Merry Christmas Isis *I believe every time you put your words to paper, you change. Each feeling is set free, and you may follow.....* ~Isis~~Sovereign of the Spirit. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I forgot to put this in my library, and darn, now I want a spam sandwich......Treet...with mustard on rye...please , oh please!!!!!!!!! "If you live to be a hundred, I want to live to be a hundred minus one day, so I never have to live without you." Winnie the Pooh |
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oh2beme Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 215NV USA |
What a lucky woman!!!!!! Very beautifully written. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I truly enjoyed this piece ball.......nice one here.......lucky gal..  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A good poet brought this up to the top again...so I read it again, why not? 'Deer, you have SUCH a way with you... be well my friend, and HNY... |
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