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ma miller
Senior Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 806

0 posted 2000-12-19 09:30 AM

from four seasons

winter's day blurs the night
with its coldly freeze
and its blending grays
and its voiceless snow

spring's day bares the babes
with its peekly greens
and its blooming lays
and its deathless grow

summer's day frees the kids
with its sunly screens
and its swimming ways
and its boisterous glow

autumn's day paints the woods
with its brushly clean
and its freshening rays
and its drabless flow

my day feels them all
with my boldly scenes
and my scribbling plays
and my thoughtless know

i come from four seasons

m.a. miller

11.10.00

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My calling before me, let quill be my offering;
For to be called poet, no greater gift to receive.

M.A.

[This message has been edited by MA Miller (edited 12-19-2000).]

Poeminister
Senior Member

since 2000-02-26

Posts 1862
Regina SK; Canada

1 posted 2000-12-19 12:14 PM

Good day,
I love this and the font colours for the seasons. The indentations are very effective too. Nicely done.

Poeminister

"...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls-
O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love."
-Poe

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

2 posted 2000-12-19 12:16 PM

Me too! Well done!

jwesley

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

3 posted 2000-12-19 08:09 PM

MAMiller~
This is very effectively done.
The blending of the words -
into the colors -
into the seasons is most appealing.

I sure hope more get to take a peek at this beauty.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Aimster
Member Elite

since 2000-02-19

Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC

4 posted 2000-12-19 08:55 PM

MA~
really beautiful, the way you structured
this! loved the blending of the colors
to go with each season. wonderful! take
care.
~amy~

~A true friend is one soul in two bodies~

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

5 posted 2000-12-19 09:41 PM

Mark...
this is very well done ....
excellent imagery and use of descriptive metaphor
also enjoyed the unique rhyme scheme ...
the repetative pattern carried down from verse to verse.
the colors were an added bonus
very cool
take care
jm

Some people find subtlety in strangers
if you find anything~let me in
Your eyes~you see everything
my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know

Paula Finn
Member Ascendant

since 2000-06-17

Posts 5546
missouri

6 posted 2000-12-20 02:00 AM

It sure is good having you back Mark...and with such a spectacular display of beauty

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

7 posted 2000-12-20 02:08 AM

MA~ you did a beautiful job with this.......loved the presentation as well as the poem! I liked the fall best.......

-SEA

Cassandra
Junior Member

since 2000-12-16

Posts 48
Charlotte, North Carolina, USA

8 posted 2000-12-20 02:54 AM

This is really great. I love the color comparison with the seasonal rhymes. Very nice. I really enjoyed it!

--Cassandra

ma miller
Senior Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 806

9 posted 2000-12-20 04:17 AM

hello again ... thanks to all for reading ... this was a fun piece to compose and "design", but didn't want the colors to detract from the intended meaning ... they needed to enhance and reflect the content ... this blasted blue background plays havoc with some colors though ... thanks again for reading ...

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