Open Poetry #11 |
love, absurd |
serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Glistening of morning dew- fingerprints of loving you engraved word of love unheard hope resounds in this day through... heartbreak of unspoken word-- our souls sang in harmony as break of dawn shines on the sea listless wave upon the shore all logic, reason, now a curse... Hearts as one--together, beat, as rhyme should be to poetry much more than that you mean to me-- promise now, this hunger, yearn, to close my eyes sigh undenied-- sleep now, but to be with you... to dream so sweet of love absurd. *a re-worked, re-post from Open 7* |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
"Fingerprints of loving you"... Very nice - I like it lots... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ Now - 'fingerprints of loving you' , just COULD be the phrase of the day ! Excellent write. *whistling* AND *cheering* here this morning ! Me ??? I'm calling the FBI - I wanna be fingerprinted ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Glistening of morning dew- fingerprints of loving you engraved word of love unheard ===================== as break of dawn shines on the sea listless wave upon the shore all logic, reason, now a curse... Hearts as one--together, beat, as rhyme should be to poetry ================== sigh undenied-- sleep now, but to be with you... to dream so sweet of love absurd. ================ you perfected perfection me sweet .. I loved this one the first time around... love it again with the new spin "Hearts as one--together, beat, as rhyme should be to poetry" what a way cool line that is... very cool me twin ... absurd ...why thats me middle name love ya girlie me Some people find subtlety in strangers if you find anything~let me in Your eyes~you see everything my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
ok serenity. . . this is just way too wonderful. . . really. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Serenity, I agree with Marge on the line, "fingerprints of Loving you" is a awesome line "wow" go girl this is totally perfect work here, VERY MUCH enjoyed and a keeper Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Ramses Junior Member
since 2000-12-14
Posts 40Porsgrunn, Telemark, Norway |
Serenity.... A journey of passion from beginning to end... Played a melody on my guitar and the poem fit perfectly...Nice huh -Ramses- |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
ain't it though? geesh great write, k |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you...your words are HUGS...and I suspect, HUSG.... I'm most grateful...LOVE AND HUGS TO FORUM. |
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Bilal Member
since 2000-12-13
Posts 66 |
Very beautiful poem with a clear line image of love-to-be or wanna-be. Loved it. Bilal |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Wonderful, as I expect from you. Always a pleasure to read your words. jwesley |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Beautiful! It certainly fits your name.It is beautifully serene. an aside... maybe something we can give partial blame to more frequent dissolutions of relationships, some of the current trend beleve that poetry should no longer rhyme so then, where be reason without rhyme? This is where your poem sent me as well. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Yep yep yep...I know this feeling well...thank you |
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