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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore 
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Twitching with fury~ Their faces as black as coal~ Clouds on a foul mood |
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Tony Abbot Member
since 2000-11-18
Posts 209North Wales,UK |
You conjure mystery with few words.Good work. 'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
excellent my friend. . . the expectation shows here. . . ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Be proud! You're really good at this. I can't do it at all! (jealous here) jwesley |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
very nice and spooky, I like it! |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Tony~ thank you..i love haiku and im glad you liked this one  Sven~ very sweet and kind of you to say so....perhaps one day i will be truly worthy of your expectation jwesley~ im sure you will be inspired to try out haiku some day. Even if you dont, you are already writing good stuff and should be proud too!!!  wayoutwalt~ thank you..spooky was the feeling i wanted to convey to the reader |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
I LOVE this! I've never actually been a fan of this type of poetry until coming here. Now am really enjoying it. Excellent job with this one! To capture and live a moment is truly living |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Very well done indeed!! |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
great haiku.....amazing description... Charisma |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
You do these so well! Loved the line... "clouds on a foul mood" perfect! -Tier |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
dreamkeeper, glad that you like these deceptively simple forms..real addicting, arent they? thank you ethome and charisma well Tier, i loved that line too...LOL |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
ahhhhh kaile ... no one does Haiku ..quite like you ... I recall reading yours so long ago back in DP... you are the queen of these gems (and responsible for their popularity here too me thinks) So we have you to blame for so many addicted poets  ..this one is great....as always you nail the impact required. well done later-haiku-queen-gator jm Some people find subtlety in strangers if you find anything~let me in Your eyes~you see everything my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
oh yesssss.....love the imagery you give in this amazing haiku Charisma |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Great haiku!!! I think I'm running for cover! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Fiesty little things aren't they? Wonderful Haiku my friend. A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses. author unknown |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Kaile, You've captured the moment here with this descriptive haiku, nice work! Dennis :^) Moonbeams radiate When the veiling cloud has passed Playful shadows dance Dennis L. White :^) |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
responsible for its popularity..you are too kind, JM...but indeed its a pleasure to share this wonderful form with the many talented poets here... btw,im a he, not a she  Charisma,thank you for your words...imagery is a tad unfamiliar to me and i am glad i succeeded in using imagery, at least with this haiku im running behind you, VAS...who wants to be caught at the mercy of those black clouds? fiesty things they are...and sometimes i dread them so...Mark... your compliment brightened my day, dennis... THANK ALL again..im real glad you enjoyed |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Why haven't I seen this before?! I LOVE this!! Something about a stormy day.......ahhhhhh  -SEA |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
kaile, Capitally done. A wonderful haiku. Poeminister "...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." -Poe |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
Ooh... speaking of those cumulonimbuses. I never knew such BIG chunks of rain clouds exist until I came to Australia and experienced my first thunderstorm. I do agree that their 'faces' ARE as black as coal... But it also reminds me of my dad, who's face could be as black as coal too, and then he'll 'thunder' and 'roar' and my tears would fall like 'raindrops'.Thank goodness that doesn't happen anymore. _,,,^.^,,,_ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
good one! |
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