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Wishing You Were Home (repost) |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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Miss the times when we were younger and the love we did invest and of all the love I kicked around I thought ours was the best. But I was never there for you and it drew us far from close. I was in sales and telling tales and drinking patron's toasts. I showed no favour for your choice and you spent your time alone. Now that you're gone and time moves on I know I did you wrong. All the good times I could find took me far away from you now my lonely heart and mind roam round this empty soul and the lesson lingers overtime and I'm wishing you were home. I call you in the early morning to draw the past to mind a brave new me, a change complete, I offer to your mind. You talk to me and my heart flips I beg you back again. A concerned woman you see me and I can't seem to win. It's plain and simple who's to fault and your worries shake me off but you turn heartache into hoping and I'm glad to hear you talk. Through all the years you held my name and stated your place with style and in the stress you'd address the absence of my smile. But your hopes went sadly thin I destroyed your cause, I didn't see your needs then I sought my own appaluse. Your love finally turned to ice it took a long long time, now I live with the sacrifice of pushing you from my mind. I remember our first home a single captured thrill and our driven dreams where the future gleams with the needs that all must fill. And the late nights laying back talking after love and the fire there that burnt the air was the flame of all first loves. Now I've turned to other means you say your heart wont mend, so I push on into somewhere and I call you now and then. But when it's very late at night and I turn to share your soul I cry softly to myself while another plays your role. So the good times ruined my time and I know I'm still alone beneath the scars I need your heart and I'm wishing you were home. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Oh my, ethome...what a sad and remorseful tale you tell...at what price wisdom? Hugs my friend...you tell it well. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Celeste it is sad but it's the way it goes sometimes...?? What can you do when you mess up eh! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
All the makings here of a good C&W or even Neil Diamond song... I'm sticking it in my library...someday the music will come to go with it, I know... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Karilea....please send music and then.."We'll sing in the sunshine," remember that old one by Gail Garnet from down under, "We'll laugh everyday." Aw c'mon ya must cause I want to do those things with ya... C'mon huh! No pictures I promise! ethome |
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Lady Lightning Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 422Kentucky |
I wish for you that you weren't so sad...It gets so much better with time..I see a little ray of sunshine peeking through...  ~LL~ The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost. author unknown |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Well done lamentation. So sad. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Lady Lightning I appreciate your comments .....this happened to me 11 yrs ago and I have long gotten over it but thanks so much for the thoughts from your kind and open heart.....Those are the qualities that make the poet a wonderful person! ethome |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Through all the years you held my name and stated your place with style and in the stress you'd address the absence of my smile. But your hopes went sadly thin I destroyed your cause, I didn't see your needs then I sought my own appaluse. Your love finally turned to ice it took a long long time, now I live with the sacrifice of pushing you from my mind. I remember our first home a single captured thrill and our driven dreams where the future gleams with the needs that all must fill. And the late nights laying back talking after love and the fire there that burnt the air was the flame of all first loves. =============== ahhhhh how I do so love your bittersweet rhymes kissed in your gift of cadence ... this is the E-poetry I fell for upon first read... be it happy or a touch melancholia....you just do this so very well ... "this" being writing of love from your heart of wisdom... and as always the melody is there playing between the lines. so cool are you sweet poet of the north  me Some people find subtlety in strangers if you find anything~let me in Your eyes~you see everything my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know |
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athena4 Senior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 622 |
Oh Ethome, I can feel all of your longings and regrets. I have been there, and it does get better, I promise. This is a beautiful "rip your heart out" kind of read. Loved it!! Elise |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Vas you slid in there on me again ...thanks so much for taking the time to read...ethome |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
P T, this is such an amazing and heart written piece from you love. Utterly wonderful, Oh the way we treat our nearest and dearest. We don't see what we have, or what we are losing, it's a shame, but you're right there is no point in looking back. Keep our eyes to the front, onward and upward. (I think it's the first holiday on your own that's the worst, now that's another reason I'm working!) Let those with young families and live in partners enjoy the day together I say. Anyway someone has to work so it might as well be me. This is a superb piece from you it really and truly is. and yes I love it too Take care Mushy Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks so much Janet my poet VAN pet. I love your exuberant replies, they really pick up my day...and yes you spoil me too ya little verbal sweetheart!! Thanks Elise for such encouraging thoughts I truly appreciate your heart...this happened 11 yrs. ago and it was hard then but it's a breeze now!! love to ya ethome |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you for such kind words Marsha I really and truly appreciate them...you must have just slipped in on me there but here we are now and I thank you so much again! |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Hi sweet poet man...its really good to know this still isnt an ache in your heart...but the memory makes a wonderful write and you sing it so very well...XO times a jillion |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
so sad ethome..i can relate to this..heartfelt..so many have been there..HUGS..nicely written as always ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
There you go using that jillion word again Paula....how much is that again? Thanks for the kind words...this just came out of me one day and so I thought I'd post it here....you know the beauty in the pain ...It works and makes for great reflections from the heart. |
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maxtec1 Senior Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 577Garland, Tx |
Gee did this bring some memories. i was on the other side of the fence but I could still see what was going on over there. Very good writing. love and light, Richard |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Victoria for taking the time to read I appreciate it very much.......ethome Thank you Richard I'm glad you could see it from the other side of the fence and I'm glad you stopped in for the read.....ethome |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
oh ethome this is so sad....heartfelt piece. excellent expressed (((warm hugs)) Charisma |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Charisma for the comment and the warm hugs I appreciate them both...the hugs probably a little bit more he he ethome |
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John R Member
since 2000-12-14
Posts 141Toledo OH |
strange how love lost themes are the most common. I found this stanza to be profound. Hind sight is always 20/20. Well written. Through all the years you held my name and stated your place with style and in the stress you'd address the absence of my smile. But your hopes went sadly thin I destroyed your cause, I didn't see your needs then I sought my own appaluse. Your love finally turned to ice it took a long long time, now I live with the sacrifice of pushing you from my mind. If a dream touches us, it exists to us as anything else that touches us. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
ethome--this is quite a story and told in your very talented writing way. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
ETHOME, hmmmmmm this poem of your's makes one ponder about choices in life and/or paths one has taken or will take... I really enjoyed the read as heart-tugging as it is well actually I had kleenex readily available just in case Thank you PoetFriend coco |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
My friend, if I told you how close this comes to my past then it would scare the heck out of ya. Wonderfully written to show the past misgivings and remorse found as one grows older and wiser and the flow and the feel of the entire piece were splendidly penned. I applaud you my friend for many reasons but for sure in drawing me into this one so well and making me feel the pain of loss and sorrow. A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses. author unknown |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks John and yes it is amazing how love themes are so similiar, as I have noted from all these comments.......take care ethome Thank you Martie my sweet poet friend I always appreciate it when you read my work, take care....ethome Thanks Coco, I know it does make one think about the choices that have to be made ... sometimes it's a matter of.... what's the right thing to do?...take care........ethome Thank you so much Mark... In today's day and age I'm not suprised by the amount of comments where the reader can relate to this story....thanks for the kind words and we'll talk/write to ya later..... take care ......ethome |
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Ann Member
since 2000-07-07
Posts 64Australia |
This was a beautiful poem....i know how painful it is when you lose someone you love because you've neglected their needs...sometimes you never do realize what you have until they're gone and all you can do is hit yourself for being so blind in the past...hang in there and wait for Time to heal your wounds. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Ethome~ this is so sad......it's amazing what we learn as we grow......this speaks volumes to me.........I wish the best for you....... -SEA |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* dear one, my heart hurts for the pain you have endured and I pray love comes into your life that you may again feel its warming rays. Much love to you from me. http://www.geocities.com/karenltorbiak/index.html |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
i have you know that again i read your poem twice,each time marvelling at the articulate way you expressed your feelings eloquently and at the way this tugged at my heartstrings... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Ann thank you very much for taking the time to read this and being able to feel it too.. I appreciate it very much...ethome Sea thanks for the sweet words of compassion I appreciate them so...ethome Thank you Karen you replies are always so loving and understanding...take care..ethome Kaile thank you so much for reading twice and enjoying the work I truly am thankful for the visit from you....ethome |
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Bilal Member
since 2000-12-13
Posts 66 |
Men don't cry but this poem brought tears to my eyes. I know how i felt when I lost my first love. Wasn't easy. I know how your person must've felt. Below is how? How'd I ever Feel Lancelot {Bilal} © 2000 How'd I ever feel Your feelings towards me How'd I ever feel Your thinking towards me How'd I ever feel If the gap just increases How'd I ever feel Your touch & emotions How'd I ever feel Your lovely sensations How'd I ever feel Your sweet scent in air How'd I ever feel Warmth in your heart How'd I ever feel Your pain & sorrow How'd I ever feel Happiness that you borrow How'd I ever feel If the gap just increases How'd I ever feel Across this wall between us! |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Ethome~ Painful time for you my friend, you've written your pain and remorse so very well ~HUG~ Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
You layed this heavily in my heart today Ethome....so many things we don't see until it's to late to repair them...regret is the one thing that never gets easier with time... Heartfelt wishes for a blessed holiday and many thanks to you for sharing your heart within your weaves~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Bilal...I sure appreciate the verses because they are undoubtedly true and heck it's alright for men to cry they are human you know.....thanks again Tracie thank you so much for taking the time to read and feel the emotion of this piece.. ethome. Butterflies this happened to me 11 yrs ago and I'm quite well over it but I never forgot the feelings and the emptiness of the time and so as a result this poem came about .. thanks for reading always so good to hear from you........ethome |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
wow..i must say i took this rather personally..there is one who has sd all these things to me lately..and it hurts to read them here..and i, being the one in concern and worry, and of attempt to let that other person be a changed man....its tough..you know people as they prove themselves to be..and when they make a big change, its sometimes with a bit of skeptisicm that you do your best to believe in the change... of course you didnt write these words to me..lol..but the ache is in my chest as if HE were the one who wrote them..they fit right into the puzzle.. and it hurts because i dont like for anyone to hurt..and if i am in any way part of the hurt--as she is part of yours--it hurts just that much more.. sorry to take up so much room with my personal take on your write..! i'm off now... great writing my friend.. hugs, g "the beginning of wisdom is, 'i do not know'" -unknown |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks fallen rain and take as much space to write as you want. I found your comments very interesting as you are seeing the same things as I am writing about...always good to connect with the reader.....I appreciate your circumstances as well as many others that have commented along the same lines...this life situation is never easy and I appreciate your concerns.....take care.....ethome |
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