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A Knight Turned Dark
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A Knight Turned Dark |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone 
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Oh darkest knight who owns my heart why did you hurt me so? You left me helpless in the sand, but why I'll never know. A self professed true man of steel that's who you were to me. Yet such a man would ne'er deny a love so meant to be. I saw a vision of a knight who rode past miles of dreams. A knight with heart so full of love, you were not as you seemed. You offered me a chalice full of wine so sweet to drink and then you threw it out to sea and coldly watched it sink. So now I stand bereft, alone, no future left to see. Just broken love so crumpled up and pieces left of me. Yet on a cloudless sunny day, if I look very close I see you turn your horse towards me and ride with me towards hope. [This message has been edited by catalinamoon (edited 12-13-2000).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah Cat...someday you and I shall talk of Hope... and then you will be able to go on with your dreams which shall come true... hugs from me... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Hope is a white horse. . . Excellent my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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athena4 Senior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 622 |
Someday, my dear friend, you will be riding that horse with hope, and your PC. You just need to figure out how to get some of the chinks out of his armor.I loved this one. I love all of them! Elise |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Sunshine, Sven, and Athena, thanks so much for reading this and seeing the feelings behind it. Hope reigns supreme, in the face of the most obvious denial. Sigh.. You are all such good friends. Sandra |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Sandra, I know the feelings in this one, it is so easy to give a heart, but ownership ...ah....that's something that I'm not certain anyone should do, unless you know it's pure love! "If you live to be a hundred, I want to live to be a hundred minus one day, so I never have to live without you." Winnie the Pooh |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Sandra this is a fabulous piece, and you have written it so perfectly. Ahhh hope springs eternal, it is always there and she will always give you a smile. There is love all around you and all you need do is stretch out your hand. And she will help you rise once again I know she will. Take care of your heart, and you will find that she will seek you out. Take care Mushy Marsha  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Really enjoyed the cadence and flow of this one. The phrases you used were fresh, to me, well describing agony. Yet there was still a grasping at hope, in the end. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
sandra, I must have missed this the first time around...but I liked this much, especially the remaining hope...smiles and hugs, and let's spin this one round again! [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 12-15-2000).] |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
like this one alot...nicely written..may your hopes and dreams come true..  ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Yet on a cloudless sunny day, if I look very close I see you turn your horse towards me and ride with me towards hope. beautiful..I hope this last verse comes to fruition for you.. love your picture..it's nice to see you...~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
That callous knight turned into the reality of day...I love your arrangement in this poem and the use of words is wonderful... good luck in your ride toward hope. Not every knight is a knave....much enjoyed!! ethome |
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John R Member
since 2000-12-14
Posts 141Toledo OH |
I loved the play on words in this title. Your use of words instills a sense of longing for the ever present dream of love. Hope should never be supressed for dreams do come true. If a dream touches us, it exists to us as anything else that touches us. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
A dark Knight he was indeed to lead you on with promises he would not keep. Save your heart for a true Knight who will take you with him on his white horse. Much love and hugs to you, dear one, from me. http://www.geocities.com/karenltorbiak/index.html |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I needed to read this today - I'm glad I found it - |
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