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Turning Point
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again 
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*turning point* It's unnerving- the way my tears have ceased to fall. and when Dad slams me into a wall, to know that God is smiling through it all. It's disconcerting- the way i hide, and no one can tell. a secret life lived inside a shell... to question Heaven, but to know my Hell. i'm not sayin' i made the right choices. i'm only human and i'll prob'ly fall But i'm not prayin'. there's just too many voices... i can't hear one, but i hear them all And if that's how it's gonna be, i think i can fin'ly see that i'm really on my own. Just one man in the crowd, full of doubt and standing out. In the end, i'm just unknown. It's enlight'ning- remind me that i screw up every day. and i just cannot turn my face away, because it's my fault either way. It is fright'ning- the way some people see the good in me. and i'm told i have a destiny, and that i just need to believe... i'm not sayin' i made the right choices. i'm only human and i'll prob'ly fall But i'm not prayin'. there's just too many voices... i can't hear one, but i hear them all And if that's how it's gonna be, i think i can fin'ly see that i'm really on my own. Just one man in the crowd, full of doubt and standing out. In the end, i'm just unknown. It's aggravating- the way i'm blind with open eyes. to know my truth is all your lies. to wonder if i will ever ask why? It is questioning- where am i supposed to go from here? there's a new horizon dawning near with a morning fog refusin' to clear... And it's uncertain- what's next? what lies around the bend? they say i'll just screw it up again... but i think that i will write the end And if that's how it's gonna be, i think i can fin'ly see that i'm really on my own. Just one man in the crowd, full of doubt and standing out. In the end, i'm just unknown. < !signature--> "The bar is always open, the time is always right. If God's good word goes unspoken, then the music plays all night." [This message has been edited by Ethan_Halo (edited 12-13-2000).] |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
About 12 years ago, I felt like this, minus the man parts.........life gets better ( thank God) you have to learn it on your own, it's not something I can tell you about, it will be different for you......but the same. Good luck with it  -SEA |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
I was brought up to believe that if you're good then good things will come to you. THEY LIED! My thoughts and mind are my own. People may think they know what goes on in my head, but they're wrong. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
It's disconcerting- the way i hide; no one can tell. a secret life inside a shell... to question Heaven, but know my Hell. i'm not sayin' i made the right choices. i'm only human and i'll prob'ly fall. But i'm not prayin'. there's just too many voices... i can't hear one, but i hear them all. ================== I like where your getting your inspiration here from... very cool rewrite ...reminded me of your 3am poem... and yes.. you can write the end ... we'e all on our own most of the time ... and usually we are stronger than we know. You do need to believe in you... I can see your light from all the way over here  love ya me Some people find subtlety in strangers if you find anything~let me in Your eyes~you see everything my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know |
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cruz Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 282Dallas,Texas USA |
There's plenty to say here. You've done a masterful job. All has been well thought and planned. The flow is quite serene. Keep 'em coming. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ethan, quote: You keep writing like this, and you won't be unknown...ever... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
ethan...it doesnt come much stronger than this...wow...this is wonderfully dark...hugs to you...and I believe in you |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
dear all repliers: thank you for takin the time to read this and for your STELLAR compliments. JM- recognition!! i'd never grinned from ear to ear til i read your reply thanks for being a MB20 fan. hehehe."The bar is always open, the time is always right. If God's good word goes unspoken, then the music plays all night." |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ethan-- "And it's uncertain- what lies around the bend. they say i'll screw it up again... but i think that i will write the end" You will write the end...through all the chaos and around all the curves in the road, you will, I can see it in the strength of this poem. |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a beautiful poem that reflects your great strength. I admire you, my friend. Thanks for posting. "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This was so incredibly expressive Ethan ... I just loved the amount of emotion and heart you portrayed in this beautiful piece. Please take care ... we make our own way, and eventually tune out the unbelievers ... have faith in yourself and in your strength. Wonderful writing! Best wishes, /Kit |
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athena4 Senior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 622 |
Oh Ethan, What an incredibly sad poem. Your imagery is so real, the pain and sorrow just keeps whispering to me even after I've read it. I hope you won't feel this way for long. No man with a heart like this can remain unappreciated, or unloved. Remember what Clarence told George in "It's A Wonderful Life": "No man is a failure who has friends". And you have many here. I wish you better days... Elise |
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