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From Midnight Blue to Dreaming
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From Midnight Blue to Dreaming |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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©2000 Christopher Ward a peace of picture sways gracefully – hanged carelessly atop the nail, sliding along the remnants of a broken wall. when these simple words turn into breath with whispered ‘sssk’s’ of the gentle caress… pendulumatically swinging… swinging, it slows, slows, then stops for a silence. and now she wants to frame my mind in arms it rests here among the spectres of ambulation, casted on canted edges, not… quite… straight. the canvas, frayed, is time-worn fadings. yet I still become beauty on her tongue cracked, pitted, the paint a navy smear of potentiality – the promise of a then. she aches to taste the sighting of reality depictions of another time, paths of glories blurred… invisibling more each moment which passes, passes, passes unnoticed. time is bane when words lie still, unpeaced the moon rises with the ghosts of movement, perhaps a sigh entombed within the breeze, so the portrait stirs, and warmth returns to the motioned swaying, swaying, swaying… she wakes to sleep my dreamless night |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I won't tell you how many times I read this. But you've done it again, Lord Christopher. Your imagery is sterling here, and the tone reads like a whisper...beautiful is getting redundant, but that is what this is... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This is one to be read aloud...in whispers... beautiful... |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"when these simple words turn into breath with whispered ‘sssk’s’ of the gentle caress… pendulumatically swinging… swinging, it slows, slows, then stops for a silence." "she aches to taste the sighting of reality depictions of another time, paths of glories blurred… invisibling more each moment which passes, passes, passes unnoticed. time is bane when words lie still, unpeaced" Excellent imagery Christopher! I really enjoyed the visual and motion this brought to mind, almost mesmerizing. I too found myself reading it a few times, and each read was so softly flowing. I feel like I've been hypnotized just through reading ... very well done!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Oh, but I do love the quiet rhythm this poem has. It says so much with a very soft strength. Me like, me like bol. Nic |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
S'en - I told you not to call me that in public!  If I succeed in causing you to think, then it is worthwhile. Thank you lady!Kari - Interesting choice of words. Thank you for your breath upon my words. Kit - Thank you as well lady, but I do have one problem with you... my friends call me Chris.  Nic - BOL is a good thing methinks. And yes, it says much to those who know how to read me, as you do. Hugs, BOL to you. C |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Chris,the imagery in this is superb,and yes I too read it more than once, it is beautiful. especailly loved this..... when these simple words turn into breath with whispered ‘sssk’s’ of the gentle caress… pendulumatically swinging… swinging, it slows, slows, then stops for a silence. and now she wants to frame my mind in arms Excellent! Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Well, I should probably reply to this later as I'm not in a ooshy gooshy mood at the moment but later never comes for me usually, so I will go ahead and put my two cents in right now... YUK!!!! Just kidding bud, I felt the longing sincerity beneath this one. One of your better pieces I must say...Michael |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
when these simple words turn into breath and now she wants to frame my mind in arms she aches to taste the sighting of reality time is bane when words lie still, unpeaced she wakes to sleep my dreamless night The whole poem is spectacular - these lines felt right together. I love it!! Your writing becomes better and better (how can that be?) |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
C A picture without a frame...that's how I see it. A picture waiting for a frame. Therefore, I suppose there must be a frame without a picture. 'yet I still become beauty on her tongue cracked, pitted, the paint a navy smear of potentiality – the promise of a then' Lines that ache...that ache is written quietly loud. I love the hush of this piece. Makes me feel the night - the solitude of after midnight. Awesome work you. K |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Chris, my admiration for the images you pertray and the mood you set with them and i GOTTA admire anyone who can use PENDULUMATICALLY!  |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
chris perhaps one of the more complex pieces i've seen from you - you did pretty well i think to include a fairly unusual vocabulary and yet still maintain what Michael called the "ooshy gooshy mood" ...lol philip PS. thanks serenity my friend, "LORD" C - HA HA .... rotflmao .. i shall remember that next time my name gets mutilated |
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Lady Lost Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 470 |
This is ....excuisite.... Your imagination is brilliant, this has been printed (the cute picture of you didn't come out!) and hung up here at my desk. Thank you............beth "And I still believe you can never have too much fiction because reality is such a bore..." - REA |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
Oh my... this is perfection to me...and I will place this in my library to reread whenever the moment for warmth is needed thankyou for a beautiful, warm read on this chilly morning ~~softs miles Maureen |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Yes exquisite is the word I would use here. A written work of art. Beautiful Christopher. Juls |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
And hanged Chris? Isn't it better to be 'hung'?  Chris this is SPECTACULAR! This was brilliantly written (don't get a big head now) How you interlaced it all is just magnificent! <*\\\>< I know not what the future holds, but I know Who holds the future. |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Well my friend, you've done it once again. I've been left hanging on your words.....enthralled. "yet I still become beauty on her tongue cracked, pitted, the paint a navy smear of potentiality – the promise of a then. she aches to taste the sighting of reality depictions of another time, paths of glories blurred… invisibling more each moment which passes, passes, passes unnoticed." Oh the sadness of so desperatley searching for something, it's not even seen. Excellent piece Chris, and forgive me if I've misinterpreted, as I usually do. But even if I did, I still enjoyed what I got out of it. Oh, and glad to see you back. < !signature--> ~Sheri "The things that come to those that wait may be the things left by those who got there first" [This message has been edited by Irie (edited 10-11-2000).] |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
Lovely...loved it If I should fall again, then they will laugh but what if just this one I rise? Avanti Rao |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Christopher-You've painted a beautiful and sensitive piece here, I felt this one. Very excellent. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Maree - Feel free to read it as many times as you'd like! I appreciate the comments! Mike - yeah yeah blah blah - YOU'VE never written any mush, have ya! Thank you m'brother, for the words and the smile. Sharon - I think your standards are just dropping, dropping...LOL K - *sigh* yeah. Balladeer - THANK YOU! I honestly was concerned about how well that would work! It is rather cumbersome at first! LOL - Thank you sir! Phiip - And you... you... you... yeah. Thank you - I wonder, knowing what you do, if you caught all the symbolism in here - you did recognize the part about you, didn't you??? Beth - thank you! Imagination is one of the few free things left in this world, I'm glad I can share mine with others who appreciate it! (and I don't blame the printer for not putting out my picture... prolly break it!!!) Maureen - "perfection" Wow - that warms me! Thank you for your cozy comments! Juliet - thank you - glad you saw the picture! Becca - LOL - If this were a normal poem and I were a normal person (LOL) then "hung" would probably be best. However, I used "hanged," which is a correct past tense as that and to double in the form of "hanged" as in by the neck... So it was on purpose!!! LOL - I figured I'd get more slack from "a peace of picture..." than I would from hanged...LOL Thank you though, for paying attention! Sheri - No, your interpretation is as correct as any other (though some might disagree) there is no such thing as an incorrect interpretation if you take the time to really read the poem. Thank you for being enthralled!Avanti - Thank you! Gemini - Ahh - sensitive... would you mind saying that louder... was accused of insensitivity recently...LOL Than kyou for your time! Chris |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Chris, a wonderful piece, I loved the images it created. I'll be looking for more of your work. Dee |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Hmm ... now then, what have we here? I must commend you, my friend, on a sweetly entrancing piece of poetry. Your images were original and well-executed; the use of a portait in various stages of disrepair or neglect was an effective representation of one who has seen the crueler side of life. The juxtaposition of hope (italicized lines) and resignation shows the sometimes-intermittent striving of the human spirit toward the brighter horizon that it must believe exists -- else what is there to live for...? The flow was songlike, albeit the voice I heard was barely a whisper ... repetition of 'swinging' (line 6), 'passes' (line 18), and 'swaying' (line 23) give the reader a very real vision of the 'picture' hanging haphazardly on the wall, moved by some careless wind. All in all, one of your best pieces to date, Christopher. 'Tis amazing how inspiring the promise of a frame can be to an old portrait like yourself, no? Take care, --Me YOUR LIFE IS A TEST It is only a test ... If this were your Actual Life, you would have been given better instructions! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This is beautifully done, Chris!! |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Well Christopher I now know why Kit was so inspired....very inspirational indeed. This is an excellent piece Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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natelan Junior Member
since 2000-10-06
Posts 34Escondido, CA, USA |
*bows* I'm certainly glad that I chose to read this poem first, as a return to netpoets... It really reminds me of all that I have been missing... A superb piece of work, and I assure you, I will not let any of your poems go unread by me. I look foward to your next post. *bows* A man in a bubble is a man in trouble. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Pendulumatically? I us that term all the time! Ex: No greater childhood thrills than these A swing strung high from old oak tree Her golden locks lift in the breeze As child swings pendulumatically Exquisite, Christopher. Balladeer is right, only you could get away with that word, as has been proved Liz |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
You've got to get another picture - I confess were it not for Kit - I might not have read this - and it truly would have been my loss. This is truly an excellent poem - and as I said to but few others - it deserves to be published |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
this is a very magical poem draws you in from the beginning, the picture swaying on the wall without a picture frame, the breath of love from her reaching out, the tick tock of time in the dreams that do not come, the connecting of souls that can not be broken no matter what, there's so many passages of lovely entertwining thoughts here this is a very passionate poem. Truly Beautiful! |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Chris, chris, chris....LOL hon I got your intention perfectly. LOL I think you missed mine completetly though ROFL! Love ya and hugs |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Dee - Thank you kindly! (You may want to dig back a little.. I don't post new stuff too often anymore... )Kess - (<--still don't like that...grrr) I want to sit here with this dazed look on my face and ask if you're ok...? This was a glowing reply m'friend, one which I value more than you might realize. I know there is sincerity behind it, which makes it that much more precious to me. Thanks lady. (Like I'm the only one who's ever been looking for a frame...ahem) Martie - thank you for your time and comment! Tracie - well then where's yours? Thank you! Natelan - It is I who am honored, to be your first response. Welcome back! Liz - and we all know how I like to "get away" with things...  Thank you kind lady, your words n'er fail to bring a smile to my lips! Wilfred - Wow. Thank you sir. I treasure that suggestion and I appreciate your comments! Rosebud - and what a poetic reply - it breathed to me. Thank you for that! REBECCA!!!  |
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