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the poet's tears |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
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by moonlight and by lamplight the poet writes his words they are said to be by many the sweetest ever heard but no one knows his pain the longing in his heart all they see is the love when he his tale starts he spins his tales of Romance and makes his readers swoon he shows to them the stars and takes them to the moon but his heart is empty no lover fills his soul it seems there is no one to fill that gaping hole and when his rhyme is done he hears their loving applause it warms him for a moment that they have taken pause but they know not the lonliness that lies beneath the verse all they see is the love they suffer not his curse for he knows little of love his heart knows more of pain but every time that his heart breaks he gets back up again back to sing his song of love in hopes that she will hear she who will caress his heart and hold it oh so dear and so to all that will hear he sings of love once more waiting in hope for that one who will open his heart's door they see his tears of longing the truest they have heard for his tears are not of water this poet's tears are words ------------------------------------------------------------------- < !signature--> That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl [This message has been edited by Sven (edited 10-03-2000).] |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Sven, So beautiful. ~big warm hugs~ ~~Tara aka rp25 :o) |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Very good, sir. I loved that last line! And it's so true. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
One of your best yet, Sven...and how very synchronistic...lol...you weep, and I stomp my foot, (see Poet's Fit...lol) great poem, and I do understand...I've just got more of a temper...smiles to ya... |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
When you write poems full of romance, I feel as if I'm in a trance. Then, you write like this... All you need is someone to kiss. |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Sven-Words of tears very well captured. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
How do you do this? Wow. Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
~~ Sven ~~ You are such a wonder to me! Every single line that you write brings emotions to the front, and I am dazzled by your tenderness. You possess a magic that moves the soul..... Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Sven, this is lovely!!  coco |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
rp25, thank you my friend. . . deVine. . .thank you. . . the last line is for all of us. . . serenity, I guess we both just had the same thought at the same time. . . thank you my friend. . . inot2b, well, I don't know about that. . . but thank you. . . Gemini, thank you my friend. . . Sunshine, I start at the beginning. . . Sunny1, thank you so much. . . I am so glad that you enjoyed. . . Coco, thank you! ------------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
I'm so sorry to see this pain. I guess I never realized you felt this way. This really saddened me. I hope one day you find love and can be happy. Juls |
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emily Member
since 2000-10-03
Posts 142USA |
this is very sexy! |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Sven, I am about speechless here . . . I know this is from the heart and I thank you for the peek at it once again. Wonderful writing my friend. Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
Sven this is so sad, and sometimes I guess people don't really know how another person feels but opening up and talking things out and writing them down somehow heals the part of your heart that is hurting, beauty is hidden sometimes in places we just don't look, but seems you have really amazed us with your words for they are beauty to our souls. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
How do you do it>? That is right? Hell you paint such pictures, this one forlorn and longing sure, but you have a gift Sven you really do. When I can write this good I will be a happy lady. The changes in your writing since you joined passions is wonderous..... Bravo my friend and check your email Isis *Friendship is a horizon - which expands whenever we approach it...* ~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Spirit~ |
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just_another_fe Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 483MICHIGAN |
Once again sven you did a beautiful job. Good Luck finding her |
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Artistic Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 107Colorado/Rochester, NY |
So delicate, graceful and eloquent... and so touching! Wherever do you get your inspiration? Loved it...!~Artistic~ "Dreams are the touchstones of our characters" -Henry David Thoreau |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~Brilliant writting Sven!!~ ~Cherie~ |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Sve, this is the most beautiful poem you've written yet! I'm left at a loss for words! Very well done Sir....what else can I say! ~Sheri "The things that come to those that wait may be the things left by those who got there first" |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Oh Sven my dear friend this is truly a most tender piece, straight from your heart to the screen...well written HUGS Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Juls, thank you. . . sometimes, I have felt this way. . . emily, thank you. . . and welcome to Passions. . . LW, well then I must be doing something right if I'm leaving you speechless. . . thank you my friend. . . rosebud, you're right. . . sometimes, we only see what's on the surface. . . but as you know, it's what beneath the words that matters. . . thank you. . . Isis, thank you so much my friend! I don't know how I do it. . .and I feel that you already write this well! Thank you again, it means a lot just another, thank you my friend Artistic, it just comes from my heart. . . it's all the inspiration I need. . . Beth, thank you! Irie, thank you. . . that says it all. . . tracie, thank you. . . you know me well my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is beautiful, Sven "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Sven~ this brought a tear to my eye. you know that i am a huge admirer of your work. you write some of the most beautiful poems i've ever had the pleasure to read. but i have always noticed they were laced with a hint of sadness. sweetie, i really hope you find the love you deserve. i am glad to see you aren't giving up...she is out there, i promise ya. take care. ~amy~ "The head learns knew things, but the heart forever more practices old experiences" |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Sven, I totally understand this piece and the truth it convays, when the women of your dreams comes in to your life she will be so very blessed at the tenderness that I know for a fact is there and waiting to be shared. Time is the factor that always seems to be the hardest in these's kind of things because the heart is so very impation. Beautiful truths in this one friend, I wish only the very best for you. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Beautiful Sven..so true isnt it.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Sven - I don't know how to express in words the feelings that I have after reading this writing. Except perhaps, I find it so true. Many tears have these eyes seen when writing the words. Thanks Sven, for sharing this. Bill |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
for his tears are not of water this poet's tears are words This is indeed beautiful, this poet thanks you for your telling of this truth. |
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monique Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 369Louisiana |
The poet's tears are falling down like rain I g y a h a l o r e a u e r m d e |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sven, No words from from me could dull the pain when your words fall like rain but know this, from you to me your great words have set me free in reading you throughout the night I forget my lonely plight I'm enraptured once again believe in love, accept the pain so while I share your pain at loss I must thank you for revealing your cross. Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
Sven this was oh so true. Great poem I loved it |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Sven, how true and poignant. I am right there with you. Excellent emotional poem. Take care. Sandra |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Irish Rose, thank you my friend. . . Amy, my friend, thank you for your words, I did try to convey that here. . . and thank you for your wishes. . . Cerenity, thanks to you as well for your words, and for reading. . . Victoria, yes. . . yes it is. . . Bill, you're welcome. . . the tears have been there from me also Whispers Caress. . . this poet thanks you for reading. . . monique, I'm glad that you're here also. . . thank you. . . Kethry, it's a cross that we all do bear. . . it helps to share the burden. . . thank you my friend for sharing. . . kitkat. . . thank you!!! Sandra, it's nice to have someone with me. . . There is a revised version of this poem in Critical Analysis if you're interested. . . thank you all again. . --------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
mmmmmmmm drinking this one in...very nice sven |
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