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Whispers in the Moonlight.
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Whispers in the Moonlight. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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it started with a prayer a whisper to the moonlight and then without conscious thought, the shadow you cast, fills my sight, shades of gray running like fingers across my thigh, I'd try to hide, turn away, but your shadow grows.......... becomes the obsession I am terrified of, knowing you will be there overshadows my life scaring me to death your whispers in the darkness your caresses, leave cold scars on my hip and yet.......... I seek your touch, as I have sought you, through winters frosted scent, through days and nights bent, with unrest, unease the breeze I feel, are you real? or merely another dreamscape, to walk on lonely afternoons, and soon.......... its over reduced to tears am I the walks are done the dreamscape fades and all I have are memories and whispers in moonlight "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
WOW......when you ain't pirate bashing you really pour out the soul don't ya???? Excellent read here my friend. Powerful lines below. but your shadow grows.......... becomes the obsession I am terrified of, knowing you will be there overshadows my life scaring me to death your whispers in the darkness your caresses, leave cold scars on my hip and yet.......... I seek your touch, as I have sought you, through winters frosted scent, through days and nights bent, with unrest, unease the breeze |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Kethry~ WOW...this is a wonderful piece of work, very enjoyable read. I've been there, very confusing at times. Great work....well done Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Keth, may I ditto what Mark said.. and add I love this poem ... so many emotions ... you run the gambit from sensual to haunted. wonderful expression and writing here i like seeing this side of your poetry take care jm |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Oh my.....there's not much more that I could add to the masters above me, except that this is a very powerfully written work. I always enjoy each piece you do, but this one has a special pull!!  Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Kethry, this is how I like to see you write... Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Kethry, Wow.. haunting.. sensual.. sad. Excellent writing! Greatly enjoyed  ~~Tara aka rp25 :o) |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Thanks - this was a little different for me, I have a good friend who says my free verse is better. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"I feel, are you real"? Have felt this so many times and usually not a good sign for me. James |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
jmlee12345. - Not a good sign for me either. Thanks for responding. Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Kethry Terrific imagery - and your emotions are laid right out where we can feel them, too. Wonderful free verse. I hope it really is all behind you now. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
LJA the only thing behind me is you...and it scares me half to death.  Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Kethry~ Wow!!  I enjoyed this very much! -SEA |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Kethry, when you're bad, you're good....but, when you're good, you're great! This is exceptional writing... (it's not really about a kangaroo, is it?  ) |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
A Superb piece You carry us along with your emitions Very well written Liz |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Kethry,...I love the honest and open flow this has to it....it's like your words are flying free from you...coming as they do to your mind,...I love that. A rawness to it that captivates my attention. Superb expression. Take care of yourself K. *Peace. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
You've read me - exuding my confidence - and professing my love and romantic feelings - Perhaps others doing similar - Speaking for myself - you should know the selfsame doubts and anguish can haunt me as well - and I strongly suspect others as well - perhaps even the object of my affection - BUT you've put it into words - and most beautifully. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Thanks everyone, for the praise, which I feel I only half deserve. Thanks Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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fool Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 61 |
fool foats in on a cloud,glides down,and lands next to a startled Kethry. "Sensual,haunting,yearning,you have captured all these emotions in this piece Keth,well written" |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Fool Kethry turns a whiter shade of pale and looks just ghostly in the moonlight, now who's haunting who. Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kethry, this is very powerful, I really like this. Your work is extraordinary always but this is something beyond, very well written. Marsha  [This message has been edited by Marsha (edited 10-05-2000).] |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
this one got to me...as I wipe a tear from my cheek... ~~soft hugs Kethry Maureen |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Marsha and Maureen, Soft thanks Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Kethry~ My dear, this is beautiful! I love the imagery that you used in this one! Moonlight always intensifies the mood, dear! Love Ya~ ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
I admire your work so well; I just had to pull this one out and read it!!! And it was well worth it...this is absolutely...I simply don't have the words...wonderful, haunting, but definitely captivating and electrifying!!!! Thanks for the lesson Peppermint Life is a Wheel |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wow! Sorry I missed this earlier Kethrey ... what a beautiful, breath-taking piece, wonderful wording and flow! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Kethry, beautifully emotional writing. I could feel the heartbeat, the pull, the tears. Well done!! |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Keth...girl you just rip the heart right out of me with this...exquisite |
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Toddles Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 396New Orleans, Louisiana |
Eloquently executed... Great read! "Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind!"...Dr. Seuss [email protected] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I saw this quote the other day, Kethry and saved it wanting to use it's idea and your poem made me think to share it with you. "I wasn't kissing him, I was whispering in his mouth." It was the Whispers of his touch... ~Wynter Bliss "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
*wow*...you have openend your heart and soul....and shared your feelings with all of us......great imagery.....excellent penned. (hugs) Charisma |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Thanks everyone, this is one of my favourites. I think because my muse and I collaborated closely on this one. Either that or my split personality has got loose again. NakdThoughts: Thanks I'm keeping the quote. Do you want to make something of it Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
I seek your touch, as I have sought you, through winters frosted scent, through days and nights bent, with unrest, unease the breeze I feel, are you real? or merely another dreamscape, to walk on lonely afternoons, and soon.......... its over reduced to tears am I the walks are done the dreamscape fades and all I have are memories and whispers in moonlight ....... WOW, amazing work, Kethry, my friend... Regards, Sudhir P.S. I know I have been missing some way beyond excellent poetry here.... |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Wonderful poetry here, from shadows to dreamscapes "I seek your touch, as I have sought you, through winters frosted scent, through days and nights bent," Loved these lines Liz |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sudhir, Sudhir, beloved one.It's good to have you back here where you belong. Liz, thanks for the response. Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~Wow..this is stunning...!!~ ~Cherie~ |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Beth, high praise from you, thanks. Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Exceptional writing, Kethry..emotionally compelling and well written! |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Kethry, what can I say that our PoetFriends have not already said but to let ya know this one you've written reaches into the depths of this reader's soul... My compliments to you for such an exquisite write one I shall keep around for a while Smiles2UPoetFriend Coco |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
This piece is very beautiful and very powerful...excellent work and great imagery! Nathan |
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