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The Prescription
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The Prescription |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
The doctor came with pen in hand ‘What’s the problem with you miss? Tell me where it hurts, please just tell me what’s amiss” “I see no blood upon your head feel no fever on your brow you must tell me what is wrong so I can help you now" "Go away!" I cried out "You can’t cure what’s ailing me It isn’t something you can touch nor something you can see" I placed my hand upon my breast to continue my explanation Words and tears spilled together as I began my recitation "The pain I feel is somewhere here between my heart and head Burning with a fever like a hot poker, glowing red I feel as though I’m rent in two the pain will not subside Caused in part by selfishness and cruelty and pride" “I placed my hand upon his cheek and turned him away from me thinking that I really wanted to be alone and free” So my head thinks my heart committed the crime of the century but my heart knows it was my head that did this thing to me With wisdom rare the doctor said “You should call him on the phone tell him that you were a fool to think you wanted to be alone” A week passed then I called to explain what the doctor prescribed for me But she answered the phone for you Now I know it’s not meant to be So, remember this my fine friends Take your medicine right away don’t wait to heal the heartaches until another day. [This message has been edited by Poet deVine (edited 10-02-2000).] |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Sometimes waiting for the right moment is to wait too long. Great writing, Sharon. Denise |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
nice lesson taught miss D well done o yuh |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
It's soooo good to hear that they have medicine for heartache now... I wonder if there's an over-the-counter equivalent... Nice job, PdV..  |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Sharon this is heartbreaking! A masterpiece it is! I love the prescription! |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Somewhere between "He who hesitates is lost" and "Look before you leap' is the right time -perhaps - but many might say it wasn't meant to be - bottom line: "pick yourself up, dust yourself off - and start all over again" (old lyric - but still good advice I think) Oh - and did I say - "great poem"? - It is! ~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning. ~ Billy Wilder |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
OWIE...but but I took my medicine and Im still sick...now what? |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
 This was awesome. I needed to be diagnosed and treated a long time ago. If a prescription would have taken the hurt away and been as simple as a call, I probably would have overdosed. I had to read it again because it was SOOOoooo Gooooodddd. Garfield |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I THOUGHT there was something going around...and I don't supposed the antibiotics are going be of much good, huh? I loved this one, JB...smile here please...I could so relate, as I am just "a lonely little petunia, in an onion patch..." |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~This is great Sharon...And such true words....Very much enjoyed!!~ ~Cherie~ |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
so so true Enjoyed the read  Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderfully wise words Sharon! I loved the way you wove this together ... perfect medicine to start my morning off right! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all for your kind words. I've had a bad summer 'writers block' wise and this is one of my attempts to get back on track. Hopefully I can keep it up. Though I don't think I'll reach the level of being able to post two or three a day! I hope to post one a week if my muse will stay put (that velcro should hold for a bit!)  |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Oh, PdV.... This is excellent, and if your muse keeps this up....one a day would be wonderful to see, at least from my eyes!  Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Timing is everything. . . yep. . . This is great deVine. . . I know that it's been rough. . . the poems will come. . . and whether it's one a day or one every two or three days. . . we will treasure them. . . as always. . . Wonderful my friend. . . --------------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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SEA 
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Poet~ Wow! No kidding, this is really great...Luckily for me I got to be the she that answered the phone for my man...... -SEA |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Some medicine is deVine...a shot of you cures my ills any day! |
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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
 Made me sad to read this, but good work.Elizabeth Something sweet, something sort of grandish, sweeps my soul when thou art near... [email protected] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
PdV I feel better already. Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Great advice! the pain doesn't stop until we give it permission! Corinne |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Very Heartbreaking Sharon, but with a very good message. Wonderful writing Hon |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
I swear it was my sister!!! Call back please, call back!!!  Good one lady, poignant and full of the heart which is a trademark "you." |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
More Devine words of wisdom Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Ah, what a true statement. I have the same ailment, and I wish the doctor could cure it. Mine came from going ahead and giving my all, and getting slapped in the face for it. Sigh.. But all heart pains hurt, don't they, whoever instigated them? Sorry to hear another story of love that did not achieve its possibilities. Take care. Sandra |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Truly incredible writing PoetD. This just reaches right out and grabs you! Well Done. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is superb!!! I loved it! |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
this was a very good poem, you really should have had a house call though maybe quicker diagnosis! seriously though he didn't deserve to be had after all he was quite a cad that you were better off without. |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Miss. deVine, Lessons from the heart weighty but full of wisdom, my dear your poetry may of flowed slowly from your pen, but every piece is rememberable and so much worth the wait, awesomely done Sharon. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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