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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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He wants to walk hand and hand on the shore, while I read poetry from the soul Make love under moonlit shoreline, while gypsy wind frolics in the waves, and he frolics with sweet taboo Calls me lover when the night winds blow and the skies thunder with the onset of rolling storms, his storm horizons sleep inside my mind, sleeps inside where he Gently speaks how emeralds captivate his stare, as the moon glows it's sparkle of shimmer Would whisper how lovely I look when he calls my name, and weaves my thoughts with his mind, weaves my thoughts with his hands, weaves his thoughts with my desire |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautiful, Greeneyes!! Just lovely!! Denise |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
"Gently speaks how emeralds captivate his stare," That was great! I especially love it because the beach has to be my absolute favorite place! Great write!! sp  Of all sad words of tongue or pen, the saddest are these: 'it might have been.' -John Greenleaf Whittier |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Calls me lover when the night winds blow and the skies thunder with the onset of rolling storms, his storm horizons sleep inside my mind, sleeps inside where he Gently speaks how emeralds captivate his stare, as the moon glows it's sparkle of shimmer ================== this is STUNNING!!! what a gorgeous poem... such sensual emotions laced with such mystical imagery .. this is a VERY well written poem .. its a feast for the readers senses ... very very creative work.. your unique vocabulary choices made this gem. excellent work green eyes... take care jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
You've done it again - I know how hard you work to craft these gems - (think it deserves a better title tho') |
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Tears_of_Grace Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 50 |
The power of the weave, a beautiful poem, you wove a fine poem yourself! |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
Greeneyes You have woven the best blanket here with the finest of thread. Great write. I liked that way you did a 90 degree during the last verse from him weaving all of you, to you weaving him with your desire. Hey, I like Emeralds too. (slyishly typing this) Garfield |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Greeneyes, I can only say beautiful beautiful writing  ~~Tara aka rp25 :o) |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Well it is the ones that inspire us that actually weave the poem within our mind so our muse may take advantage of it. Wonderful write. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Oh this is written with such beautiful imagery...well done Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
grrrrrrrrrr........I had a single response for all that responded, my computers does not like me today  but for all, please know really how much I appreciate your responses and reading....I kindly thank you Greeneyes |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
ooooops [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (edited 10-04-2000).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Green Eyes--What a delightful poem..."gypsy winds frolic"..."emeralds captivate his stare"...and I loved the last stanza...beautifully done! |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Martie I appreciate you letting me know you enjoyed, thank you so much.... GE |
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fool Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 61 |
this has such a gentle flow to it, I really enjoyed the feel of it. " Would whisper how lovely I look when he calls my name, and weaves my thoughts with his mind, weaves my thoughts with his hands, weaves his thoughts with my " And this last stanza is just superb. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
fool-- I am most thankful you enjoyed, and for your kind response~ GE |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I'm so glad I came in and caught this one...I too have green eyes, so it took on special meaning... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Ah one I missed, and it would have been my loss. |
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