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SEA
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0 posted 2000-09-27 07:39 PM



Write it down
scratch it out
stomp my foot
then I shout

Pulled my hair
and beat my pillow
and kicked about
like a Whomping Willow

I've lost my rhyme
could be the season
can't find my rhythm
for that, I've no reason

Tried again
got it right
It Works!
Much to my delight

Now I smile
and dance with glee
my Moody Muse
came back to me!

-SEA-
-and daughter Justien-

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1 posted 2000-09-27 07:50 PM


Sea--Love this...especially the thought of you writing it with your daughter...so happy you found that rascally muse!
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Martie~ Thank you! We sat down and I wrote part, then it was her turn, and we traded back and forth. It was really fun to do that with her.   -SEA

Live,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB


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3 posted 2000-09-27 08:05 PM


I love this! I'm glad you kicked that ole muse back into cooperation. *G* Kudos to SEA and talented daughter!
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4 posted 2000-09-27 08:36 PM


Ms. Justien~

This is just wonderful !
Chasing muses is lots of fun ...
I liked that Moody Whomping Willow !
Thanks for helping your mom ..
Now ... between you and me ..
where'd you hide her muse ?
I won't tell ... honest !


Ummm, Oh, Hi ... SEA~
Well, this is a great daughter/mom poem.
What fun !
No .... we haven't seen YOUR muse !
~*Marge*~


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5 posted 2000-09-27 10:51 PM


This is the most delightful poem I have read in a long time.  There have been a lot of fun poems but this one gave me visions of you tearing the house apart and running around tossing things about and finally turning to the purest imagination that is available to us all.  The honesty and innocence of the younger generation.  Justien, I bet you came up with most of this did you not?  It is okay to bail your mom out once in awhile but don't let her get tooo spoiled by you....you know how SPOILED MOM'S can be.  Now when do we get to see one just from you?  I bet you can give us all a run for our money.  

Justien and SEA---Thank you both so much for this delightful piece.  I could go on all night and almost have. So now go tuck Mom into bed.




[This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 09-27-2000).]

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Suthern~ thank you so much....Justien (my Queen)'s nerves were on full tilt hoping everyone would like this  

Marge~ Actually, all 3 of my kids have her tied up and in the closet.....they keep wanting to play with her.........  

Mark~ thank you very much. It was a lot of fun and came out rather fast. Justien really wants to write poetry so I'm encouraging her. Now the other two want to do the same with me.   And when I can't write, and it comes out all wrong, I just end up wasting a lot of paper! The house is safe.   And hey now, I'm only as spoiled as she is..........

-SEA

Live,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB


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7 posted 2000-09-28 09:53 AM




Okay, I woke up this morning and thought I was going to see a poem from Justien and well I can only guess that "YOU" have her tied up so she can't write.  Come on a be a proud MOM and let her show us her colors.                     PLEASE!!!!!!!!

Come on Justien, write one about your sweet Mom for us!!!!!                 





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Mark~ pushy,pushy.... she isn't even up yet! It's 6:55 a.m. here in California! She has 5 more minutes! We'll see what we can do to please you later today. Ok?   -SEA
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9 posted 2000-09-28 09:58 AM


WAY COOL MOM YOU ARE!!!!!  Thanks  
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10 posted 2000-09-28 05:48 PM


You're very lucky to be able to enjoy each other so much. I like this.
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11 posted 2000-09-29 10:08 AM


Great poem you two! I love it!!
The aggrivation of not being able to write, and after the frustration is over, look what happens!  

Just too KEWL!!       

Mine runs away often, would ya help me whomp things too in hopes it will return?  

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I know not what the future holds,
but I know Who holds the future.

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12 posted 2000-10-07 11:39 AM


SEA, this brought a BIG smile to my face loved the nice feeling this poem leaves you with!!
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I hope you both remember this and still have copies.  It's a keeper for sure.

Love it, SEA.

A

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14 posted 2009-05-12 10:01 PM


Alison is so GREAT with bringing up the best!




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