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The Quest |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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Though I don't know where you're going may I join you in the journey for my armour's rather rusted and I've been beaten at the tourney so many times before, I'm so very weary if we travel on together, it could make it more than cheery. As we travel on together may I 'prentice to your charm for I find my words have lost their zeal and only bring me harm and I am so weary, of battling all alone so while we're journeying together, it could feel like home. Though we journey the unknown may I foresee the distance when my heart has been renewed and meets with less resistance and the two are one, a knight and squire you on a quest and me, learning from your heart's desire. Now I know the destination as we go our separate ways you've been my inspiration may angels watch you all your days in the time we've spent together see how much I've grown so thank you for the respite, I'm ready to go on alone. "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Now I know the destination as we go our separate ways you've been my inspiration may angels watch you all your days in the time we've spent together see how much I've grown so thank you for the respite, I'm ready to go on alone. ================= ohh Keth..I love this gothic Shakes style poem this is very well thought out and written also love the message of letting love go while holding on to the things learned. wonderful work here ... enjoyed this creative offering by you take care jm |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Thanks JM, both for the response and the stop bye. Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I loved this - Although it could not have been me (  )- I'm still tilting at windmills - besides Dulcinea was not Sancho Panza  furthermore - your poetry stands alone in its own right - and always has (JMHO) |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kethry~ This is a nice piece of work - Particularly fond of this - 'Now I know the destination as we go our separate ways you've been my inspiration may angels watch you all your days in the time we've spent together see how much I've grown so thank you for the respite, I'm ready to go on alone.' How nice to know that we can move forward on our own ... when we've the strength we've gleaned from others. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Wil, it could not be, buffoon before a knight to me you will always be a hero with armour bright and me no Dulcinea, just a wench with longing song wanting to go with you and learning all along. Wil let's travel on together, until we separate I'll be your little songbird, you'll be Wilfred the Great. Marge,Thank you for leaving your gleanings for me to gather. Kethry < !signature--> "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- [This message has been edited by Kethry (edited 10-02-2000).] |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Kethry, you can come with me You'd be the perfect squire. I will gather firewood and then You can light my fire! Together we will travel on To fight for truth and right. Then as we lay exhausted I'll give you a wondrous knight! what windmill? I didn't see any windmill!!!! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Excellent Kethry. . . The Quest is always better shared. . . with someone to share the lesson. . . You can be my squire anytime. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Balladeer, what a wondrous knight thou art to stoop to cause a maid to blush and then to still her heart and if the fire between us two shouldst burn, enflame desire Then fain I go with thee alway, the wondrous knight and squire. Sir Sven you do me honor, that I your eye shouldst catch but I am unworthy, for you I durst not match you have the flame of passion that warms my frozen skin but your eyes beguile me, I dare not look lest I fall in. "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Kethry~ Wonderful writings, very enjoyable to read...well done Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Tracie, thanks for the bump. Be well Kethry. "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Kethry- Very nicely done. I enjoyed this piece alot. Thanks for sharing it. -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Though we journey the unknown may I foresee the distance when my heart has been renewed and meets with less resistance and the two are one, a knight and squire you on a quest and me, learning from your heart's desire. Now I know the destination as we go our separate ways you've been my inspiration may angels watch you all your days in the time we've spent together see how much I've grown so thank you for the respite, I'm ready to go on alone. Tis a wonderous quest in the (k)night indeed. WONDERFUL PENNING in every measure of the word. Loved this one and probably...no no...definitely my favorite of yours. To the library with this one. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
viraynes, thanks for liking it. Mark, you my knight, shining so bright show honour through and through your courteous words and kindly thoughts reveal a heart steadfast and true should you need company, as challenges you meet I would not be your partner, but accolyte at your feet. Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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weaubleau Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 101MO |
the walk is so much easier once we've had help with the first steps... your words bring to mind many situations i've been through in my life. thank you for sharing. |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
a beautiful tale, and it rhymes too! wonderful themes as well. i completely enjoyed this one. "i'm ready to go on alone." indeed... Everyone's got their demons. We all got somethin' to atone for. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Kethry, you are all girl, At least a lady in waiting. If you choose to see the world, I'll not be hesitating To email you a one way fare That will bring you over here. I've wanted to have equal time, For the lady to wait for me. A lady in waiting suits me fine, Tapping her foot expectantly. So come on over and sit a spell, Your anxious waiting suits me well. As for your poem - very intriguing, Kethry. I like it. Except the part where you could have worked in some kitty kicking and you refrained. I think you need to work on that part a little more - lol |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
This is a beautiful poem; and I really loved the ending; you've journeyed, you've learned, you're ready to go on alone!!! Inspiring work, as always!!! Pepper "I honor the place in you, that when you are in that place, and I am in that place in me, we are in the same place" Ram Dass |
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