Open Poetry #10 |
I digress |
jinxed Member
since 2000-09-27
Posts 86 |
did you want bacon for breakfast? i asked and you started telling me how you didn't feel well because you had to pass her house yesterday and you didn't understand why now that she isn't there anymore that it still has such a sad effect on you... but i know why you just never admitted how much you cared for her claimed "only friends" with every inch of your life and mine and now that miss walks too prissy for her feet to actually touch the earth has left because she cared so much for you and she felt like [maybe] her presence was why our marriage was going down the tubes and she has gone off and become a stewardess but wait...if she is really gone....who then do you talk to on the phone late at night? never mind, i digress...where was i...oh yes...she has gone off... oh and would you do me a favor...if you are ever on a plane and you see a bleached blonde stewardess who acts too stuck-up for her own good and whose voice is so sweet it could attract flies...and does so... reach your foot out in the isle and trip her... just for me... I know that would make me smile... oh yes...i digress again... did you say if you wanted me to cook the bacon after all? [This message has been edited by jinxed (edited 10-02-2000).] |
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Lady Lost Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 470 |
I hate her, too. I've been there. The problem isn't her though is it. If it were me? "Here's your bacon, sweetheart..oh and by the way..I've found myself a pilot. by bye "......beth "And I still believe you can never have too much fiction because reality is such a bore..." - REA |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice writing...I'll be looking for that stewardess...James |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
wow! you punched a heck of a lot in this little thing! excellent writing, with a depth of emotion that is quite astounding. take care. amy p.s....i travel a lot lol i'll be on the lookout for HER. "The head learns knew things, but the heart forever more practices old experiences" |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
jinxed, OOOooo.. I like your writing style! I enjoyed this poem.. unfortunately I don't fly .. but.. I will make sure to spread the word.. ~~Tara aka rp25 :o) |
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jinxed Member
since 2000-09-27
Posts 86 |
thanks all...lol..i figure eventually she'll trip herself *g* but spreading the word doesn't help either lol....no really thanks lots...glad you liked |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
"miss walks too prissy for her feet to actually touch the earth" How I love this description! And it would be a welcome change for my feet to trip up someone besides me. *G* Great job! |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
hhhhhmmmmmmm YEAH I think I saw her...dont worry her kind always get theirs in the end...meanwhile I kinda like the pilot idea..and oh yeah BURN the bacon |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
but what you need to do miss jinxed HFG.... is just send him to pilot's school... *wink* (did you really think I wouldn't know?) lol |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
You know, I think I tripped her about 5 years ago....and do you know what.....she bounced just like any other rubber queen would. Powerful write from you. |
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jinxed Member
since 2000-09-27
Posts 86 |
suthern ...lol knew i could count on you *g* thank you fine lady paula lol@burn the bacon....I plead "not guilty as charged" rebel nope....not hiding, everyone "makes" me right off lol...just don't have much heart lately....thank you much mark thank you...."a powerful write" from you that says a lot...thank you |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
"jinxed" your style is very familiar to me... I like the sarcasim and bitterness in this witty piece ... let him cook his own bacon ... find someone who'll cook you breakfast in bed yep...I like your style *smile* thanks for the mirror reply to my poem ... oh--welcome to passions take care jm |
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jinxed Member
since 2000-09-27
Posts 86 |
thanks for the welcome jm...lol...and yep I like your style too |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
the poem's great, but i still say the pen name ain't you.... not even close... and obviously, i recognized you from your first post .... it's hard not to recognize your excellent style of writing and the honed voice of a special poet and if anybody's got heart, it's you... so, i say toss this name away |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Well, I'm the only dummy who does not know who you are...but no matter, not only will I trip her, but I'll tell one of my kids to kick her in the shin...heh heh...good for you, like your spirit, under any name! |
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