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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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I speak to your eyes, soften my approach, you gaze to my mind thoughts, a velvet voice reaches your senses, penetrates your soul, woven in a tapestry of elegant ache, remembrance, like a snowflake melting against skin slowly, my heart will touch you in the stormy season & when dusk slides to dawn the shadows of love will fall gently across two lovers, ecstasy in the realms of light and darkness take me there into your souls depth, whispering softly, igniting the flame again |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
like a snowflake melting against skin slowly, my heart will touch you in the stormy season & when dusk slides to dawn the shadows of love will fall gently across two lovers, ecstasy in the realms of light and darkness take me there into your souls depth, whispering softly, igniting the flame again Darn....I thought it was for me til I saw the again in there. Hey, where ya been. I am so glad to see you back. This is lovely in all traces. Flow, format, and in content. So glad to see you back. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Elegant work indeed... my heart will touch you in the stormy season & when dusk slides to dawn the shadows of love will fall gently across two lovers, I really like these lines, Greeneyes.  K"He looked across the silky surface of the Severn... it was a famously difficult river with fierce tides..." From Jack Maggs |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
This is very lovely, and has the theme of my heart these days, re-united love. Beautiful. Thanks for writing this. Sandra |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Hey GE - this is a terrific return - I sincerely hope it means in reality all it implies - no one deserves it more One of your very best - and that's saying a lot! |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Absolutely beautiful writing! I couldn't quote my favorite line, because I loved every single one!! sp  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Greeneyes, I know many folk who will read this and enjoy it very much, thinking that it is meant for them... I know I did... Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Agreeing with Sunshine. This is very beautiful. Enjoyed it much. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Mark--Thank you for such a kind response, I have been under the weather so to speak, feeling better now, and thank you for asking..... Greeneyes |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Severn I appreciate you reading my humble words, thank you for letting me know you enjoyed... Greeneyes |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
catalinamoon how wonderful when love, and the heart, can be/is re united, a happy thought you have placed inside my mind....thank you Greeneyes |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Wilfred Yeats Bill, aside the fact that you are so dear to me, I must say this is just a poem of feelings....one day It will, I hope be reality.... thank you my friend....Greeneyes |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
snowpants love the name, *L* I live in MN so the "snowpants" come in handy, thank you for reading a responding so kindly.... Greeneyes |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Sunshine for one and all, comments such as this make writing worth while, thank you... Greeneyes |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Eloise Thank you for letting me know you enjoyed my words...*S* Greeneyes |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
hello green eyes ..its me brown eyes *smile* and my eyes enjoyed this sensual,intense poem greatly ... loved the way it drew the reader in and made them hold their breath till reaching the satisfying end ... at least thats what this reader did ... loved the title and the premise behind it .. Im always writing about my now infamous ache but I dont think it can be called elegant LOL wonderful read...adding it to my library take care jm |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Janet Marie you flatter me with such kind words, thank you....I admit most Ache's are not Elegant, though this memory was/is a beautiful recall for me.... thanks so much for your response, and for reading....Greeneyes |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lauren, Karilea is absolutely right... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
tis beautiful indeed |
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