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Winter's Request [Haiku]
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Winter's Request [Haiku] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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in winter’s chill days with ice and snow causing glaze love me through these days under gray of sky when sun disappears from sky love me through these days till spring softens new passion’s love between us two love me till that day Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
SIGH SIGH and SIGH!!!  loved these.  -SEA |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
snowballs hit window little children run away footprints in the snow A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Oooooh Ooooh Karilea ~ Love it!!!! Bonnie |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
The first home run in verse I ever saw ... made out of a triple. All hail Her Majesty, Queen of Haiku, Sunshine! Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Sunshine... this poem is just that, a ray of sunshine on a winter's day...that's what it would be if it were winter, officially. Here it is quite frosted with most trees bared and chimneys smoking their habits vehemently. I enjoyed the return to a theme of the final line of each stanza, giving a wonderful tie to them. Vivid results in your word weaving. |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
Very nice. I like how instead of stopping with one haiku, you wrote three, inter-connecting and expanding the feelings. With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Enjoyed it a lot!!!!!!! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I think that one big SIGH will do. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
beautiful |
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