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No Longer
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
~No Longer~ When I look into your eyes ... and no longer see my reflection there, when your lips no longer seek mine...even then I wont believe you no longer care. When the stars all cease to sparkle ... and I am no longer the wish you wish upon, when I call to you at night ... even in the silence ... I wont accept you are gone. If I reach out for you ... and find only emptiness where your warmth used to be, If I play our special song ... and find you're not there to dance with me. If I compose you a love poem ... but find you no longer wish to read my rhyme, If I ask a prophet and he tells me ... fate and destiny ... passed over me this time. All these things could never convince me ... that I must now let go of you ... there is only one thing that would offer proof ... one word that would ring true. For if the time should come ... that you no longer find your inspiration in me ... that is when my heart will know ... there is no longer us ... we now cease to be. If I am no longer your muse ... if I am no longer your reason for poetry. Janet Marie |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Poet~ Ain't gonna happen !  Now where'd that pretty head of yours come up with this one ? All kidding aside - a lovely and thoughtful render. Love n' hugs~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
WOW!!!! Janet, girl, this is good  Hope all is well with you |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
JM...HUGS to HEART...and you m'friend, m'twin, if I could change things for you, you know I would...light a candle, so will I...okay? I love ya much and send you hugs and prayers..... |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
I dont know what to say...so I only say this...you know where I am...hugs and so much love |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Janny Floating winged ~HUGS~ this is so sadly tender and beautiful but gal you will never stop being anyone's inspiration and muse...you are FOREVER Love Ya Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
JM wonderful work, just full of all those longing feelings. They say time heals, well if it does, I wish the heart could be left back in time and we go back for in when it's better. Beautiful poem, and it's an indication of what a fine poet you are that you can write your heart so well at a time like this. Take care Mushy Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I just read this and I'm quite impressed but I want to come back for a more relaxed read when I have time...I just had to let you know it's certainly worth coming back for....love ya Van reflector.....ethome |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Janet Marie, you have no hope of that happening, for you inspire so often and so well. later muse gator Kethry Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed? Rex E. Alford |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Our loved ones are indeed our greatest inspiration to write... There's much truth in these words, my friend... Nicely done..  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
thank you all for these oh-so-lovely replies .. filled with hugs, love and sweet words. no worries tho...ok ...all is well, I was inspired for this one by a conversation with a friend ... we were discussing the way a person can tell when the love or need has gone out of a realtionship ... and I was of mind that as a poet we would focus on the muse being the true measure of emotion. thank you for such encouraging replies ... as always ya make me smile. love ya jm "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" Lao Tze Tao ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
My goodness Girlie...you know how to start a day don't you! Wow...I'm always in awe of how you make these gems flow together with such grace and float into poetry like the wings of the butterfly...you reach inside so deeply and weave the pain with the tears of angels and the smiles of saints...to cease to inspire...ohhhhhhhh and the perfect song plays.....sing to me Rob "If You're Gone" ...that boy will never cease to inspire...*winkiewinkie* And when we no longer have the rhyme in our soul...that is when we will surely fall from the embrace of the angel wing hugs that hold us in our darkest moments...Love You...because...YOU KNOW You cannot dance in the sun until you have cried in the rain~ |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Wonderful words J.M. They stir a memory, but like an ostrich I've stuck my head in the sand "dont want to go there!", but if you can stir emotion in my stoney old heart your a miracle worker. Thanks for sharing. Regards Olias. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
oh Janet......this dug into my heart and stuck the cords of ache.....and of course, I loved it.  -SEA |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
a sad one..and heartfelt Janet Marie..and as always nicely written.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi Janet--the measure of love to a poet, is poetry...yes, I thank you have something there...and what a well written poem you have written about it...I know you have inspired me more then once...hugs to all the muses everywhere! |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Hey Brown-eye's you will always be one of my muses... and one of my reasons for poetry, cause I love what you write and what you think about.  Parker |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Janet-- this touches deep within. as your poetry always does, i am inspired. but today for some reason even more so. this was so beautiful, so poignant, so full of YOUR grace, so YOU. truly inspirational, you are. and I have learned to know you thru your poetry quite well I think...and I must say Janet Marie, you are a truly remarkable person. Love ya, Amy |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
It is very, very beautiful, full of emotion and expression and it flowed, Janet Marie, just like all of your work does. "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Margie ... just thoughts rolling around in my head ...needing to be put to rhyme...thank you sweets Jeff... thank you for the wow .. and yes all is well Sen .. thank you me sweet...and much love and hugs to you too-- my poet twin of heart. Paula... thank you hon...all is well ... guess this one came out sadder than intended ...but me moody muse is in charge of these things ... I just hold the pen . Tracie...thank you my girlie for such a sweet reply...your smiles are forever too Marsha... thank you for the lovely compliments and concern ... no need to worry tho... this is simply a poetic weave. E.babes....come back as often as you like ... your always welcome on my words Keth... thank you so much ..what a kind, wonderful thing to say ..truly. Nan ...thank you mam' ....very much ..for the read and the kind words.Holly....LOL...yes I KNOW and yes...we can find our inspiration in many places ... you KNOW where this one came from...thank you ...love you too.. now turn off those videos and go write poetry LOL (or check the oven) yayayaya Olias....thank you poet sir...but no miracles here....I have read your poetry... no heart of stone writes like that...but I thank you for such kind words to my work. Sea ... I know you ..you know... Poets know....thank you much gator-girl Victoria ... thank you for the kind words and for stopping by...its so nice to have you here. Martie...yes ...hug those moody muses of ours...gotta keep em happy.. and Thank you for allowing me to inspire you ...and you know you do the same for me...(right along with the poetic envy) *smile* P-man...thank you sweet friend..your so good for my poets ego ...and for my inspiration as well ...even your replies read like poetry Amygirl...what can I say to such a wonderful reply...thank you for such sweet words of my work.. and your pretty remarkable your self. Kathleen ... thank you dear poet ...how sweet of you to say so. thanks to all for the lovely replies take care jm |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Wow, this piece is so sincere and so emotional Janet.....I can feel your emotions as I read...those last two lines just perfectly sealed it too...excellent poem! Nathan |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Janet Marie- wow...this just aches with such truth. you, however, do not have to worry about that ever happening...you inspire so many with every word you write. hugs to you, -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Janet Marie....you have absolutely NO idea how true these words are...or maybe you do. Regardless, it is certainly a work of fiction coming from you....cause it can't happen!!!!! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
If I ever wanted to hear your song, There will be no longer to say the words!!!!!!!enjoyed it!!!!! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey baby these dudes think you can't write the blues...well I'm here to tell'em I know ya can cause I know ya loves em and I know you can be the blues ...just like me..he he I gotta see the song in your work ya see so I took out the last part of the lines....and they were fab! ...but I got to the root of it. Well I discovered just how you were settin this gig up! "when I look into your eyes, when your lips no longer seek mine when the stars all cease to sparkle when I call to you at night....... I wont accept that you are gone. If I reach out for you If I play our special song If I compose you a love poem If I ask a prophet and he tells me..... fate and destiiny passed over me. All these things could never convince me there's only one thing that would offer proof for if the time should come that is when my heart will know we now cease to be." Oh baby you was settin up the ends of them there lines with the blues...ya see that takes talent to turn the blues into a beautiful poem.....tell all them dudes and dudesses...that you is just writing girl.. you know I loves ya but I ain't worried bout ya...get down girl...write some more...yeah lordy ........he he...... just havin some fun! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Nate ..thank you so much for such a wonderful sincere reply and its so nice to see your name here. Vicky.. thank you very much..that is so sweet of you to say, but in love its something we all will have to, or will have already had to deal with ... but the idea of the muse and poetry speaking for the heart from a poets view inspired me to write this. thanks again for your sincere reply. Deer ....yes I do know..WE ALL learn this lesson one time or another ... its a fact of love ...but I thank you for always thinking so highly of my poetry. your such a spam-sweetie. Vandana ... thank you so much for stopping by, nice to have you here,glad you enjoyed. E-babes...you are SOOOO COOOOL...thank you so much for this ... I LOOOOVE what you did ...you can play with my poetry any time wow..who knew I could sing the blues LOL...I love seeing my poetry thru someone elses eyes...thank for making me hip and cool LOL... you are Van-tastic my melodic friend. thank you all for the replies love to ya jm |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh my...  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Now this would never happen, nope never! I love the way you write these Jan with those little ~ inbetween I can't find that conversation one? Where you are talking to someone, can you if you see this send me a link to it, I want to print it out. You have definitely started my day off with a smile in my heart. Good thing the archives are here I say. |
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