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The Storm--Inspired by SEA's - Storm Within
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The Storm--Inspired by SEA's - Storm Within |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song 
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 The Storm ~~*~~ Storm resides ... from within the heart As passing clouds kiss with thunder's touch Reminding me of days we dare not depart Memories dwell ... I loved you this much I hold to past times that we once shared I cling to photos in the eyes of my mind I sing the blue of sorrows in which we were paired Tears of which have my heart is passion's bind Do you see all that I feel in typhoons quake Can you see where rain stole this perfect team Will you turn from our love and forever sake Knowing that you took my heart's lightning dream Mark Bohannan  [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 10-29-2000).] |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
Knowing that you took my heart's lightning dream Such a storm of emotion that we churn within our hearts. Nice response. |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
oopss forgot to ask...how do you get those graphics in there? |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Ron-Thank you and I will e-mail you something to help you. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Mark- my cowboy friend...this is beautiful. 'knowing that you took my heart's lightning dream' i'm loving this line.  big hugs, -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Storms from within, it is such a wild ride....reading yours and Sea's storm from within.....it bring me back to my storm....excellent write Mark... loved it. hugs....Charisma |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Mark, Im glad you posted this ... when I read it as a poetic reply.. I thought it was deserving of its own light... it is VERY beautiful... rich and powerful in the imagery that is so much a part your poetic gift.. but what drew me more to this one even again now as i reread it.. is the depth and intensity of emotion you express... this is a passionate, bittersweet, emotive piece of work ... its awesome MC.. exquisite ..written from the places deep inside you .. from all the ways you love... I see your heart and soul in this one... ================ Memories dwell ... I loved you this much I hold to past times that we once shared I cling to photos in the eyes of my mind I sing the blue of sorrows in which we were paired Tears of which have my heart is passion's bind =========== Will you turn from our love and forever sake Knowing that you took my heart's lightning dream ============== so much expressed in a few perfect verses later-storm-chaser-gator  me |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Lovely and so poignant. Would love to see both poems posted together, a perfect match -yes. Corinne |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Mark- My hat's off to you - a very fine piece of work! |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
"Do you see all that I feel in typhoons quake Can you see where rain stole this perfect team Will you turn from our love and forever sake Knowing that you took my heart's lightning dream" Mark-- this is beautiful! i agree with Janet, this definitely deserved its own light. your writing in this is so powerful and intense. each line shows the loving heart you have, and the depth of your emotions. all of your work does that though, but this one really struck home with me! take care. ~amy~ |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Mark my friend, this is indeed a beautiful and powerful poem. (Actually very real for me as there is a storm sitting right on top of the hospital, at this very minute.) If the lightening flashes anymore I'll expect the entrance of the demon king. Really amazingly astounding, I love this. Truly love this. Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Rainydays Member
since 2000-10-21
Posts 324 |
Hello Mark, what moving verse this is. The images of your poem are enhanced by the visual images, but even without, remain vivid, strong, striking. Wonderful, stirring writing. Thank you ~ Rainydays |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This bit of electrification leaps off the pages...as such a storm touches everyone, now and then... wonderfully done, Sir... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Vicky-Thank you and that is one of my favorite lines in this as well. Hugs back to you my friend. Charisma-Thank you and it does seem so much better when you read hers along with it doesn't it? JM-my friend, the storms of the heart are the ones with the most power. It is hard not to be able to pen them with electricity as they are so close and felt so vividly. Thank you so much. Corinne-Why thank you for that but timing is always an issue sometimes you know. Bill-Thank you my friend. Coming from you those words mean so much. Amy-I do so appreciate your honest and open comments and don't forget, if it weren't for SEA's inspiration in her piece, this one might never have come about. Thank you from that bottom of my heart my friend. Marsha-Thank you President...glad you liked it. A good storm is just what we all need to cleanse the soul sometimes. Rainydays-Why thank you so very much. I am really appreciative of your comments and that you liked it so much. karilea-Yes, we all have them once in awhile and that is what makes us grow within. Thank you so much...and QUIT CALLING ME SIR...LOL...makes me feel old and we all know I am only 12 or so..  |
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SEA 
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Mark~ you know I loved this as a beautiful reply, but this is so much better, in it's own light...... "Memories dwell ... I loved you this much" "I cling to photos in the eyes of my mind" I liked these best..... -SEA |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'Will you turn from our love and forever sake Knowing that you took my heart's lightning dream' Great lines, Mark! I can definitely relate. Wonderfully written, my friend!! (I love the photos, too!) sp Of all sad words of tongue or pen, the saddest are these: 'it might have been.' -John Greenleaf Whittier |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mark--Storms of heart are, if nothing else, big...I wish for you some gentle rain...This is a wonderful poem! |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Mark~ My friend, I must say, I know those storms of the heart a little too well myself, and you captured their essence with such beauty. 'Tis true, methinks, from sadness springs much beauty! ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sweet, sweet Cowboy~ 'Memories dwell ... I loved you this much' And that my friend says it all ! Beautiful. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
The storm of our hearts...this is such magnificent work Mark...and to know that it was inspired by a fellow poet speaks volumes for your talent as well as for your heart...amazing and spectacular...as the storm itself...Excellent weaving my friend~ |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Mark~ I just wanted to come back and read this again......it just sparks something inside me..... -SEA |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
SEA-Anything to do with you or your inspiration will always have beauty. Thank you for inspiring this one in me. snowpants-My dear friend, I am sorry that you can relate, but I think most of us can at some point in our lives. This was not written to do with me now, but just something that came out after reading SEA's poem as mentioned. Thank you. Martie-Ahhh but Martie my friend. My heart is nothing but sunshine right now and how could it not be with friends such as yourself. Thank you my dear one. TerryW-Thank you and yes, beauty does seem to follow pain and grow from there. Marge-Thank you my sweet friend and yes, that does pretty much say it all doesn't it? Holly-My friend, I do so love getting inspiration from other poets and things in life and look what happens when I do. (wink) Thank you my friend and YOU KNOW that this is NOT something in my heart right now but just inspired. SEA-My sweet, you may come around and flash your spark at me anytime, I will always try to ignite it for you. Now how about a big one on the lips to warm you up a bit. You seem a bit wet from the strom and all. |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Mark~ Always.............  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
When one writes of storms of their soul or heart, these will always be the most emotional. You have a gift in writing of them Mark, hoping to read you again soon. |
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