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Rosebud1229
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since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813
North Carolina

0 posted 2000-11-15 11:15 PM



If I could only write a poem,
That would convey the feelings of my heart,
Then maybe you would know how this message
needs to start,
If I could only touch your face,
Make you realize my dream,
Is only of you to be near,
It's only you my darling I want to kiss,
Search your mind, make you mine
Feel our heart beats entertwined,
If I could only say the words that so
often come out wrong,
Then maybe you would know it's only
you my darling I've loved all along.
Look deep within my eyes and see
All the love I hold for thee,
Look straight into my heart,
and see the cherished place for thee,
If only I could tell you in the words
That fall apart,
but maybe I could tell you
In just the simpliest way,
By holding you near,
kissing your lips,
and saying I love you even more,
Than yesterday and the day before,
Each day I'll promise to love you even more.
I know sometimes our life gets hectic
caught up in a whirlwind,
Distance comes between,
Always remember dear your always
in my heart and as I hold you near
each night your also in my dreams
Of yesterday, today and Forever.

© Copyright 2000 Rose - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
1 posted 2000-11-15 11:18 PM


He should appreciate every word in every line...

thanks for sharing.


Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




Rosebud1229
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since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813
North Carolina
2 posted 2000-11-15 11:29 PM


thanks Sunshine, sometimes it's not always easy to show someone how you feel , That's what I love about poetry it tends to open up the heart.
Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
3 posted 2000-11-16 12:21 PM


Rosebud,

Beautifully expressed feelings.  

LW


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

Daniel J D
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since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471
Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia
4 posted 2000-11-16 12:35 PM


Rosebud,
This is just beautiful and warm. Keep writing.

"Each day I'll promise to love you even more.
I know sometimes our life gets hectic
caught up in a whirlwind,
Distance comes between,"

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

5 posted 2000-11-16 02:36 PM


If I could only write a poem,
That would convey the feelings of my heart,
Then maybe you would know how this message
needs to start,
If I could only touch your face,
Make you realize my dream,
Is only of you to be near,
It's only you my darling I want to kiss,
Search your mind, make you mine
Feel our heart beats entertwined,
If I could only say the words that so
often come out wrong,
Then maybe you would know it's only
you my darling I've loved all along.
Look deep within my eyes and see
All the love I hold for thee,
Look straight into my heart,
and see the cherished place for thee,
===========
you just did ...and did it with grace ..
a beautiful, sincere promise...
wonderful writing RB
take care
jm

"What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly"
Lao Tze Tao

~Butterflies are meant to be free~


Rosebud1229
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since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813
North Carolina
6 posted 2000-11-16 10:29 PM


Thanks Lonewolf, Daniel and JM, Sometimes words seem to not come so easily especially with someone you hold so dear to your heart, I guess that's why sometimes because there's so many feeling tied together, it's hard to express at times. Thanks JM, sometimes I don't feel like I express myself enough.
passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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7 posted 2004-04-18 08:39 PM


a classic beauty
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