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Flying Into The Flame
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Flying Into The Flame |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
.gif) ~Flying Into The Flame~ Cry myself to sleep at night, wake up to the same cold tears. Entangled in sheets of all my self doubt, to tired to fly from the weight of all my fears. Lying here alone with this ache ... held only by all the mistakes I've made. Knowing all to well ... to be touched (just once) like this ... even my poetic soul I might trade. See the flicker of your light, see me fly into the flame. Watch me singe once for your touch, watch me singe twice to hear you whisper out my name. It's about feeling the fire rise inside ... the slow burn you fuel in me. It's about this never ending ache, the need to inhale the intensity. So this candle dance becomes a ritual, as I take another fall ... Drawn to your glow from a mile away, watch me crash and burn ... then watch me crawl the wall. Wings ever in motion ... though now ... torn and tattered. Still ... as long as I can feel the heat ... I can pretend the pain never mattered. Always aware of the weakness, ever owned by the need. Blinded by the smoke ... warning signs ... these wings wont heed. But still, I never forget ... I've only me to blame. You cant hurt me more than I hurt myself ... flying thru the smoke and ashes of my shame. Also recognizing that you too are a moth, even though you give off a light ... you're just as lost. The attraction goes both ways ... and in the end both hearts will pay the flames cost. Being a moth ... it aint easy ... always trying to keep up with the butterflies. Watch me set my self on fire ... hoping to see the glow of me in your eyes. As I flit around the flame ... I wish to be spun in your heart's cocoon. To then hatch as a lovely jade Luna ... flying free on wings of strength ... owned only by the moon. Janet Marie .gif) ~Smoke and Ashes~ by:Tracy Chapman from the CD New Beginings I thought I'd won your heart when I held your hand in mine I thought it was true love the way we complemented each other But my right is your wrong And when you're right then I'm left with nothing Your light and your heat have all been spent Leaving only smoke and ashes Only smoke and ashes baby I've got a red hot heart Any your heart's as blue as the blood in your veins I say there's fire down below You say it's only smoke and ashes baby I'm crying all the time Salty stinging tears And mourning for the past carbon-dated years But knowing now for certain that you were always right Because if a breeze could blow you out of my life It's only smoke and ashes baby Only smoke and ashes baby I've got a red hot heart And your heart's as blue as the blood in your veins I say there's fire down below You say it's only smoke and ashes baby ... only smoke and ashes ... only smoke and ashes ... .gif) .gif) |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Janet~ If I had to pick just one line it would be 'Still ... as long as I can feel the heat ... I can pretend the pain never mattered.' I know that so well. But I loved the entire poem, the ache is so there, so real, and I felt it in every word. Loving this one....  -SEA |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Janet Marie, Awesome write. Sooo powerful. I felt the heat and the pain. btw I loved the graphic thingy one day I'm gonna learn how to do that. Write on Kethry Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed? Rex E. Alford |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You're crying today, little one...I can hear it... hugs, Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Nothing like a poem about moth-erly love to get me going  This has all of thoughts, desires, longings and emotion that is standard in all your poetry....that's why I love all of it. You are gifted, spam sister |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
I can feel this, JM...so well... |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet, my little moth friend...I am here to tell you that you are a flame...and your flame is your poetry, and it burns, believe me, it lights up the sky!!!! |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
JM, this is as powerful as anything I've ever read of yours, it has everything and it's amazing. Really it is, the image of the moth forever fluttering in the flame. Utterly picturesque, and so true, take care of yourself. Remember you can reach your goal, even if it takes awhile. And after you've been on the bottom the only way is up, and there are friends waiting to help you. Your poetry is always wonderful, and I admire the beauty you share with us all. Take care Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
MY sweet "POET" and "MOTH" ... you light up the forum with your glow everyday and your words are only a part of that. I know that the flames seem so enticing at times and there isn't much that we wouldn't do to fly into them sometimes but believe me, your are a double weapon in this as you too are one of those flames my dear. As usual, your pen and your muse write with that special butterfly pastel powder that I love so much. Hugs baby and aim for the golden flame instead of the blue one. It is the most rewarding.  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Janet my sweet little moth you have just flown into the flame of my heart...... "See the flicker of your light see me fly into the flame. Watch me singe once for your touch, watch me singe twice to hear you whisper out my name." I can feel a calling of magic looking to explode when two lonely moths unite... This is a poem done with great metaphors and the illustrations continue throughout leading the reader right down the story path until they're "flying free on wings of strength ...owned only by the moon." I loved it!!! Write on VANtastic!! My lady may I have this dance forgive a knight who knows no shame my lady may I have this dance and lady may I know your name you danced upon a soldier's arm and I felt the blade of love so keen and when you smiled you did me harm and I was drawn to you my queen. Now these boots may take me where they will though they may never shine like his there is no knight I would not kill to have my lady's hand to kiss yes and they did take me through the hall to leave me not one breath from you and they fell silent one and all and you could see my heart was true. Then I did lead you from the hall and we did ride upon the hill away beyond the city wall and sure you are my lady still A night in summer long ago The stars were falling from the sky and still, my heart, I have to know why do you love me, lady, why? M Knopfler |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Well baby...anything worth doing is worth doing right...you even make being a moth sound good. You opened every poetic scar and let it bleed onto this page...every weakness every hurt...and it showed sweetie. This is awesome my winged friend. There isn't enough fire proof mascara in the world is there...and we know that no matter how bad it hurts when we get burned...we go back time and time again because just maybe we won't get burned...me thinks it's time to do a rain dance Love ya me Moth Queen...hey atleast candle light brings out your eyes *winkiewinkie*...always a bright side  |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Janet-- this is probably the most beautiful and yet heart wrenching poems, i've ever read. through your poetry we see glimpses of you and your life. when i read your work, i dont just read the words...i feel them. i can't pick out just one line or one verse from this that i like as it is a whole work, and not one piece could stand alone w/o the rest. i know that your heart is weary and hurts, and that no matter what someone says to you it sometimes doesn't help...but i wanted you to know i do truly admire you. and i think that if my Mom was here you two would be the best of friends. So much of you reminds me of her. thank you for your poetry but mostly for your wonderful friendship. love ya. ~amy~ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
---Being a moth ... it aint easy ... always trying to keep up with the butterflies.--- WOW, if that doesn't say a lot for the human race, nothing does. Beautiful piece JM. jwesley |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Ohhhhh Janet....... How I feel every word you write.......I feel them tear through me like I can't explain. You are truly gifted.......and your poetry, I am sorry, is Perfection........your heart stand alone in it's uniquness.......Your word have a healing, soothing like power to them.......makes me cry.....which is a form of realease we all need. You of all people deserve more then this life can offer I am sure. Jenn E |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Sea ..thanks hon and yes..I knew you would relate to this one . Keth ... thank you much for the read and as for the graphic-thingy ..I'm still learning too. Sun ...I dont doubt that you can ... and besides is isnt that what moths do best thank you for the "all knowing reply" Dearest Deer ... A gifted reply from you means everything .. sweet as Spam thank you very much. Satiate .. (always loved that name) ....thank you very much for the read and kind reply. Martie......YOUR reply lights up my sky...thank you so much sweet poet ...you always see me in a better light . Marsha ... thank you much for the words of encouragement and very kind reply. Where indeed would we be with out our close friends here . Mark ... only you can know ... and you know that I know too .... and me thinks ya see me thru butterfly glasses thank you for this... ~very much~ ...hugs right back to ya baby. E-babes ...thank you my friend...for the sweet reply and yet another perfect song verse ...you always pick the right one. Holly-girl .... you already know what Im gonna say ....yes you know.... and I'll dance with you in the rain any time ... me moth mascara is waterproof too... LOL....*winkiewinkie*  thanks for the inspiration to write this one..my fellow moth poet of the flame. love ya too.Amy-girl......what can I say to such a sweet wonderful reply....I keep saying it... you are sunshine sweetie ...Thank you and love ya too. JW... thank you so much poet sir ....for the wow and the accepting reply. Jenn .... you are always so sweet to me...thank you for seeing me thru my poetry, as it is the one place we can all be beautiful butterflies. Thank you all for the wonderful words. love to ya jm "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" Lao Tze Tao ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
J.M. Hi, with your words it is evedent that moths on the inside are more beautiful and glorious than any gaudy butterfly. Your emotions shine like a torch in every line, it is a great talent and a great power to be able to put down on paper your emotions with such clarity and depth. This is wonderful work, from a beautiful moth. Take care Olias |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, Dear winkiewinkie you made my eyes go blinkieblinkie. Your poets pen was dipped in tear Without one shred of foamy cheer. Brave it sadly this if and when And next time use ink in your pen. Love Winkiewinkie. PS. wonderful write. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Hey Janet, Did I miss out or something??? This is such a BRILLIANT offering... Great! regards, sudhir |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Whooo -eee - when you throw your heart into a write - you have my wings singed right alongside your own - I agree with those above me who've said this is one of if not your very best - - they're absolutely correct - |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
JM-Heat and ashes, both seem blown away by a breeze, both common in fragility yet so far apart in their own way. This one was beautiful, written from your heart, nicely done. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
So what your saying is you really like a hot butt... like maybe a firefly of a guy. Hey, over here, i'm waveing....  so fly baby fly. Parker |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Olias.... thank you so very much for such wonderful encouragement and compliments of my writing... and its so nice to have you back. Sy-guy ... sorry to make those beautiful winkiewinkies go blinkieblinkie ... sometimes that blues gotta be sung ...thank you for the relpy of rhyme-divine and for the winkiewinkie *S* Sud ... no you didnt miss a thing .. but we miss you...thank you for the always brilliant smiles you leave me...so nice to see your name here more oftenWil...LOL.thank you for the woooo-eeeee and the wonderful words. your too good to me poet sir. Gemini .... thank you for such a poetic and lovely reply... yes..your right about that breeze Parker ... LOL...a firefly??? so is that what they call it in Canada LOL ....and hon ....you dont need a torch....you need only to "flick your bic" thank you sweet-tease ..ya always make this moth smile. thank you all for the kind words love to all in poetry land jm |
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