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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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Your smile was the axis My world turned upon But one day I blinked And learned you were gone. I gave you my heart And endeavored to please. Now the screams of "WHY?" Drop me down to my knees. Was I so awful? Did beauty I lack? What made you walk off And never look back? You made me feel special. You called me your friend. Did you mean a word Or did you pretend? Does it bother you This pain that I feel? I question my mind. Was one moment real? This incessant heartache Makes me quite deranged. I don't understand. What happened? What changed? Do you even remember? Do my memories lie? It gives me no comfort Knowing I tried. Were we doomed from the start? Was I stupid to trust? I believed in forever Now my dreams are dust. Could you tell me when You made you decision I was unworthy Of all but derision? Or do thoughts of me Bother your mind? Will I ever again My sanity find? Most times I wish You'd just gone ahead And ripped out my heart. I'm the living dead. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
First off welcome to Passions...the place where a million hugs are to be found. Time in itself will heal and fianlly give the answers but it is the in between times that seem to stand still. LOVELY verse from you and look forward to your healing with us. |
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jlocke Member
since 2000-09-10
Posts 169CC,TX |
Welcome to Passions, Were we doomed from the start? Was I stupid to trust? I believed in forever Now my dreams are dust. I'm sure we've all been there before. As a pessimest I would say we're always doomed from the start. But we can't let that idea stop us. We must start. We must always allow some degree of trust. And if it doesn't work out, we will always have another dream. I really loved your poem. Please keep sharing more. You won't be rejected here. Love is the law, love under will. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I am in the beginning stages of a relationship right now and it would hurt me very much if I was rejected because I am trying to trust and I am giving from my heart. I know the hurt you are talking about when you say "Most times I wish you had just gone ahead and ripped out my heart." Hope you are alright...Take care..James |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Welcome to Passions, first of all...and I really liked this post...reminded me much of another memorable debut---"you oughtta know" by Alannis Morisette...well spoken, and to the point. |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
The one line: "Was I so awful" Makes you catch your breath, for it is "the" question that haunts when find yourself alone. I really like this. |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Welcome to Passions, reject. (it is going to be hard calling you that, as it is an insult where I am) "Was I stupid to trust?" Never! They were stupid to break that trust. If you do your best for someone and they walk away, it's their loss! Take care and keep writing, it helps so much, and so do the people here. Dee |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
A sincere thanks to each of you for reading, liking and extending a welcome. Mark and jlocke - I'm not sure I believe in hugs or dreams anymore, but I appreciate your comments. jmlee - I wish you luck. No one gives their love expecting things to end badly. If you see deterioration, you have a chance to make things right. But sometimes, even hindsight doesn't give any clues. I hope you're spared the experience. serenity - That reminder is an incredible compliment. I don't deserve it, but I thank you for it. seraphin - And no one answers the question, so it keeps haunting. Thank you. Dee - It's not the identity I would have chosen, but it's what I am. Thank you for your welcome. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Reject, welcome to passions. Excellent poem. Maybe we can help you change your name from reject to perfect. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
reject, this is a very good poem, the flow of your words are exquisite as far as knowing sometimes we don't have the answer, sometimes we think we have the answers but love have a imagination much stronger than were prepared for at times,this is a awesome poem hope to read more and welcome! |
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jinxed Member
since 2000-09-27
Posts 86 |
very good writing...how many of us have felt this.....you put it down on paper perfectly  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Kethry, Rosebud, and jinxed - Thank you very much for welcoming me and liking my poem. |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
I know the pain of loveing someone one minute, then they turn on you, deceive you, betray your love, rejecting every part of you, You ask yourself why? The answer...it is their problem...not yours, if you gave your best...it wasn't anything you did, or didn't do! anyway welcome to Passions! |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
reject, Hmmmm... I know I read this before and I thought I responded to it.. but it seems I didn't.... so I'm letting you know I enjoyed the read. So honest and emotoinally revealing.. thank you for sharing. ~~Tara aka rp25 :o) |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Reject~ Your opening line was a beaut ! 'Your smile was the axis My world turned upon' Welcome to Passions and wishing you another smile ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Ruth, What a find - your first post in PiP. I hope that you believe in hugs and dreams again - this was a heart-wrenching read and I think most of us have been down that road. It hurts to read now years after you posted it - but I see the dreamer in you. Thank Goodness, you are here. It would be an emptier place without you. Alison |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I'm glad Alison raised this back up to the top - I get to send you a Welcome to Passions email!  My gosh girl - you've come a long way!  " It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
LOL... This is what I get for using an alias once upon a time... *G* Thank you so much, lovely ladies... "suthern" has been around forever but "reject" was shortlived... glad you liked! *S* |
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