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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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If it seems like she's acting the part remember, she's run the years on a treadmill of fate. Oh, she's always known that she could do better but it's the same old action and everyone takes. Oh she'd be afaid if she did'nt remember when she was'nt so sure surfing night waves. Now her chest fills up with the songs of a summoner singing sweet notes to the hearts she can sway. In a lounge for the lonely she makes her escape singing old blue-ribbon anthems of grace, she calls lost lovers from graveyards of shame and cleanses their soul with borrowed refrains. She wears black leather boots with shiny brass buckles with flashing green emeralds over denim and pearls, with her long golden hair tossed and tussled shining in lights of the nightlife world. Take out the old shotglass let the memories begin there'll be sippin and smokin to the Lord's missing wrath but when the show opens all the scuttlebutt friends will drown in the river of blues she brings back. Now the crowd is seasoned with da capo survival downing their liquor in candlelight shadows so she gives them a chaser with a perfect revival of oldies and goldies from the musical bible. Oh she smiles at the invites the late night repasts with her guests all braying their nightcap laugh. but she'll turn them down like a bad broadcast if their tune's not the same kind of blue she can match. In a lounge for the lonely she makes her escape singing her blue-ribbon anthems of grace. Alone in her silence there's a love she once named but he's lost in the memories of borrowed refrains. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
BRAVO my friend This poem 'me' really likes If only I could find the rite words To let ya know it's superb...  Coco [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 11-10-2000).] |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Ethome, this is soooooooo good, I really love this one, I can see her standing there singing. My this is such a great write from you, one of your best, I think. But you know I like all yours but I really do think this is one amazing poem. Take care Mushy Marsha  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
thank you Coco for the uplifting reply...much appreciated! thanks Marsha for your always so kind comments and for the reference to this being one of my best ...much appreciated |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Ethome-- excellent poem! this is my new favorite of yours...the words just flowed out onto the page as if telling a story. you had me intrigued from beginning to end. take care. ~amy~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Now the crowd is seasoned with da capo survival downing their liquor in candlelight shadows so she gives them a chaser with a perfect revival of oldies and goldies from the musical bible. Oh she smiles at the invites the late night repasts with her guests all braying their nightcap laugh. but she'll turn them down like a bad broadcast if their tune's not the same kind of blue she can match. In a lounge for the lonely she makes her escape singing her blue-ribbon anthems of grace. Alone in her silence there's a love she once named but he's lost in the memories of borrowed refrains. =================== oh E-babes...this is so way cool... and so melodic in its bittersweet tale... you put us right there in the pub... and I want the stool next to you.  OH yeah ---and those last two lines... PERFECTION of poetry... later- way cool lyric and verse gator jm |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ethome--What a colorful story you have written...and a poem of rhythm and graced perfection...You captured the atmesphere, the person, the feeling with reality colored with understanding...well done! |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Brilliantly atmospheric and well written, with a deep understanding and sympathy. I loved it. Regards Olias |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Ethome, Well done, I liked it very much. "Alone in her silence there's a love she once named but he's lost in the memories of borrowed refrains". Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Amy I thank you for those words of kindness and I appreciate you taking the time to read this poem. My dear Janet....what can I say... you are indeed a great poet friend and I want to thank you so much and yes that stool is there for you to sit and listen to oldies and goldies and we can talk poetry or Van..thanks again ....ethome |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Ethome I like this...James |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
I loved this read - thank you! Roniece |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
ethome, can I tell you how smooth this is, probably not because there are no words to describe the more than satin quality of this write. However I can tell you I love this especially "In a lounge for the lonely she makes her escape" Shades of Blue Hotel. Be well Kethry Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed? Rex E. Alford |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Martie I alwaya like to hear from you you are so kind Thanks Olias for taking the time to read I really appreciate it....ethome Daniel thanks for your comments much appreciated |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Sorry I missed you people I seem to have to keep reloading my page I don't know whether it's on my end or because Passions is quite crowded. I don't seem to have to do it anywhere else.....ethome Thanks James for taking the time to read this poem ....ethome Thanks Roniece for your comment I appreciate it so much. Thank you Kethry for your wonderful words they are very uplifting I'll be visiting you ethome |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Oh ethome...lady sings the blues...I hear her oh yeah I do hear her...close my eyes and see it all..great write Don't close your eyes to the possibilities |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Paula I'm so glad that you can hear her singing I appreciate your comments very much....ethome |
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