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The Spaceman |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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From a timewarp through the sunlight comes a spaceman flush with speed. Stopping at the earth and watching what can the bold bright spaceman see? Is he proud or is he fearful is he violent or is he calm is he wise and is he gentle is he here to right the wrong. Standing in a golden glow he holds a shining sword in his hand. Looking like warrior tall he looks across the surface of the sky and there's a tear in his eye. He can see the wars and fighting, he can see from life to death. He can see the pain and suffering he can see the cruel unrest. As he looks the whole world over he can see the lack of peace and he sees the lack of time making worlds apart grow weak. He sees silent children's faces as they rot upon their chair He sees fat cows in the pasture where's the will to send them there. Floating on the breezes he holds a silver tablet before his eyes Slowly now he pens the notes as he floats across the surface of the land and his heart is in his hand. There are young girls past their borders who live upon the edge of life. There are bold cops bribed with lucre where a man can kill his wife. He can see the wicked prosper as they feed upon the night. He can turn the whole world over he can see the same hard plight. He sees the man who makes the models and the man who cuts the trees. He sees men who fight for freedom while their generals fight for greed. He sees people burnt and lonely waiting with their veins diseased. He sees youth in troubled wander taking lives upon the street. Grabbing for his flowing robe he wipes the golden tears from his eyes. Sailing with a broken heart he prays to the light within his mind, he knows he's lost his time. Then in a flash of lightning speed he vanishes from the molten sky, never to say where he flys because no one listened there..................... |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Ethome...I'm in awe...this piece was so remarkable...I was thinking I would find humor due to the title...and all I saw was harsh reality in all it's color. You have a gift to weave...and it is an honor to be able to read your work...thank you~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Floating on the breezes he holds a silver tablet before his eyes Slowly now he pens the notes as he floats across the surface of the land and his heart is in his hand. ==================== He sees the man who makes the models and the man who cuts the trees. He sees men who fight for freedom while their generals fight for greed. He sees people burnt and lonely waiting with their veins diseased. He sees youth in troubled wander taking lives upon the street. Grabbing for his flowing robe he wipes the golden tears from his eyes. Sailing with a broken heart he prays to the light within his mind, he knows he's lost his time. Then in a flash of lightning speed he vanishes from the molten sky, never to say where he flys because no one listened there..................... ============== you are too cool for school E-babes... this is so awesome... ditto butterflies above comments... you rock...Rocket man later-cool-space-cat-gator  jm |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Kinda sounds like the Second Coming...ignored by man. Sorta like a SciFi story I read once, years and years ago, were God came down to earth and earth was empty and finally he found a sign of man...a note that said..."WE were here, Where were You!" (or something along those lines. Neat write. jwesley |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Ethome, this is awesome, an absolutely amazing write. I'm stunned, totally stunned. Magnificent. This really touched me Take care Mushy Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you so much Butterflies for the wonderful compliment I'm so gald you enjoyed the words....thanks again and take care...... ethome Thanks Janet I love your exuberance as it pours from that wonderful kind heart of yours. Thanks for the oh so kind words and I have to say I've really noticed how you've taken your poetry to another level....thanks again....ethome....your VANtastic! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
ethome--this would make a wonderful short story...it already is a wonderful poem...I guess you spaceman missed seeing the heart of the poets at PIP.  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
thanks James for your always so candid comments I'm glad you stopped for the read. Marsha those are wonderful adjectives you are using to describe this poem and I sure appreciate your kind heart...you are a real sweetheart.......ethome. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Excellent Ethome! Wow! You've captured so much of the sad and yet so true aspects of this world. What a thought-provoking read. I find as I'm writing this, I'm humming that song "little blue planet, third from the sun, I think I'll go back home, where I come from ..." Wonderful and poignant writing, much enjoyed! Best wishes, /Kit |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Martie that's the reason I come here so that spaceman will see me here with the wonderful hearts that make this their home. thanks for taking the time to read....ethome Thank you Kit I really appreciate your kindness, I think those are very sweet comments...ethome |
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