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When I Noticed you
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When I Noticed you |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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When I Noticed You I look at meadows differently than ever in the past There’s something very calming in the greenness of the grass And splatterings of wildflowers lace the field with yellow hues I never noticed anything until I noticed you Have Hemlocks always lined this road? I never saw them there Was there always lovely magic in the summer nighttime air? I feel just like a child again , learning life anew For everything looks different when I’m walking here with you The sun feels warmer on my face, the sky’s a deeper blue And words have much more meaning, and I hear them all as true Important things are trivial, the obvious askew Everything is normal since I fell in love with you How fast the past is left behind, How swift the heart can change How easily I let my life be somehow rearranged It must have been there all the time, a veil I couldn’t see through But that was lifted instantly, when I first noticed you Elizabeth Santos |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
You have said it all Liz...and so perfectly...James |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Oh Liz what a lovely feeling this brings. You have made my morning with this one. Truly beautiful. Juls |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Elizabeth - It's pretty difficult for me to choose among your wonderful work and come up with a favorite - But this one certainly would have to be one of the top few - This is absolutely wonderful..  |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
What a way to start the day! You RULE! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh, Elizabeth~ This is just exquisite ! How beautifully you walk us through such vividly portrayed scenes. Thank you so much. I really like this one - bunches. Big *Hugs* ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, I know not how other may feel, But this one really got to me. Exquisite. Love Sy |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Liz - Last night I replied to Sven that the love in his heart showed through in his poem - And today - It is equally obvious to me that your love has come through in this one. Thus moving it to the top of my 'Santos' treasures. ~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning. ~ Billy Wilder |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
"Have Hemlocks always lined this road? I never saw them there Was there always lovely magic in the summer nighttime air? I feel just like a child again , learning life anew For everything looks different when I’m walking here with you" funny how love either wakes us up or puts us into deep dreamy oblivion! this is so sweet--how fun looking at love thru your eyes  hugs, dg theres no such thing as a failure who keeps trying--coasting to the bottom is the only disgrace. -j popper |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I know that my perspective changed when I noticed you (and I'm not even in love with you, simply envious of your talent! *G*) This is another gem! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Have Hemlocks always lined this road? I never saw them there Was there always lovely magic in the summer nighttime air? I feel just like a child again , learning life anew For everything looks different when I’m walking here with you This too is my favorite verse and I once again cast into the spell of Liz and all she paints in her words. Superb penning my friend as usual. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Liz - You have such a wonderful feel for the words - you know exactly which similes to create to make your poetry sing. I have never been disappointed when I've opened one of your beautiful gifts. This poem is simply superb, just like you. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
wonderfully done, sweet Liz---through the eyes of love! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Your responses to this poem are so touching. Thank you all for your wonderful comments. Some of them will stay in my heart Thanks Liz |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
A jewel this poem is!  Coco |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This lovely poem is looking for someone to read it again...it is far too beautiful to dwell in the back pages... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Liz ... I've missed so many wonderful poems, I'm paniking ... I can't keep up!!! Thank you so much for bringing this forward Karilea. This is just breath-taking Liz ... I love to see the world through your words. You've captured such wonderful emotions in this beautiful piece, lovely! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Liz-- this is absolutely perfect! stunningly beautiful and the one of the greatest tribute to true love i've ever had the pleasure to read. you always show your heart with your writing...but i must say you've outdone even you with this one! Take care. ~amy~ |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Coco Thanks for the "jewel" Karilea, So you brought this one down from the attic and dusted it off. Thank you Kit. I should go to the back pages and pick up the gems I've missed, but I can't even get through page 1. Thanks so much for your sweet comments Amy, You are so kind with your remarks and I apprciate them very much Liz |
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Masked Intruder
Moderator
Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
Ah yes, the amazing couplet within the quatrain. I love that style! I also love Hemlocks and I wish there were some lining my road. Maybe there will be when I meet a wonderful person. Or when I bring that wonderful person to my road. That would be great, would be like Christmas in July. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Liz~ So charmingly beautiful and so filled with your hearts love...excellent write sweetie Love Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I love the way you've made these word pictures come alive as a result of discovering a new and open love. Beautiful lines Elizabeth...love is important to the healing of the soul and the becoming aware of the beauties of life and everyone needs it. As usual this is excellent poetry Elizabeth I always enjoy yours so very much....thanks for sharing...ethome...... |
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