Open Poetry #10 |
Two little Hearts |
tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
~Two Little Hearts~ Two little hearts Sitting side by side One says yes The other says hide ~~~ One little heart Fly's as free as a bird While the other little heart Is hardly heard ~~~ These two hearts Look exactly the same But they do not Play the same game ~~~ One is feisty And head strong The other is lonely As time goes on ~~~ These two little hearts Used to be one They are my heart Who's come undone ~~~ She is broken Split in two She no longer knows Quite what to do ~~~ Two little hearts Going seperate ways My one heart Totally in disarray ~~~ Pulling and tugging To go on their own My two little hearts Want to go it alone ~~~ My one heart Won't ever be the same Until my two little hearts Start playing the same game ~~~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Tracie* This is so tender and delicate. Nothing seems right until those hearts line up and beat in time with eachother do they...it will come...with a heart like yours it has to! Excellent writing~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Tracie~ Awwwwww ! How sweet this little thing is ! Ya' got lots of heart ! Now let's join hands and dance ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
very nice, tracie.. hey Butterflies where do you and Marge find these wonderful graphics...and animated gifs from..I am enjoying them ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Tracie ... what a wonderful theme you've developed in this lovely piece! So creative and unique, I just loved your thoughts in this! Best wishes, /Kit |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
i likes the tale this told yuh so true good job |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I found myself humming a tune when I read this. . . Simply beautiful Tracie. . . ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
tracie this is precious and yes...its reads like a tune... a melody of a poem ... a tad bit sad but very sweet... just like the poet later-heartstrings-gator jm |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Tracie-- this is quite wonderful! i really enjoyed this poem a lot. i am sure that in time your two hearts will merge as one again, and that sunny skies are ahead. until that time hugs to you my friend. take care! Amy |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
The perfect song for your two little hearts will come around soon. You will see. Until then try to make sure that both of them at least enjoy the sunshine together. Wonderful verse from you and a very unique way to look at things. |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Tracie,...wow what a display of words and format. This one really gets inside me. Wonderfully done you. Please take care. *Peace. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Nicely done tracie.. very cute.. enjoyed.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Excellent writing! This is so sweet and adorable! I love it! |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Tracie~ This is wonderful.......I heard the song in this too -SEA |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Sweet little butterflies I thank for you lovely comments and appreciate it greatly love you graphic Tracie~ Marge girl you always know how to make me smile thanks for taking my hand... and the great graphics Tracie~ Wynter~ Glad you liked...thanks for stopping by Tracie~ Kit~ My friend thanks for the lovely comments and I'm glad you enjoyed the read Tracie~ Walt glad you liked my tale (oh that sounds a bit rude) now I'm blushing Tracie~ Dearest Sven~ Thanks for the simply beautiful, I always appreciate your thoughts...Thanks Tracie~ Hey sweet Janny girl Nice to see you here and thanks for your kind words, appreciated always Tracie~ Aimster~ Awwww thanks for the sweet comments and the hug. ~HUG~ to you as well Tracie~ Mark~ Wonderful words from you and I appreciate it...thanks a lot Tracie~ Spitfire~ Wonderful to see you here my friend, WOW!! glad it had such an effect Tracie~ Victoria~ So glad you enjoyed the read...thanks Tracie~ Insect~ You loved it thats great, I'm glad Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Hey sweet SEA you snuck in there...sorry I missed ya Thanks hon for coming in Love Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Excellent! No doubting your heart Tracie. "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
EagleOne Thanks for your sweet comments, I appreciate it Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
What a great way to express the feeling Tracie. I think this is a wnoderful expression of creative writing...I could really feel the torn up inside mood of the poem and how the heart (the seat of emotion) is insecure because of the memories of a bad experience...loved it!!...ethome |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Ethome~ Right on target my friend, thanks for your comments...much appreciated Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
tracie- wow...i can certainly relate to the feelings you've expressed here. it can be a very painful thing when your heart has a battle within itself. you've penned these emotions perfectly. hugs to you, -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Tracie...it's hard to put yourself out there, whether your heart is one or two...but there is a lot of wisdom in your words... hugs are with you... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Tracie, this is lovely, I really do love this one, lots of wisdom, and such a new slant. This is very well written, absolutely great. take care Mushy Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Solstice Son Member
since 2000-09-19
Posts 469 |
...this was my first trip to the open poetry forums..(( I am usually stuck in the Pub *L* )) yours was the first I read....and for that I am thankful...well done m'dear Sol |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Really enjoyed reading this lovely piece of your hand. (hugs) Charisma |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Tracie, This was beautiful writing my frend. The layout is perfect for this one. I loved it!! And you know I can relate. *HUGS* LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Vicki~ ~HUGS~ right back at ya hon...thanks for your warm comments Tracie~ Sweet Sunshine~ Thanks...your words mean a lot to me ~HUGS~ sent floating your way as well Tracie~ Hello there little Mushy Marsha Thanks sweetie for such lovely comments, I appreciate it Tracie~ Hey Sol~ Well I do so hope you stick around here for a while, we'd all love to see some of your work thanks for checking me out I do so appreciate your comments Tracie~ Charisma~ I'm so pleased that you enjoyed this piece of mine...I thank you sweetie and appreciate the ~HUG~ ~HUGS~ floating back to you Tracie~ LW~ Hi there sweet Jennifer my friend Glad you stopped by and I appreciate your time here and your comments. I know you can relate hon and I hope time is healing your tender heart Floating winged ~HUGS~ your way always Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Masked Intruder
Moderator
Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
With poems that follow this sort of rhythm, it is hard for me to get sad when I read them. *grins* And try as I might, I can't seem to read it in a different rhythm. Ah well. I like the poem anyways. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
MI~ It's O'K I don't mind as long as you enjoy the read I appreciate your comments and you taking the time to read this...thanks Tracie~< !signature--> Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe [This message has been edited by tracie66 (edited 11-10-2000).] |
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