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A God Defiled
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A God Defiled |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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The stained wood of a frozen face appearances of teak-- lines burnt, a starburst of tears on either cheek... surface silken sanded smooth lips carved into grotesque smile romanesque nose aquiline remnant of a god defiled. The fire now but smoldered coals, beating tom toms, shadowed flight... I dare to place mask on my face I dance to warm the chill of night. Oh, reality is vague, as I curse laughter as a plague - remembering his mocking grin, a sacrifice of virgin skin an offering to crown him king-- magnetic warmth to fire's sting, I offered him my everything and cried as fire died. |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
hi serenity ... digging deep again, i see ... this is nice, dark, scary ... good work |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I dance to warm the chill of night. Oh, reality is vague, as I curse laughter as a plague - remembering his mocking grin, a sacrifice of virgin skin an offering to crown him king-- magnetic warmth to fire's sting, I offered him my everything and cried as fire died. ================ ooooh baby... me sweet sen ... is dancing in the flame again see her move ... see her grace see the light dance upon her face hear her song ... her mystic verse read her words... sweet poetic curse *kisskiss* baby...you KNOW I love this one.. its WAY WAY COOL ... as is the poet... e-ya back later ... gotta go out into the real world again LOL love ya me [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 10-30-2000).] |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Serenity... wow this ones a few reads for sure on first read wow excellent and powerful writing. need to think about this one. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
the power of ritual. . . very deep thoughts in this one serenity. . . I enjoyed it. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Mark, JM (m'twin), Sven and brian---thank you much for taking the time, a bit cryptic, but then, that's how Halloween is...lol...blessings of the Goddess be with ye....*winks*, luv, and hugs. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
So so so so bitter, yet so so so so beautiful. How the f___ do you do it? Mike |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
WOW!! you're really doing it to me with this one...great work!! I'm a bit lost but I sense some distaste but the strength to overcome the same...some sort of Indian ritual maybe or just your own private thing...love it all the same... wonderful images and clever writing.....ethome |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Mike, ethome--I thank you much. I guess this one is VERY cryptic...was written as my 'nod' to Halloween, in comparison to my celebration of Samhein--the final harvest. It is about making the sacred profane. Thank you all. |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Very deep Serene, This will take several readings to get all that is in it to shine through. Like this very much. Rich |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Well written... very nicely done... |
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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
I think my brother would hang this one on his wall. He is a big religious buff. I am not so big on the organized side of religion, nor many of the versions of the Bible. But when it comes down to the straight forward spiritual side of it all, I am all over it. The most impressive crucifix I've ever seen is at the Catholic worship center in Philmont Scout Ranch near Cimarron, New Mexico. It is hand carved wood, with a mild stain that makes the skin seem life like. After spending seven days in God's own country...living it, breathing it and drinking it up...and then coming back on Sunday morning to base camp and attending mass in front of that crucifix was a great moment in my life. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
rich, I thank you lovie, as always Mike, your replies mean a great deal to me..and I know, I should have worked on the meter, huh? MI--you blew me away, wasn't expecting you to go find it..lol, but thank you, you flatter me, and also makes me curious... you've studied, yes? Do "e" me and tell me more--I'm particularly interested in the cross sections of gods/mythology and christianity. |
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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
Oh yeah.....did I mention that you've got "e"? *grins* |
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