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Conversation Between Heart and Mind
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Conversation Between Heart and Mind |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
You're a fool to even think it. Then a fool I must be. He's already hurt you once. He's the only man for me. You know you cant trust him. Not now, but I can start. You know I put him out of our mind. Yes but he never left our heart. So you're telling me you'll give him a chance? A chance to love me? Oh yes indeed. I wont be there to pick up your pieces. If that happens you'll be the last thing I need. You're a fool to even consider. Even fools have to dream. Well I guess we're in this together. We make an awesome team. Yeah a fool and a dreamer...what a pair. You give me the chance to fly. Like I have a choice when you spread your wings. Well you always let me try. Go on, go ahead and love him. You know I do all the time. But I'm with you now and I'll stay near. I'll be careful for your peace of mind. |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
ohhhh how the heart can battle the mind and the mind can battle the heart, you did this so well......which do you follow.....I enjoyed this....*s* Greeneyes |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Paula---I did love this internal dialogue. Was like a script from my migraines...lol. Nice format, and great construct. Loved it. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
ya know....i thought I was the only one who heard the voices  yep...this is exactly how it goes down ying and yang very cool girlie too bad we dont listen ... but then moths never do just ask me.... later-talking-to-yourself-gator jm |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Love your poem "darlin" For you LOL's __________________________________________ My heart says yesiree My mind says maybe I'm torn apart between heart and mind Suddenly a louder voice of another kind It's my lower torso saying, "mind is blind" "Look at her that gorgeous thing of the prettiest kind" "She keeps me alert" "So I make mouth flirt" "And force eyes to watch" Upon this site feet play hopscotch A dance I make them do so mind wont let them run And if you don't mind this could be fun Well mind is afraid and says "only if" So lower torso threatens and says, "I'm going stiff" Not in public, mind screams out "please" Well heart stepped in and says, "I won't let you tease" Heart really wants her that's very clear And mind's holding back because of the fear Then mouth starts to talk and asks for a date Because lower torso is convincing so mouth took the bait ________________________________________________ |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Paula, a dialogue of heartNmind can be truly a torture and you've penned it so well!  Coco |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Be careful Paula-- this has all the beginnings of MPS--lol great poem Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Greeneyes...unfortunately I usually follow my simple heart...lol...gets me in bunches of trouble. Serenity...OMG...yes thats it a migraine conversation LOL...thanks JM...hehehe sweetie...theres these guys in white coats following me around...I dunno what they want...but they keep inching closer and closer.... Insect...we gotta quit meeting like this... Bring your body ever closer Let my heart convince your mind And if that doesnt work Maybe my lips can try and find That spot that makes your mind open Letting your heart just slip on through And we can be together Becoming one where there once was two I love your poetic replies.Why dont you email me? Coco...oh yeah pure torture when one is determined not to compromise...thanks |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Paula* Seems we have the same conversations...do you talk out loud to yours too???? Great idea and great writing...I know there are MANY who can relate to this one!! |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Yes......I have heard this conversation somewhere before in my own head, I think!!! Great writing here, my twin.....and I'd say listen more to your heart!!!  Follow your dream! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Paula my mind and heart have these same conversations. I believe a friendship that is based on mutual respect, trust and admiration can build a solid foundation for the beauty of Love to flourish and grow. James |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Paula-Battle between heart and head, I know it well, very nicely done. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
loved it..i know what you mean..right now my mind is winning ..at last.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Big Sighhhhhhhhhhhh~~~~~ I must save this...I am always talking to myself...people say it's ok as long as I don't answer..but I do ..because I need to complete the conversation... loved it Paula...it's one for the library ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Big Sighhhhhhhhhhhh~~~~~ I must save this...I am always talking to myself...people say it's ok as long as I don't answer..but I do ..because I need to complete the conversation... loved it Paula...it's one for the library ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Whoops a double hit...sorry huggzzz |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
This piece is very good Paula...very innovative,creative, and thought-provoking...I love to see that from a poet! I really enjoyed and I would like to read more poems like these! Nathan |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Jamie...ya gotta tell me...what is MPS? LOL...nothing catching I hope...thanks Holly...LMAO...talk out loud? Oh heck yeah...I'm never truly alone cause I always got me HHAHA Sunny...well this heart tends to over rule this head 9 times out of 10...lol thanks James...I feel the same as you dear one...but you dont always get all that... Gemini...oh my and what a battle it is...thanks Victoria...glad to hear it girl...wish mine would Wynter...why thank you...glad you liked it well enough to put it in your library...ppssstttttt...dont worry about answering yourself...just pretend its your imaginary friend LOL Nathan...you are always so very good fro my ego friend...glad you liked it thanks Don't close your eyes to the possibilities |
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Highlander Member
since 2000-11-06
Posts 50Dundee, Scotland |
"Even fools have to dream." As I have begun to. Thank you for reminding me I still can! |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
Your internal dialogue makes me think I may have some serious problems!  Mine never seem to get along that well! A great poem, Paula. You really did capture the sensation well. Inner turmoil sucks, but it does have its funny side too! Trev. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Highlander...its good to know you are dreaming...dont let anything take that away Trev...hehehehe...get along? Somedays I just want to run away and let them just battle it OUT...I just do my best to avoid those guys in the white coats LOL |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Paula, I have the thought that we have indulged in some similar disasters in the recent past. It is so ridiculously true, that you can tell yourself the right thing all dam day and then suddenly your heart takes over, and you have lost the control (just temorarily) You write about it very effectively. Sandra |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Paula, I am sure glad I am not the only one who hears voices here..............This was so well done.......and I to seem to also follow my heart.......trouble, trouble sometimes isn't it? lol...........Oh well, we learn as we go I suppose. A great write. Jenn E |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Sandra...yes I think you and I have walked the same road...and yes hy heart tends to outmanuever my mind...not a good thing huh? Jenn...LOL if I didnt have the voices I wouldnt know what to do |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Great idea Paula! Made me feel just the way you wanted it to...in a quandry between heart and mind...this sure happens a lot with people when there is a big decision to be made, especially an emotional one...I really enjoyed reading this one ...good work!! |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
You wrote so well what's going on in my life right now; I must be projecting too  laughs I talk to myself ALL the time; that way I usually win the argument So far no one's caught on, I think... I hope I truly enjoyed reading this; it's a keeper Pepper "A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth." Percy Bysshe Shelley |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
ethome...thank you...I really wish I could win one every now and then tho HAHAHA Pepper...I have at times been accused of mind reading LOL...and you actually WIN? Now how do you do that? |
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Masked Intruder
Moderator
Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
You've only got two voices? Geez, I guess I'm just weird. I got bout four or five on a good day. Luvdit! |
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