Open Poetry #10 |
Inside Out... #3 |
Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
(A Villanelle) We'll be doing this format in this month's workshop, folks.. INSIDE OUT With passion born of words alone, A kindled bond’s aforesaid rare. When love from inside out has grown, Erotic nuance ne’er outshone. Clandestine musings freely share, With passion born of words alone. Allure endued as pheromone, In spirit lustful hearts declare When love from inside out has grown. With bated breath a bond has sown Intrinsic trust beyond compare With passion born of words alone. True intimacy's surely known. No greater love ~ No small affair When love from inside out has grown. An ecstasy as yet unknown Enjoins a once unseemly pair With passion born of words alone, When love from inside out has grown. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Teacher Nan~ Okay, I'll show up cause this is so pretty. But, I think Serenity should have to dust the erasers ! And ...... this is just beautiful ! No wonder they made YOU the teacher ! Psst ! ... make Prometheus come to class too ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I'm sorry I missed the class- yet this is so beautiful - I must reply and promise a villenelle attempt (fools rush in and all that) even though I know it will not compare. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
It's great Nan, but like English back in high school (hee hee), it's not something I want to work so hard to do, so rather than just sit in the back of the class and throw spit-balls (like English in high school), I'd better sit out in the hall and just peep in once in awhile. jwesley [This message has been edited by jwesley (edited 11-05-2000).] |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
Wonderful Nan, I love how you use language. And such imagery! "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." |
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jonmcm Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 222England |
A beautiful poem to read. Jon |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Nan, this is so well done...(must be why your the teacher huh?) but seriously...your cadence is perfect..it dances when read aloud... and the unique vocabulary choices you used add to its charm and grace.. the its kissed with the sensual, passionate essence... wonderful lesson in poetry from you one of your many gifts here. later-somebody-get-the-teacher-an-apple-gator jm [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 11-05-2000).] |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is beautiful, Nan! I remember this one very well! Lovely! Denise |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Nancy - a most beautiful and touching piece you have done. You are a master, with a heart as big as the ocean. By the way, you must learn 'dood' language a little! BC |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Nan, this is exceptional! The beauty in this piece just drifts from line to line in such a lovely rhythmic flow. Beautiful wording ... thank you for this wonderful read! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Perfect.... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
With passion born of words alone, When love from inside out has grown. Beautiful words and a Villanelle well done! ~Wynter |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Test Reply. |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Test Reply. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
A very fine example Nan! Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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cathybohannan Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 140Paintsville,KY |
Great poem Nan, you really know how to put the words together right, so that your message is clear. Cathy Cathy Marie Bohannan |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Thanks all... Marge - I appreciate your appreciation... and I sent serenity out with the erasers days ago... Anybody seen her?.. Wil - Glad to have you among us - I always enjoy your expansive work... James - Watch out - I've been known to lock the classroom doors when I've got hecklers... Saxoness - Thankee... Now write some more.. Jon - Glad you stopped by.. Thanks.. Janet - Thanks muchly... When are you gonna join us in the workshop, anyway?... Denise - Thankya my friend... Bill - YO!! Are YOU tokkin' 2 ME???... Mucho Thanks, Dooooood.. Kit - Glad you enjoyed... Thanks.. Deer - From you, that's high praise... Mr "That's not quite a Villanelle..."...smoooooches.. Wynter - Thank you, Thank you... Jenn - Glad you stopped by... Jamie - I appreciate your liking it - I'm looking forward to seeing more of yours.. Cathy - Thanks... I just break out my dictionaurus frequently.. |
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