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Incoherent - From OP#2 - 'Cause it feels like it... |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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death, rain falls d -r --i -p ---p --i ----n -g on my heart Fragile, pale, hopeless. Still, lifeless, empty. bitter songs... empty air... timeless ache... No hope. With the darkness, comes confirmation. With the light, comes pain. with the onslaught, of awareness, comes... not you... I am alone. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
this one gave me an interactive affectiveness that i l o v e d yuh very good meaning here me thinks i do [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 11-05-2000).] |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
OOOOoooo Ouch....*sniff*  |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Wow! From begining to end I loved this. Such feeling you have expressed here! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Wonderful Christopher... I love the format  I wrote this "On Being Alone"...how I will feel on Thanksgiving Day. It's Raining Today On a day to be thankful, a day to show caring, to be blessed with a family and good friends and sharing. But one day alone, can't change what the others bring out, the sadness of living with feelings of doubt. Each morning awakened, I tell myself true this is my start, a fresh day, a "new". But by nightfall it darkens, my thoughts turn to black. Must again dream my dreams holding tightly, what I lack... ~Wynter Bliss "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
warm rain kisses are needed here! "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
With the darkness, comes confirmation. With the light, comes pain. How true, how true The aching of being alone Well done, but I hope it's not true Liz |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I would never intentionally cause pain...  but would rather provide comforting warmth... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Perfectly formatted to draw out the pain as it is done in real life. This is like a living poem...well done my friend.  |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
Nicely done...very visual. I like it, I like it a lot...now do one with just pictures, no words. Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
loved it Christopher..we should here from you more often.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
The format adds to the imagery of the poem, but takes attention away from the words, which are very good themselves. A very thoughtful piece C Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~C,...can't tell you how many times I've read this. Your words, are present, they're here, in the air of my mind. Dripping. Emotionally gripping write. *Peace you, always. |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
walt - interesting - never considered the interactive quality before - cool! thankks! Holly - Hey, smile now! Eagle One - Thanks - sometimes the darkness tides over, eh? Wynter - Yeh - sometimes the holidays are the worst, huh? Great poem! Kathleen - Yeah - well no warm rain in sight! Thanks lady.Liz - True for the moment... usually takes me a while to pull out of it - 'til then your comments keep me warm. Kari - You do lady, you do! Sharon - Thanks you - a *wink* and a *hug* Ron - Now that is an interesting challenge - will have to think about that! LOL Victoria - Thanks - and who knows - it varies from day to day!Jamie - Thanks - I don't know - colors can add so much... to me they are a poem in themselves sometimes - always intentional. Thank you. A - *Peace* in return - & - hugzzz Chris |
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