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Ethan Halo
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since 2000-04-28
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on the roof again

0 posted 2000-11-05 03:19 AM


*waiting at the gate*

i lurk inside my doorway
and the rain reaches out for me.
the man with the cab is late and
my left foot gives voice to worry.
i've turned off all the lights;
my wallet sits on the TV tray;
and my dog barks at the cabbie who is
waiting at the gate

my wallet cries out in overcharge
as the cabbie speeds away.
a toe tag for a checked-in bag.
the hum of moving walkway.
a cup of joe and a boarding pass;
a flight held up by rain.
i'm stuck, so i sit patiently
waiting at the gate

one long distance payphone call,
and again my wallet screams.
i sigh once more, my new bad habit,
as i hang up on his machine.
i have no way to reach my friends,
to tell them my flight's delayed.
i hope they keep the faith and stay
waiting at the gate

one hour and two coffees later,
my wallet grumbles at the price.
same old news in the USA Today.
the plane, at last, arrives.
bags overhead; window seat;
the fuel truck speeds away.
we taxi and leave anticipation
waiting at the gate

the city's lights have left us.
into the clouds we soar.
roasted almonds and gingerale.
the rain continues to pour.
there never was any announcement.
the cabin slept as it began to shake.
lost altitude and that roller coaster feeling
that makes the stomach quake.
only i awake to see the flight
attendants crumble to their knees.
those earlier delays are
keeping everyone else asleep.
silent tears break mascara walls;
can the black box record the fear they pray?
i look out the window but i don't see a soul
waiting at the gate< !signature-->

Everyone's got their demons.
We all got somethin' to atone for.



[This message has been edited by Ethan_Halo (edited 11-05-2000).]

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wayoutwalt
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since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)
1 posted 2000-11-05 03:24 AM


pretty creppy and cool good journey you brought me through with this one me likes yuh
Ethan Halo
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since 2000-04-28
Posts 793
on the roof again
2 posted 2000-11-05 11:06 AM


*bump*
SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

3 posted 2000-11-05 02:20 PM


~Very affective writing,...you got to me. What a ride! Thank you E. *Peace.
Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
4 posted 2000-11-05 02:23 PM


Ethan,

Very haunting words my friend.  A unique look at how easily things can go wrong in life.  Great writing.  

Lone Wolf


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

Rainydays
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since 2000-10-21
Posts 324

5 posted 2000-11-05 02:30 PM


Wow.
Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

6 posted 2000-11-05 05:17 PM


silent tears break mascara walls;
can the black box record the fear they pray?
i look out the window but i don't see a soul
waiting at the gate
====================
what a cool poem...
you nailed it with that ending E-babes
mascara walls??? now how cool is that...WAY COOL
dont know where ya went.. but I glad your back...
later-next-time-take-the-bus-gator  
jm

Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546
missouri
7 posted 2000-11-06 02:27 AM


Ethan...you must have had on heck of a flight my friend...thank heaven you are on the ground safe....hugs to you...and what a chilling poem...now I remember why I dont fly anymore.
Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
8 posted 2000-11-06 06:51 AM


Ethan* Wow....this took my breath away...the
fear and grip in this was like a cold hand
holding me to read on...very cool work!!...I
think I'll take the bus the next time I
travel  

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