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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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deliberate contemplations you have escaped my touch and left me wanting and yet your image is there within, haunting like a tease you were, slightly taunting you first ran in, then you ran away laid loving words down, but didn't stay and all the while, you relished in your way sore am I, this weary mind bereft of soul like the breaker's water once it reaches shoal I'll not reach a finish, for you've moved the goal and yet I cannot stop because I discern if I devote my eyes to sleep you will slither in but not on soft feet and into your quagmire, I'll submerse deep you are a most unrelenting stranger, your kiss is wine and you leave me to stagger, most of the time my pursuit of you is the reach of the blind and yet I cannot stop without you, I become desolate, distraught when you are here, it's my breath that is caught and when briefly we meet, the words are then sought and found so I will not stop although you will escape only to come again my muse. Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari, another triumph love, this is beautiful, really it is. I love this one, another inspired beauty. I'm wildly clapping and if you were close enough I'd be leading the cheers of encore, bravo well done. But since I'm not, just imagine it, and make loads of noise because I'm never quiet. Take care Mushy Marsha or is that Mistress Majestic Marsha no definitely Mushy, that's me today  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I'll not reach a finish, for you've moved the goal and yet I cannot stop because I discern if I devote my eyes to sleep you will slither in but not on soft feet and into your quagmire, I'll submerse deep you are a most unrelenting stranger, your kiss is wine and you leave me to stagger, most of the time my pursuit of you is the reach of the blind and yet I cannot stop without you, I become desolate, distraught when you are here, it's my breath that is caught and when briefly we meet, the words are then sought and found so I will not stop although you will escape only to come again my muse. ================ OH SUN...this is SO COOL... what an awesome premise...yes..this is exactly how it it.. the dance we do with our muse ... ever fleeting...ever challenging... your unique rhyme pattern made the cadence dance ... and the whole essence of the poem is captivating ... excellent writing K, very cool indeed jm |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
A muse is torture sometimes and yet where would we be without it? I love it! "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Marsha, there have been those that cheer me on...but you are taking up the front as the leader of the squad, thank you so VERY much... Janet Marie, when I see your name, I know there will be true comment behind...you do not just read, you inspire...thank you my dear... Kathleen, it is always so, and I see that you agree... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
how could any muse stay away from this song of light? beautiful Sunshine. . . -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautifully done, Karilea! Those muses can be little buggers, can't they? Denise |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sven, you just never know...so fickle is the muse... denise, so glad to see you here, thanks for coming in! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
fickle is the muse it's true but when you write I 'd never know your poetic charm always true blue Fabulous Karilea- simply fabulous - had me right up to and especially with the last word |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Mr. Yeats, you just never know about me...so glad you enjoyed.... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Fellow K - I quite enjoyed this little journey... most sensual...most eloquent  KThe wind shifts like this: Like a human without illusions... This is how the wind shifts: Like a human, heavy and heavy, Who does not care. W.S |
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compassion Member
since 2000-11-01
Posts 135USA |
Sunshine, This one was printed and placed in my private collection my first read. One of your best, imo, and you do have many best. How privileged I feel to know your there ....only one sunshine!! (feathers) |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Fellow K...thank you for your thoughts. Compassion, welcome to Passions! Such an honor it is to be placed in one's library! Know that I will continue to look for your name on posts, in posts, and of your own... and I do know for a fact, you will find many here that help spread the sunshine...{~,^} Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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