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And Now It's Amber, Burnt But There
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And Now It's Amber, Burnt But There |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396
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And Now It's Amber, Burnt But There It's just your way, to roll around these hills, full of life feeling weightless and falling, freely, releasing, with me here, in statue, concrete, or marble, misled and misunderstood, ten times the weight of life. You travel, alone, riding waves I've never seen, and here I am drowning in sand as coarse as the edge of the road, in which I live life on, hard and drying, sinking, trying, it's all the same, you're alive in ways I never understood, and here I am lost in fields, in days all tied in twos, tangled, and tripping, while you smile my time away. And something new and so appealing emerges, slipping the feeling and all the hours we burned together are ashing, they're blowing, and it's strange in ways how sometimes things just wilt, without a directness that deserves another's pain, it just happens, and there you are, still rolling, smiling, and I'm still here, in circles, spinning, lost in the beginning of all this, right next to you, yet alone in more ways than I've ever known, and each day the sun shines for you and you taste it alive, you swallow my half,...and now it's amber, burnt but there. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You, lady, just gave me goosebumps...begs to be read aloud. This is fab. I loved the rhythm of this-- "hard and drying, sinking, trying it's all the same, you're alive in ways I never understood..." AND...ya didn't stop there...grin...and I'm so glad... "it's strange in ways how things sometimes just wilt, without a directness that deserves another's pain, it just happens and there you are, still rolling, smiling, and I'm still here, in circles, spinning, lost in the beginning..." Blows me away. Reminds me of a Neil Young quote, something he said after leaving a certain band abruptly... "Ya ever notice that things that start spontaneously, end the same way?" and that's all he wrote in that note. Thank you lady, as you can tell, I enjoyed this one tremendously. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Fire, mind blowing, I feel like I've been on an acid trip after reading this piece. Loved the juxtaposed images and the flow was magnificent. *HuGS* Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I understand, and you have described it so well. Awesome writing, SF. Sandra |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
WOW And something new and so appealing emerges, slipping the feeling and all the hours we burned together are ashing, they're blowing, and it's strange in ways how sometimes things just wilt, Superb and speaking to my heart. Thankyou for the read...  KThe wind shifts like this: Like a human without illusions... This is how the wind shifts: Like a human, heavy and heavy, Who does not care. W.S |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
and I'm still here, in circles, spinning, lost in the beginning of all this, right next to you, yet alone in more ways than I've ever known, and each day the sun shines for you and you taste it alive, you swallow my half,...and now it's amber, burnt but there. Amazing. Ron Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
A - This... breathes, eeks... bleeds pain - I understand - that's it - and give you hugz in return for this trip inside your mind. C |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
wow i loved the title and it just rolls like a great ball from there good job yuh |
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