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brian madden
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ireland

0 posted 2000-11-04 12:25 PM


Here I sit and often stand
following that day
I was spewed from the mother carriage.
Well I popped out screaming
"take me back I demand!"
but they just cut the anchor
and let me float out along the tracks
resting there in a jam,
to wait out the delay
between stops;
that elongated jump from  womb to tomb.
Now I wonder should I take
time to dance out in the mortal coil,
to consume and  feed the evanescent flames
and in the charred lingering dusk
plant my fake creation for end conquest?

Sure my friend, it isn't all storms
some rainbows have fallen upon my path.
I got the Heavens for repose,
hunger starves in earthen murmurs
as I gaze on the jewel of woman.
I lament for moths,
as I do for the people falling
idly into the path of destructive trains
and evaporating in the pits,
that is why I stay behind the yellow line,
never daring to venture off the platform.
From this vantage events unfold
as a tapestry of sun,
everything is all up in the air
where my feet would chose to walk.

No destination or key frame
in hand, inspecting with dried eyes
and shut mouth: this cavity makes
a fine nest, it swallows me whole,
dragging me deeper,
it does seem that even in static
there is motion. For though
I dare not advance
I can not hold fort in one place.
Something drags me deeper within,
down my rabbit hole
Recessing,
Recessing more…
I think I have missed my connection….

So I find a bench and huddle
with the other grey commuters.
Swallow my numb pill
and while away cultivating courage
to get upon the next train
and reach my final destination.  




"an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree
the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women".
Patti Smith


[This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 11-04-2000).]

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Ron K. Fox
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1 posted 2000-11-04 12:29 PM


wow...the "A" train of life...hey I rode it many a day...just make sure you don't miss your stop...very good. Ron

Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox


Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now
2 posted 2000-11-04 12:34 PM


Brian - this is the first writing of yours I have read. A magnificent one to be sure, and I liked it very much.

Bill

Martie
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3 posted 2000-11-04 12:35 PM


Oh my..brian...when you're whiling away you do so with such great gasping wounded filled up words...(and you blow me away!)

[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 11-04-2000).]

Janet Marie
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Posts 18554

4 posted 2000-11-04 12:56 PM


Now I wonder should I take
time to dance out in the mortal coil,
to consume and  feed the evanescent flames
and in the charred lingering dusk
plant my fake creation for end conquest?
Sure my friend, it isn't all storms
some rainbows have fallen upon my path.
I got the Heavens for repose,
hunger starves in earthen murmurs
as I gaze on the jewel of woman.
**I lament for moths,
as I do for the people falling**
=================
Now its my turn to be speechless...
damn Bri ...and WHEW ...
does it hurt to go this deep???
please ditto Marties reply here as well.
this is awesome ...
your mind is awesome
later-poetic-prophet-gator
eve-moth-a-gator  

Marge Tindal
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5 posted 2000-11-04 12:59 PM


Brian~

Powerful !

'I was spewed from the mother carriage.
Well I popped out screaming
"take me back I demand!"
but they just cut the anchor
and let me float out along the tracks
resting there in a jam,
to wait out the delay
between stops;
that elongated jump from  womb to tomb.'


I was reminded of how did he live his dash ?
Womb - Tomb
how do we live the DASH inbetween ?

Now I'm in the think tank !
Thanks for sharing this.
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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brian madden
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ireland
6 posted 2000-11-12 02:21 PM


Ron, I take train journeys home from college every weekend so sometimes my life can seem like a constant train journey. I am sure I have missed some of my stops but I am getting the hang of commuting now, thanks for your wonderful reply.

Bill, well pleased to meet you.   thanks for your wonderful reply and very generous words.

Martie, blown away?? guess I don't know my own strength sometimes,  now you have me blushing. thank you for your very kind reply.

Jan-eve-agator, "does it hurt to go this deep???" only when there is a train at the other side of the tunnel... sorry bad joke, I know. THanks for your awesome reply, my ego has just become a rather large soft cushion. Time for humble pie.

Marge, thank you



"an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree
the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women".
Patti Smith

SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

7 posted 2000-11-12 02:24 PM


~Bri,...I have truly missed the intensity of your words. *sigh*. Filling me up again mister. Thank you,...going to digest this one. *Peace you.
catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
8 posted 2000-11-12 02:40 PM


Complex, and very impressive. I'm glad to read you again too Brian.
Sandra

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