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Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley

0 posted 2000-11-04 11:15 AM


In darkness, I brood about the task at hand
for my death will free this noble land
the final walk from this lonely tower
will signal more than my final hour

The bravest that I will ever be
is when I face my eternity
blood on my hands, guilt on my soul
my death will then make me whole

The battle lost, I pay for our sins
but who’s to say which of us wins
my death will make a martyr of me
the price I pay to let men live free

Fear flutters in my heart at the last
with hooded face, my die is cast
trembling, crying, awaiting the shroud
I hang before the cheering crowd.



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Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
1 posted 2000-11-04 11:36 AM


Alternate lives, or have you been doing something we should know about? Spooky one here lady!

C

Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now
2 posted 2000-11-04 11:39 AM


Poet deVine - as always, an excellent writing from your pen. I enjoy them very much.

Bill

Victoria
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3 posted 2000-11-04 11:47 AM


nicely written indeed..hope im never in that situation ha..

               ~Victoria~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


A Whisper's Caress
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4 posted 2000-11-04 11:51 AM


The bravest that I will ever be
is when I face my eternity
blood on my hands, guilt on my soul
my death will then make me whole

This is more true than what we would like to think.

Excellent!

Marge Tindal
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5 posted 2000-11-04 11:53 AM


PoetdeVine~

'I hang before the cheering crowd.'

LOL ! Did you go to Salem with Nan ?  

Chilling ponder written here.
~*Marge*~


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Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
6 posted 2000-11-04 11:55 AM


Thank you all for your kind words. This was written from a challenge phrase given to me over a year ago (it's a repost but got few replies the first time around). The title is the phrase I was to use. Thanks again!    
catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
7 posted 2000-11-04 08:39 PM


Scary stuff indeed. Also, very interesting and effective.
Sandra

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8 posted 2000-11-04 08:54 PM


whew.  This is awesome.  Hits deep, and makes me think...but you do DO that...smile...

I love this one sharon.

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9 posted 2000-11-04 09:00 PM


Is this about trying to get the newsletter done on time?  
Severn
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10 posted 2000-11-04 09:07 PM


Hmmm...I envy this ability to create tales...what is that style called? Sheesh - I should know too!

~gulp~

I like it...eerie indeed...

K

The wind shifts like this:
Like a human without illusions...
This is how the wind shifts:
Like a human, heavy and heavy,
Who does not care.

W.S

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11 posted 2000-11-04 09:08 PM


This is excellent. . . the last thoughts of the great warrior. . .

Superb my friend. . .  

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Ron K. Fox
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12 posted 2000-11-04 09:10 PM


Whoa...you showed a little darker side there...but it was good. Though I got a few chills...from that cheering crowd.

Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox


Denise
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13 posted 2000-11-04 09:28 PM


Chilling, Sharon, and very well written!

Denise

Corinne
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state of confusion
14 posted 2000-11-04 10:08 PM


Very Shakesperian in feel, or maybe something even farther back comes to mind.

Well done as always, PDV!

Corinne

Jamie
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Blue Heaven
15 posted 2000-11-04 10:14 PM


Nice change of pace Sharon... may have to call you POEt devine


Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".


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