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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone 
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I request early release, deserving of parole. Not happy in this prison, I have a future goal. Someone bring a file to me to saw through pain of steel, a shovel to go under, come one, lets make a deal. Let me out of vacant dreams and lonely, aching nights. Freedom's a necessity, to pass from dark to light. I don't belong here, really, I'm not a criminal. I loved a bit unwisely, I think I've paid the bill. Hurry up, the jailer comes to force me in my cell. Surely someone cares enough to free me from this hell. [This message has been edited by catalinamoon (edited 11-02-2000).] |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
catalinamoon - sadness I see, pain I feel. You have described both in your writing, perhaps more. I wish for you to smile, and to have all the sorrow that you may feel disappear. Bill |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
Sometimes we are our own jailer. Open up the door and walk out into the light. You have to be the one to take the first step. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
psssst...this way Sandra...come out in the sun and dance!!! You've opened many doors with your poetry as of late and it's going to be the key that you need...I can feel it in your writing. Great work~ |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
nicely written Sandra...I think inot2b has something there..but sometimes its not as easy as it sounds...  ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
How much pain will you suffer before you open your eyes and see Nobody else can help you escape, you alone hold the key Reach into your aching heart find your light within share your gift with the world leave behind your prison Take me as I am or watch me as I go |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Sandra, you have to be the one that opens that door. . . and that can be the hardest thing to do. . . Well written my friend. . . --------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Thanks for all the hand holding and advice, I know it is my jail, and I can break out myself, but Damn, it would be ever so much better with a wonderful man to walk with me, away from that prison, to make it seem worth the trouble.. No worries, I will be back to writing delirious love poems sometine soon, Love to all of you, Sandra |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
sometimes we are the one who hold the key to our own imprisonment...but, sandra, I've baked a cake.(theres someting inside)and I'll meet you by the fence.with the get away car. Mad Maxie and Brone crusher Bob says hello. Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
We all hold the keys ourselves to free us from such prisons - we only need look deep enough inside ourselves to find them. Great poem in any event - very well constructed - Hope you find those keys ~S~ |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
You've written this so well; surely it has helped you find the key!! Pepper "I honor the place in you, that when you are in that place, and I am in that place in me, we are in the same place" Ram Dass |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Sandra...I'm certainly not a man...but girl I've been there too, and here is my hand...a friend you have to help you out of the darkness of that hurt. Cry on my shoulder...scream...just be quiet...I'm here no matter what you need ok? I know this pain you are feeling...I KNOW. Hugs sweetie |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Here is a feel better cake... be careful there is a file in there somewhere and a lock pick.. but seriously, huge hug and I hope you find that open door soon. wonderfully written piece. Take care. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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