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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Cave Filled Across the curve of southern coast eroded time has left a mark in caves that centuries have birthed from rise and fall of breathing earth Yet there I touch the little child who only yesterday was caught barefoot in clear water troth that families with children sought She scrambled up the cliff just now surrounded by the scent of sea and watched the sea lion’s lazy lay drenched by salt and sea and day That child not me, for blond not dark she had the same joy I recall that lit her face in timeless glee she could be your child in another sea and in that cave of which I spoke some words engraved on rocks I saw as timeless as the wind blown tree and ageless as serenity For I saw carved boldly in the stone etched with my breathless watch of youth my father’s name right next to mine now fifty years since that dear time So I filled my heart with memory that time can’t take nor days erase and I swear I heard the echo still my father’s love the cave did fill. < !signature--> In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 11-02-2000).] |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I can picture your dad - and you -as I call up visions of me and my own dad - at the World's Fair - and me and my own daughter - exploring Mesa Verde - lovely memories - a still lovelier poem |
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BSC
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Martie ~ Beautiful piece of a precious memory, what a sweet echo it must have been. Bonnie |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
A pleasure to experience your poetry, as always Martie... wonderfully written...(although I suspect you would be incapable of doing otherwise...*smile*) |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh, Martie~ What a treasure you discovered. As with everything you see ... you let me see it too. Thank you for your special sharing. Love you~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Oh Martie, what a treat to read this rhyme!  Coco |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bill--Memories are dear...treasures that sometime walk back into your life when you least expect it...thank you. Bonnie--Yes, very sweet. Hi Mike...good to see you...thanks for the compliment. Marge--I love sharing with you..you are so appreciative! Coco--Sometimes a rhyme...yes...a rhyme this time...thanks. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hi Martie! thank you for kind words at my post. It's good to read some of your poetry again you've got such a great heart for these poignant wistful reflections..and you have a great talent for writing them....good to be back....ethome |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and in that cave of which I spoke some words engraved on rocks I saw as timeless as the wind blown tree and ageless as serenity For I saw carved boldly in the stone etched with my breathless watch of youth my father’s name right next to mine now fifty years since that dear time So I filled my heart with memory that time can’t take nor days erase and I swear I heard the echo still my father’s love the cave did fill. =================== ooooh I do so love when me girlie-girl rhymes  ya know...when ya told me you took a lil trip I later thought to myself...I cant wait to see the imagery and poems that will come from it... and here is it.. and you do it again... with grace... those last 3 stanzas are so amazingly deep. and the whole poem is made sweeter when ya kiss it with your cadence. awesome...yes your poetry is. love to ya and the sea lions jm |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
Martie What is it about the sea which makes us remember? What is it about it that seems to erase time - perhaps its motion, the seemingly ceaseless unstoppable rolling and swelling; perhaps the sounds so soft sometimes, so shrill at others; or the smells so compelling, so memorable. or perhaps its size; maybe its expanse is simply the closest that we come on this planet to visual eternity. you captured what it does to us in your poem Martie, and at the same time reminded me of one of my favourite poets in passions. she also wrote about a beach, the sea, a girl and a father: /pip/Forum12/HTML/001576.html thanks Martie philip |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Martie this is wonderous, the imagery is perfect, the line divine and the flow as smooth as the sea. I love this one, pure pleasure to read this. Bravo, many encores and wild applause. Take care Mushy Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi Ethome--thanks for your lovely comment..and I meant it about being glad to see you! Hi Janet--when I see your name I always know I'm in for a reply treat...thanks for being you. HI Philip--I'm glad you saw the the same thing I do in the sea...and thanks for sharing that poem with me from Jenni..was wonderful! Marsha--Thanks for the applause...I'm so glad you liked my poem. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, Wonderful writing, Inside the cave a moments chime But the sea is forevers time. *L* Sy |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This is wonderful... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy--The sea IS forevers time...what a lovely thought of truth...thanks. |
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