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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
It was a cold November morning The sun had just begun to rise My hand reached out to touch her But she was gone to my surprise A note upon the table Penned and teardrop stained Left me so weak and shaken As I read the words of pain And she wrote While the tears swelled in my eyes “As you know, I’ve been hurt so many times. I’ve been burned, By the flames of passion’s fire. And it feels, Like this flame is getting higher. And my love, For you is getting out of line. So I’ll leave, Don’t worry I’ll be fine. ‘cause my heart, Can’t take being broken one more time.” It’s been ten days since she left me, I’ve probably walked a thousand miles. And I’ll walk a thousand more, Just so I can see her tender smile. On a thousand poles and fences, In a thousand smoke filled bars, I posted up this sign, Written only for her heart. In words I wrote, The best I could describe, It said, “Desert Rose, Please lay down your spines. I can see, The hurt that’s in your eyes. And I know, You’ve been told so many lies. But I’m a man, Who’s laying down his pride. So Darling, please, Don’t let this love just die. Your love is WANTED, Here by my side. ” I was sitting in a bar room Thinking there’s nothing more that I can do Some good ole boys were singing Something about feeling kind of blue Then the noisy bar room, Suddenly settled to a quiet hush. The band just stopped playing, As I felt your gentle touch. I spun around to see you there, And there you held a sign. It said, WANTED “Is your love still alive?” And I smiled Swept you to my side Then I said As I looked into your eyes “My Desert Rose, I’ll never leave your side. Can’t you see? I’ve waited for you all my life. You’re the one, Who I’ll lay with every night. From now on, Everything will be all right. ‘Cause you’re WANTED Until the day that I die.” [This message has been edited by Ron K. Fox (edited 11-02-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
yes theres a very cool song here... excellent writing...perfect lyrical flow very creative... And she wrote While the tears swelled in my eyes “As you know, I’ve been hurt so many times. I’ve been burned, By the flames of passion’s fire. And it feels, Like this flame is getting higher. And my love, For you is out of getting out of line. So I’ll leave, Don’t worry I’ll be fine. ‘cause my heart, Can’t take being broken one more time.” =================== why I can hear Martina McBride and Alan Jackson dueting from here  cool write take care jm |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
You know, my friend......I have the sneakey suspicion that you really are a country songwriter!! Take it from me, I play music for a living, and this one is a definite top-notch duet!!! I like JM's choice of singers, or even Garth Brooks and Shania. Good job, Ron.......need a keyboard player in your band?!!  Follow your dream! |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
definitely a lyric  I am a personal assistant to a country singer, songwriter, producer etc (who opened for Garth in Central Park, Sunny  )and I have heard a million of 'em, read a millionmore wanna be's and this one with just a little work could be a very successful country song ) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
yes, it is a song, Ron...and this is so touching. You are developing quite a rhythm here...lol...now, what's the name of that bar again? I've got the next round. |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Oh yeah Ron I hear a sweet song in this. Just great. Keepem comin. Juls |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey RON!! very lyrical story you're telling here and I like the movement.....love the title!! Get out the old acoustic or sit down to the old ninety eights and pull out a melody to embrace this one Ah....who was playin in that band?? ...take care...ethome Love the storyline by the way!! |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
Well thanks everyone...Thanks JM for the kind response Sunny, I'm not a country singer...can't even play an empty bottle...but I do like writing lyrics...never made a penny doing it though Beki...well talk to your people...I need a job!...well I have one with lousy pay... Thanks for the kind response Thank you Serenity...meet you for a shot at the Low Down Heart saloon Thanks Juls...I sure will try Ethome...I think Hank Williams Jr is coming over to waych the football game...not his style but he may have an idea LOL..thanks for stopping by Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
take this and stomp some music into it and we will all have known you when.... |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
It's been years since I plucked a guitar, but I tell you what, I think this would make a great song, a few repetitions and you have it., it's all there, it's great. Pursue it! "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I simply love it.....great poem to put to music. I'm a sucker for those ole country songs especially when they have a happy ending |
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