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With Laser Light
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With Laser Light |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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With Laser Light what more can we ask for as laser light c-d's are popped into play computer screen light is the foray of words to set to music's strain and thoughts of you come again printer sits there with green light ready to capture words of weave to make the heart heady and to leave the wine behind tap tap click click do the words implore that I would wish to hear a knock on the door or would I just as well be left alone to work and edit so that these words and words alone could atone for the deeds left undone for the song left unsung for the bells that have not rung for the photos left unhung for what I have not yet become in this laser light world Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
What a song you make!!! This one really made me think  And I must add....now I see this is how it's done!!! Peppermint Life is a Wheel |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
I like this. especially the "undone" lines...its another poem within a poem. |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Yep, a song for sure Karilea....I was tapping my foot, tapping the keys, and getting all confused ~ as I can't walk down the street and chew bubble gum at the same time! Great poem. Bonnie |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Peppermint if you are thinking, I did my job...thanks for letting me know... Ron...FYI...I'm always a little "undone...", thanks for reading... Bonnie, I officially take you into my world of klutziness where I reign as "Queen!"...thanks for reading...and thanks for the giggle... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari, this is superb, excellant, and I love it. Now as for getting the beat right, I know I'm out of step, I'll just have to try to stay sort of within the tempo. Love this, I really do Take care Marsha  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"for what I have not yet become" Wonderful Sunshine! Oh how I love your closing lines ... great thoughts here! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ Ohhhhhh ! I likeeee ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Rainydays Member
since 2000-10-21
Posts 324 |
Sunshine, an interesting format lends itself well to this idea of being undone. I enjoyed your approach to this theme. Thank you ~ Rainydays |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
"for what I have not yet become" and for what you are very soon to be. . . wonderful my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Set the song to music because music will last to eternity. Loved this one much and yes it leaves much to ponder in afterthought. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Marsha, never mind the tempo, just never break your fingers, ok?... Kit...thoughts are traveling far these days, thank you... Marge, whoopee!... Rainydays...come back soon, and enjoy all of the various formats you shall find... Hummm, Sven...so what do you know that I do not?...hummm?....lol...thank you... Mark, afterthought is sometimes more ponderous than forethought...but you see, we need both, always...thank you... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Sunshine, I know that you're going to become a poet. . . But wait!! You already are. . . ------------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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