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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas 
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And the sun, the sun rose on the dew As sprouting ash poles came into view A cadence rolls out for men on the move Onward to battle, their valor re-prove And the sun, the sun rose on the dew As ranks of archers came into view A saber went down, the arrows went up A message miscarried to a life abrupt The English knew not their Saracen foe And suffered a short, sharp rain of arrow Eyes went up while bodies went down Porcupine soldiers on the ground Heathens swarmed over the dew laden hill Eager to have the Infidels killed And with the sweep of a curved, wicked blade White heads and hands went rolling away Just another skirmish in Acre that day 'Fore the siege, battle, Crusade went away History still lives if you know where to look Pinned like a butterfly, trapped in a book Alicat If I were any more laid back, I'd be in a coma. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
'History still lives if you know where to look Pinned like a butterfly, trapped in a book' Excellent writing, Ali! Fantastic! Denise |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Alicat- WOW! this is awesome...very powerful. 'Eyes went up while bodies went down Porcupine soldiers on the ground' 'History still lives if you know where to look Pinned like a butterfly, trapped in a book' i like this alot. a valuable reminder here.  -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Loved your writing Alicat.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"History still lives if you know where to look Pinned like a butterfly, trapped in a book" Excellent Ali! Incredible image-filled writing with great closing lines! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
i would have picked a favorite line...but then it would be the whole story told...excellent job! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
ah, yes the English, my mother's side is English, my father is Irish, this one did me in, I absolutely loved every word. "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Great poem Alicat! A tale well told. . . ----------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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