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The One Time He Cried
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The One Time He Cried |
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Sunshine
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Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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The One Time He Cried Consummate cowboy, grew up on South Dakota plains tenth child of twelve, a man while still a child nothing about him ever showed to be raucous or wild he looked life square in the eye, never did complain grew to be the quintessential man, long and lean did all of his cowboying up while still a teen had a love for land, folk, all nature at hand had that cowboy way with him, he was quite the man for a little blonde girl, he was her cowboy dad dressed in jeans and striped shirt, he took her hand excursions to fairs, or just to see nature's scenes he was her center, her rock, her dad in blue jeans his smile lit his face, she copied his grin she tried so hard to learn the best from him when times were tough, or troubles grew sore to his grin he'd add a wink, which tickled her more he was her rock, her foundation and strength she knew Dad would be there, he'd go to any length and she watched as she grew, saw the similarities, too in all her uncles, his brothers, and her love for them grew came a summer graduation, and along with it the news an uncle in the 'Dakotas, working fields under skies of blue was felled by an illness, the summer skies brewed her dad looked distraught, but then came more news the brother was doing fine, would be a short hospital stay by the very next morn, uncle's soul had risen away caught up quick by this life cut short, desolation rose daughter caught dad set back by frustration's pose and he cried, wretched with deep, desolate waves she wanted so to reach out, but knew she couldn't save him from this pain, this inconsolable passing of life she left this man, stepped back, to be held by his wife and her father grew in her eyes, he was human after all and in her memories of him, he still stands so very tall. ©Karilea Rilling Jungel 23 September 2000 [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 09-23-2000).] |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Oh wow!...Sunshine..I'm speechless... HUSG "If you always do what you've always done You'll always be where you are right now." Author Unknown |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Within the true grit and strength comes the pouring of the heart. Lovely verse my friend and so full of tenderness and STRENGTH....as I have learned through the years myself. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Karilea this is one heck of a story! Loved it  <*\\\>< I know not what the future holds, but I know Who holds the future. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This was a beautiful portrayal, Sunshine... I like the child's eye view of discovery of vulnerability in the seemingly almighty...great job with this! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Good morning Sunshine, This is very beautiful, and very well written. Thanks for sharing this. Bill |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this is very tender, sincere and touching sunshine ... you were very lucky to have this kind of realtionship with your father and he inspired this special piece in you jm |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Cindy...we don't see that often, thank you dear... Mark, exactly, he was tender strength... Thank you Rebecca... Serenity, it was a wonderful childhood... Bill, he taught how to share, and he did it well... Janet Marie, he still inspires...thank you... Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Sunshine, superb story my friend. . . I know that your father meant much to you. . . and as we get to know him through poems like this. . . we can see why. . . Excellent. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Sunshine... From inside of your heart you've painted a picture of a loving father for us to know and share.......that means a lot to those of us who didn't have one..... Thank you for this.... Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
This was very beautiful Sunshine...so full of love and admiration. I really loved the part, "he was human after all".....for until I saw my grandfather cry, who is like my father, I never new.......Just a very tender hearted, emotional write. Enjoyed it alot. Jenn E |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ What a wonderful sharing story. So tenderly portrayed - so sweet from the daughter's memory. *Hugs* to you, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sven, thank you and everyone, for allowing me to share him so openly... Sunny, he would have loved your smile, and you would have received many fine hugs from him...I know... Jenn, then you know, don't you...? Marge, he would have adored your spirit, and would have shared many a wonderful story with you... Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
A lot of sincerity on parade here, Sunshine, and done very well, too. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
This touched my heart...it's very clear through your writing that this was a man to be admired and loved. A beautiful tribute to your father~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
A perfect portrayal of a tender heart... writen with the most amazing grace... Wonderful work, Karilea... regards, sudhir |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Can't beat a story like this - heart-filled and real. Bueno! C |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Karilea this is a wonderful, an absolute gem. Oh he sounds like a lovely dad That's one of my only regrets that I never knew mine nothing scandalous, he died when I was 5. I had two more after that, my mam wed again, a prime example of hope triumphing over experience, but they weren't the best ideas she'd ever had. Anyway this is an amazingly beautiful poem clearly showing your love for him. This is a class poem. Take care Marsha |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Sunshine, A wonderful write and so heartfelt, your love for him and how he cherished the love of his little blonde headed girl....just beautiful!! Marcy |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well you folks just knock my socks off...I didn't expect to see this one come back up... but I'm glad it did, and just so y'all know, my Dad is smiling on each and every one of you for making his little girl speechless... a feat in itself... tender thank yous to each and every one of you... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is great, Sunshine! |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
wow this is touching and beautiful, makes me wish I had know my dad...haven't seen him in 20 years.... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
You are touching me deep...excellent writing..James |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Karilea,' A very touching and loving story Very well written. It flowed as though someone was telling this story aloud Liz |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
very heartfelt Sunshine..nicely written indeed.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is beautifully done, Karilea. Very touching and a wonderful tribute! Denise |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Karilea - This is obviously a very personal tribute - It's chuck full of love, admiration, and sincerity... and poetry... Nice job..  |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
This is beautiful! A stunning and very special tribute to your father. I see you inherited his kindness  amazing emotion in this piece! our parents will always be with us...no matter where we go, or what we do take care. amy |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Karilea, as the twig is bent so shall the tree grow. You can tell you had a lovely father by the way you have grown. What a fitting tribute to him. Excellent. Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
It amazes me, the compassion of this place. To me, my Dad stood heads above most other dads...yet, each is special to us in their way. I appreciate the opportunity to talk about my folks, because somewhere down the line, the mold was broke, and we'd all be better for folks like them. So thank you all, and to you Kethry, for noticing that the twig was bent. Indeed it was, and I am the better for it. I am still reaching for the stars when I talk of my Dad, and Mom, and someday, someone will help me reach them. Thank you. Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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