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Beth
Member

since 2000-07-06

Posts 468
WA, Australia

0 posted 2000-10-26 11:29 AM

With thousands of words I could whisper
No words escape my sobbing throat
I only know the true beauty of you
and I
Fleeting moments of anger
A suspended lifetime of bliss
And a love so natural
It appeared in a moment of time
So quickly here
but also gone
Without you
I am nothing
Memories
Thoughts
Knowledge
They are all excessive wants
Not shared with you
I need not societies charm
My acceptance mostly unwarranted
My heart has been stolen
Now
I
Want
It
Back!

~Cherie~

Sunnyone
Member Ascendant

since 2000-07-06

Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England

1 posted 2000-10-26 11:53 AM

Hi Beth.....
I enjoyed the whole poem, but loved the ending!! Excellent!!

Follow your dream!

Marsha

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-10

Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England

2 posted 2000-10-26 12:15 PM

Beth, this is a great poem, and like Sunny I love the ending. You've  really written this so well, superb.
Take care
                Marsha

Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

3 posted 2000-10-26 12:18 PM

Excellent Beth!!

To take back what is ours. . . the first step. . . well done my friend. . . and it's nice to see you back. . .

-------------------------------------------------------

That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

4 posted 2000-10-26 12:51 PM

So nice to see you back my friend. A wonderful verse to come back with also and the ending says so much. You and you alone are the most important because without you there is no giving of yourself to one that deserves it.

Ron K. Fox
Senior Member

since 2000-10-24

Posts 925

5 posted 2000-10-26 12:52 PM

My heart has been stolen
Now
I
Want
It
Back!

No need to say more. Ron

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

6 posted 2000-10-26 01:26 PM

Hi Beth,

Very nicely written Beth. I hope that you do get your heart back.

Bill

Beth
Member

since 2000-07-06

Posts 468
WA, Australia

7 posted 2000-10-26 11:22 PM

~Sunny1...Thankyou so much for reading!~

~Marsha...Im glad you liked it. Thanks!~

~Sven...So very true my dear friend. I am happy to be back and I thank you so dearly!~

~Mark....Again, It is great to be back. I wrote this in a matter of moments but it means so much. I appreciate your kind words my dear friend!~

~Ron...Thankyou so much for reading. I thank you for taking the time!~

~Bill...Well Im hoping that my love will return and I can have a two for one deal..Get him back and my heart too..Thankyou so much my friend!~

~Cherie~

snowpants
Member Elite

since 2000-09-16

Posts 2061
KS

8 posted 2000-10-27 01:44 AM

Yes, very nicely written! I really enjoyed!!

sp

Of all sad words of tongue or pen, the saddest are these: 'it might have been.' -John Greenleaf Whittier

peppermint35
Senior Member

since 2000-05-28

Posts 1106
Texas, USA

9 posted 2000-10-27 01:46 AM

I hope you do get that package deal...wonderful writing

Peppermint
Life is a Wheel

Beth
Member

since 2000-07-06

Posts 468
WA, Australia

10 posted 2000-10-27 09:05 PM

~snowpants....Thankyou. I am so happy that you enjoyed it!!~

~peppermint35....Well the good news is I got what I wanted...The whole package. Thankyou so much!!~

~Cherie~

poutprincess
Senior Member

since 2000-07-06

Posts 735
Perth, Western Australia, Australia

11 posted 2000-10-29 01:22 AM

you know i like this change in style! very good! and im very happy that you got what you wanted!

~Dawn

"Steady as it comes, right down to you, I've said it all, so maybe we're a Bliss of another kind" Bliss-Tori Amos

brian madden
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

12 posted 2000-10-29 05:46 PM

Cherie... and make sure you get it all back.. sorry for the heart ache and I hope all is well. wonderfully written poem.

"an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree
the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women".
Patti Smith

Beth
Member

since 2000-07-06

Posts 468
WA, Australia

13 posted 2000-10-29 08:59 PM

~Thankyou so much for replying Dawn and Brian...I appreciate you taking the time!!~

~Cherie~

Kit McCallum

Administrator

Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

14 posted 2000-10-29 09:08 PM

Wonderful expression in this piece Beth ... I loved the impact of the powerful ending, beautiful!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Beth
Member

since 2000-07-06

Posts 468
WA, Australia

15 posted 2000-10-29 09:34 PM

~Kit...Thankyou for your kind words...It seems the ending had the impact I needed for my love to return...Again thankyou so much!!~

~Cherie~

Charisma

Member Ascendant

since 2000-09-30

Posts 5906
lost in blue pages

16 posted 2000-10-30 07:33 PM

mm..this one almost slipped through my fingers, glad that I have seen it before it fade away......you have expressed your feelings very well....well done

Charisma

Beth
Member

since 2000-07-06

Posts 468
WA, Australia

17 posted 2000-10-30 09:48 PM

~Charisma....Thanks for replying!!~

~Cherie~

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