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Will You?
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Will You? |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA 
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Will you be able to forget? She put her hand on me Will you keep harping on regret Blinding what you see. And even though I’m not at fault Will it be you're only thought Can all the things we learned from this Deter from all we’ve fought Can this be what we thought it was A love to build so strong Or is it simple passion Confused by things gone wrong. I only ask to have the chance To find if this is true No other way to really know The answer lies in you. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
..."Can this be what we thought it was a love to build so strong or is it simple passion confused by things gone wrong" Spiked, I gotta say this rhyme whispers ... "what if's" Thanks for a great read I enjoyed it  Coco |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Rich...yer quite lovely, y'know that? and I agree with Coco...just whispers "what ifs". A thoughtful piece here. and a sweet dream...I think I'm getting sleepy, very sleepy...grin. |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Thank you coco and serenity. Looks as if you realized better than I what I was saying. Again Thank You, Rich |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Rich...sigh...this speaks of such sadness and regret...what ifs? yes...but also a letting go of a dream that couldnt be. |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
this is magnificent and beautifully written. |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Thank you paula and rosebud can't say we never regret that which we let go |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
enjoyed reading it, ..and also the if's came through for me....more a question for yourself maybe....I mean....sound if you are self not quite sure about it... but if the if's....all work out good for you....than your love becomes stronger. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Well put if's! Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
Oh my... --------- I only ask to have the chance To find if this is true No other way to really know The answer lies in you. --------- I would also like to know. I think so many of us have been in that position. "Leaning on the space that lies between, afraid to say or do. Wanting the words, the taste. Wanting the move to be made by you." Sometimes it's safer to wait for them to make a move, but does it really hurt less? Beautiful poem, nonetheless. (Is that really one word, I honestly don't know?) Much love all, Krissie ~*Those words... Oh, how I long to hear ...those words Tell me...*~ |
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