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I made you cry
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I made you cry |
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desperado Member
since 1999-05-24
Posts 312FT Hood,Tx 
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wish you could see the pain I hide the things I know which I have lied the people and places I've turned aside and the dreams that slowly bled and died I remember the faces I'd used before trapped in silence with a slamming door left them laying broke on the floor walked away and closed my eyes once more inside my mind I saw your face saw you laying there in that place still wearing satin, leather, and lace tears falling down in some exotic race your hair arrayed like a dream come true the wind kissing it, not knowing what to do a picture of breathtaking beauty, of you all doing things to me that I never knew too bad your voice I could never hear ambused by doubt, I ran in fear I ran until there was no one near to live in solitude from year to year with your memory here I'll lie until the day I'll fade and die I'll be haunted by the tears in your eye all because I made you cry "There were times in my life when I was going insane tryin to walk through the pain when I lost my grip and I hit the floor yeah I thought I could leave but couldn't get out the door" - Aerosmith "Amazing" |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
Yeah, the mistakes we make when we are afraid of committment. love can be scary sometimes, and we don't realize what we had 'til it gone. Ron [This message has been edited by Ron K. Fox (edited 10-26-2000).] |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Desperado, what can I say but it's a pleasure to read your penned poetry once again. The expression you weave into each verse is truly captivating... Well done my friend!  Coco |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Wonderful write, desperado! Love can be frightening, and far too many don't realize what they've actually got until it is gone. Great read!! sp  Of all sad words of tongue or pen, the saddest are these: 'it might have been.' -John Greenleaf Whittier |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
your poem have moved my heart, and brought a tear in my eye, feeling the emotions back from a lost love. it could be him, using your words. you have penned your feelings so well. take care.....Charisma |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I'm impressed! This is very sensitive poetry coming from a man! "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
I like this a lot, everything it says... just wish I did'nt have memories like this too. All we can hope for is that we learned what we were supposed to and try to make things right. Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
You write so tenderly and with such heart... |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
Good poem, I'm just wondering what made her cry. Maybe it's good that we don't know, adds a bit of a mystery. Good read milkbone, good read. ;p "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." -Charles Brugnot |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Des: There was a lot of pain and regret in this one. Seems like a restless peace also. I hope that makes sense. Great writing! ((HUGS)) *Jenn* |
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